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File: e4408d4a3610e60⋯.gif (1.43 MB, 320x232, 40:29, first prize.gif)


Post your profile here and I will grade it.

Real grades, no jokes. More accurate than you think it will be.


So what you're saying is they'll be any degree of accurate at all.



Post your profile



How do you know it'll be my profile?



I don't care, post a profile and I'll grade it








every kink filled out so it's impossible to know what you really enjoy, description is purely inlines (and not even good ones), barely any custom kinks




45 is a pretty nice number, highly notable in base-360 and divisible by 5.




Post another profile






Post another profile




doesn't exist




Post a profile




Post a real profile



That one doesn't exist.



Post a real profile



I just said, that doesn't exist.



Post a real profile


I am filled with self-loathing and jealously.







Grade this disgusting canon shit




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Jesus fucking Christ dude, stop spamming yourself all over the fucking place.


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do it again in hexadecimal







1/0 in hex would still be 1/0

you fail robot math please report to remedial robot school for special robots


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Rate this autistic 30.000+ words worth of edge.






64, fill out some more non-custom kinks and clean up your writing:

"young boy"

"time and time again"



"it's own"




also "each each"






either add more inlines or more text in the description, and fill out a lot more kinks, either custom or non



Oh come on, the description's got plenty of text. I don't want it to take an hour for someone to get the gist of my profile.



It's not about getting the gist, but the lack of kinks is the major thing



Even when they're expanded?



Gladly! Though, beyond young boy being an oxymoron, it's own being an incorrect apostrophe, and "time and time again" being just bad, what do you mean by clean writing?



Not an oxymoron, but the contradictory one. Fuck.



"Perform" and "apolitical" are the correct spellings. Your writing is littered with mistakes like those. Clean it up.



I'm taking the subkinks into account. You only have 20 non-custom kinks. You should have AT LEAST 50, and no more than 200. Either go all in with the custom kinks and don't use any default ones, or go through the kink list and mark everything that you have some kind of strong feeling about one way or the other.

Also, a strong profile description serves 3 purposes:

1. Gives strangers an idea of your writing style and personality.

2. Provides a reference for people you're playing with so they don't need to stop and ask you questions.

3. Helps people who want to approach you come up with scene ideas.


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>AT LEAST 50 customs>>135029



>You only have 20 non-custom kinks. You should have AT LEAST 50

>AT LEAST 50 customs

Reading comprehension clearly isn't your strong suit so I'm not surprised writing isn't either



Regraded this one, it's a 79 now


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Actually I'll just regrade everyone's.

























why the regrade? What did you suddenly decide you liked?



It's okay, Anon, all you ever need is a completely meaningless relative number and no advice whatsoever.



>Everything you have a strong feeling towards

>Ignoring the Maybe list

>Discarding the Yes list

>Faves or Nos are the way to go

You are in no position to give advice.



I'm starting to question your grading authority dude


Let's get some actual rating here. 1-5, 3 is average


2/5 I know this is just you messing around and would like to see a description. Everything else is there so it's not trash, just below average.


2/5 A mildly amusing SS13 reference marred by a lack of effort.


0/5 Please make something if you want it to be propely rated.


3/5 I was considering a 4 until I hit your description. It's got no end of effort put into it but unless you're only looking for story-driven this profile is average.


3/5 Interesting scene ideas brought down by a complete lack of backstory and uninspiring custom kinks. The custom kinks alone cost you a point.


4/5 The description contained within an inline is a novel idea, don't get me wrong. It would benefit you to have the text contained in a dropdown too. OOC notes will be ignored by almost everyone.


2/5 Bland. Painful to find any sort of emotion or enthusiasm for what you do in every part of your profile, which is only compounded by lackluster customs and grammatical errors. Add to that the fact that your weathered survivor is somehow submissive, and you've got a worse mess than a shitty MRE.


1/5 Enjoy your joke profile.


2/5 You learn nothing of your character in the description. It's pure setting fluff and you haven't even managed to get a viewer invested in your world.


3/5 Essentially a hub with kill/ break lists and images. Does anyone even read all the things you've done?


3/5 Could benefit from some formatting and a grammar check. Also, please confirm your choice of adjectives.


4/5 Fairly immersing with good grasp of a character concept. A few customs for sex, especially if you're considering non-toons, would be appreciated.


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>marksman gets a 1

>some retarded furshitter and generic weeaboo with disgustingly formatted profiles get 4



I don't think this thread was serious in any way. Pretty much what >>135055 said.


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Subjective opinions incoming!


>>134903 Pass. No substance.

>>134909 Pass

>>134927 Pass twice.

>>134937 Bookmark. Combative Sex good, Ageplay/Vore questionable

>>134954 Bookmark. Would be Note if 1 more year passes.

>>134959 Note. Interests good, but I don't have any Russian characters. Open up a little.

>>134964 Pass. Worth 281 XP in a boss battle, don't wanna fuck it.

>>135000 Pass. No interest. Death, Pain, Ageplay. Bad Times Ahead.

>>135013 Bookmark. Seems fun, maybe too passive. Could go higher in a year.

>>135017 Pass. Not my thing.

Feed me more.


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And now: "I Never Asked For This" Edition


>>134882 Note. Could be fun, would send Chuunibyous.

>>134824 Note. Sounds like a good time.

>>134705 Note. Could be fun, but not sure what to send or why. Questionable!

>>134609 Note. Everything reasonable, would quest.

>>134597 Pass. Naw.

>>134261 Bookmark. Almost...

>>134176 Dinnerplate Dick Dude

>>134174 Bookmark. Interested! Cautious. Stop deleting characters.

>>133980 Bookmark. Maybe.

>>133977 Bookmark. Like pictures. Yellow card, possible bitchbreaker traits, 10 yard penalty.

>>133897 Bookmark. Maybe.

>>133624 Pass. Nah.

>>133625 Good meme.

>>133624 Pass/10, not Michael Bowser. Being rejected might accidentally excite him. Conflicting.

>>133493 Pass. You put a lot of work into this pass. Which looks terrible without a monitor bigger than your fictional dick. Which is really saying something.

>>133450 Play.

>>133140 Bookmark. Questionable.

>>133131 Play. Would build profile just to approach.

>>132917 Pass. Send to therapy. Would read logs though.

>>132906 Play. Seems fun.

>>132886 Pass. Purely due to player responses on the board. Red Flags.

>>132665 Note. Very close to Play. Cute, not sure what to send.

>>132564 Man I dunno

>>132533 Pass. Ageplay. So close.

>>132289 Play. Whole character list has some gems.

>>132247 Bookmark. Cautious, potential. Would approach in public.

>>132046 Play.

>>132001 Will respond once I finish reading all these custom kinks. Oh wait, Ageplay. So close. Reconsider in 3 years.



The modifier for using inlines previously wasn't being taken into account, and I added some measures to stop bad profiles from gaming the system for higher scores. I also previously wasn't testing for subkinks. My grading isn't subjective.


>Everything you have a strong feeling towards

If you feel strongly that it's a Maybe, then put it there, you fucking simpleton. I just mean don't fill out every fucking kink.

Post your profiles.



Please grade the profile, and not whether you personally find the character sexy or not.



Can do: 75. Work on that writing, way too much passive voice, mis-hyphenated and misused words.



Ah, thank you for the quick response? Can you elaborate a little more and give me specific parts to fix?


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"each and every" is cliched

"little bit" is redundant

A million billion passive voice "can be"s

"Avant garde" and "tight lipped" should be hyphenated


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you're crazy


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It's my first hub profile and I'm having a design crisis. Fair warning: Monsters ahoy


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aesthetically pleasing. good inline, but you could stand to soften the edges a little.

a few minor technical errors in the little bit of actual writing that is present, but nothing truly offensive. mostly in the punctuation of subordinate clauses.

ergonomic kink organization.

could stand to refine some of your word choice.

cute. will message later.



read the filename, sweetie

you crazy jokester



really cute girl and profile, not sure how to approach tbqhwyfam




1. could you use any more BBcode if you tried

2. seriously no one is ever going to make it through these collapsibles

3. please god free me

4. don't use "???" just say "Unknown," because poor punctuation loses you points

5. a myriad of spelling, grammar, and style errors but the profile is so long that it hardly matters


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Read all of them I dare you



Bweh. I've been considering scrapping it, honestly. Just might.



honestly 80 is a good grade



Oh, cool. I thought this was some SAT shit for some reason and so I interpreted 80 as abysmal.

Bweh. I'll look into the issues later then.



It's out of 100, though it's possible to get more than 100 through extra credit. 80 is the cutoff for what I would consider "good."



Show us a 100+ profile.



I'll try and find one but no promises



I want to see the highest thing you can find.

I'm also curious how low your scoring system can go. Is a completely blank profile a 0, or can you go below blank profile by being awful?



Generally you only get a zero if you trip an autofail condition, like having 'yiff' in your description or an emoticon like '._.'. I've seen some random characters get as low as 9, but this profile


is one of the lowest I've seen (sorry, buddy) at 18.

A completely blank profile might still get some points if they have features that generally correlate with a good profile, like a single-word name, and might get points for not having things, like links to other profiles (which often indicates profile play, and nets you a single point for not having) or a species that's usually shitty (like 'Pony').

The highest score I got out of Story Driven LFRP is this profile at 108:


Trailing behind, this one at 97:


And 95:




As for going below zero, only possible if you fill out every non-custom kink and do literally everything else wrong.



So if I fill out every non-Custom kink into 'no', my profile name is 4 words long, links to 2 other profiles (neither of them mine), and the rest of the content just says "Lets Fuck ^_^;", how low am I?



You mean the one who did the same thing as marksman, but better, and the one who took the time to figure out how a semi-canon might fit into the setting while keeping her original appeal? Rewrite your profile and we'll see if you deserve a higher score.



thanks for the carpal tunnel fucker

the resultant profile gets a 13:


for not abusing BBcode, not having bad punctuation like multiple exclamation points/question marks in a row, and not explicitly listing a species that might be bad (half points)



I forgot I did actually add a floor on the kinks so you can't get negative points



>my icon in your description

anon pls


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Any and all feedback would be appreciated! Don't hold back!




fucking bananas with the BBCode, no species listed




>I'm gonna be doomed to mommyhood for the rest of my fertile little life, and your gonna help me make the most of it!



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My initial reaction

>pic related

but then I saw

>Orientation: Straight

o-oh okay




I am living, breathing trash. Thanks for pointing it out. I'll have to comb over everything and make sure it's ironed out.

What is wrong with BBcode though? Is it really better to have a giant wall of text? I don't know if I could really replace all the BBcode without a solid day or two doing graphic design and stuff solely for the profile. Is the BBcode the only thing keeping it from scoring higher in your eyes?


S-sorry. This is my baby crazy profile.



22 bold tags, 8 collapses, 26 color tags

either trim it down or cut down drastically on your tag usage. it might look pretty but it's hard to read and you can make your profile look good with far feweer



I use the Dark theme, so I didn't actually take the color issue into account. Thanks for the honest feedback! Is there anything wrong with the content of the profile?


Just checking progress on a WIP




"facade" ->"façade"

"to it's extreme" -> "to its extreme"

"sure to be" -> "surely"

"found herself to be pretty effective" -> "found herself pretty effective"

"She has to refit most garments and armor that she tries on"

"down and dirty" -> something less cliché

"upon it's golden" -> "upon its golden"

etc. etc.

consider scrapping unnecessary BBcode like the collapse that contains all your flavors. either get rid of those and just state what each one has in common in one drop-down, or center your profile around them and scrap all the other shit. stuff like "Motivation" just doesn't need to be in a collapse.

maybe try getting rid of all of the BBcode and making a profile that looks good that way, and then you can gussy it up


54, but will probably go up a lot when finished



oh yeah didn't even notice shit like this:

"with a rifles, bows, and daggers," -> "with rifles, bows, and daggers,"



What does your software look for, by the way?



w-who said it was software



A friend of mine posted parts of software designed to scan profiles and rate them. Certain words increase or decrease the score, as do specific customs. So far you seem to be following the pattern, my guess is to test the system.


File: 67cf30a484b9e5c⋯.gif (367.38 KB, 320x180, 16:9, applebloom-evil-plan-o.gif)



Species: Ponytaur (with double herm genitals, a set for each crotch)

Copy-and-paste random parts of the Sweetie Belle Wiki page, for content:


Abuse BBCode (Open tags but don't close them. Close unrelated tags. Thirty or forty times.)

Change 'Lets Fuck ^_^;' to 'Lets Yiff!!! ^_^y;;' (It's the wrong 'Lets' anyway)



don't need to run it, it would be a zero because "Equestria" and "Ponyville" are blacklisted



Why won't you let me build a monstrosity? D:

Alright, how low can we get without triggering any blacklists, I wonder…



spam [b][/b] twenty times, followed by !!




Added some regular kinks, and what results in positive points?




having regular kinks actually brings your score down if you barely have any. the grading rubric is really good at sniffing out WIPs so you won't get a high score until you finish it.




Thank you for testing the limits of this system.



Aha! So you ARE using a system. Congrats on getting to a tier of autism not even Fai can manage.



nah nigga i was grading this shit by hand, you fucking dumbass




Again, congrats on the autism. It won't improve your chances at RP though.



"Hey guys, come post your profile in this thread and I'll grade you"

"LOL, this guy is using a standard to grade people! what an autist! good thing I came into his thread and called him out"





Checked that autism.



Honestly it sounds like you're using some sort of program, or that your standard is incredibly shit with the way it's filtering out / blacklisting certain words which is just ineptitude of the highest order when it comes to classifying something's quality.

Unless you're just super fucking autistic and enjoy talking about the way you grade things in a manner no human would speak of naturally.

That could be an option too.




I'm sure he's proud, but the speed at which you're doing this just solidifies that you're using a program for this and not actually doing any reading.

Kill yourself fam, your grading system is trash and so is this thread. Thanks.



Post your profile



So it can be graded by your arbitrary rules that are blacklisting kinks and specific words because you're incapable of separating your own fetishes and likes from a system that, most would assume - is meant to gauge the quality of a profile?

Again, kill yourself fam.



Post your profile



Also lol that you compared me to this guy



Comparing autism to autism. You blacklisted Ponies and Sergals, for example.




Literally the best profile there is bae.



I have it on good authority that this entire board and site is trash.

At least this trash is consistent with itself? I wouldn't actually use it as a meaningful rubric. Strictly speaking, having a joke somewhere in your profile "Any setting is fine, as long as it's not Equestria or something." would turn your profile into a 0. Along with numerous other problems. Anyone taking this seriously (and modifying their profile to earn more points) is missing the point.

But it's mildly entertaining trash, at least.



Anyone modifying their profile to earn less points while still having an otherwise human-response 'Good Profile' gets super extra bonus cred though!





I don't have a reaction image for someone getting mad at me for saying ponies and sergals are shit



It's triggering the fuck out of me on a bad night, may as well run with it until I pop a vein.



>having a joke somewhere in your profile "Any setting is fine, as long as it's not Equestria or something." would turn your profile into a 0

Super important question: Would this work?




oops, this one was the 88


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>A fucking eighty eight

I was hoping for a hundred, fam.


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You're just salty as fuck that you can't get any RP, autist.



don't feel bad an 88 is pretty good tbh


you sound triggered


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Nah, I'm just enjoying my RP and not plugging profiles into a system to find the best ones. Good job putting a bitchbreaker above most of the other profiles, I'm sure that'll go well with this crowd~.



And here we have the autist trying to prove to themselves that they're not just human waste.

Fuck off, buddy-o, we grading profiles according to a silly system here.



>implying I give a fuck what "this crowd" thinks

I don't actually go to /erp/, you guys are turboautists, I just wanted profiles to grade



this guy has the right idea


Is this the new salt and bitching thread?



Post your profile



In the salt and bitching thread? No thanks.


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Not all ponyfag profiles are shit.

In fact, I know of a few that are (were) pretty sweet.

I wouldn't put "Equestria" or "Ponyville" into the blacklist, rather "brony" or "bronies". That should immediately earn you a -100 score. Even worse, "pegasister".



I'd lift the blacklist for any profiles in this thread obviously



No balls.


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Post your profile



>'human' in 'bad species' list

>extra points for pictures

No wonder those High Score profiles won. They had 50 pictures a piece.

This system is objectively bad. This is hilarious.



Post your profile



Go grade all these if you're so bored.



You're bored enough to be shitposting in this thread, post your profile


Let's post a friend's profile just for the fun of it. https://www.f-list.net/c/Queen%20Claudette




It's the only profile I've worked on myself so far.


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>Being graded lower than that because 'muh bbcode'.

>Completely ignores aesthetic use of it.

>Substantially less content, for lack of better word.

I understand subjectivity is a thing, but there's a difference between bias and holy-shit-what-am-I-doing. Not to mention you didn't even really point out any grammatical issues/spelling shit wrong (which is the same thing, by the by) nor the misuse of English structure. Honestly, after looking through your future grading, your 'system' is riddled with so much blacklisted shit that getting a high score isn't based on the actual quality of the profile, but strictly how likely you are to fuck them.

You can remove yourself from your own preferences to gain a sliver of objectivity in the matter or you can fall down this rabbit hole of autism you stumbled into. Seems like you picked the latter already, though.

It's a good thing you showed it though, 'cause now I can disregard your comments and keep my crippling insecurity safe. :^]




Sorry about your insecurity, m80







Damn. I feel stupid for overlooking such high-school level mistakes.

Do mistakes like that generally immediately turn off the average (decent) F-list user? I've been approached by nothing but empty profile trash. Is my writing just crap? I know subtlety is a bit lacking in the profile, but I kinda made it more for a smut focus rather than anything deep.

I did a bit of trimming and restructuring like you suggested.



Yea, sure, why not. I'll give this a fuckin' go.





I'd say your profile is set up very well. Going a bit overboard with all the customs though.




too many kinks filled out, dog, and… it's cool that you have all this info on your character, but there's just way too many collapses. you know no one's gonna read all that, right? there's such a thing as too much information. and it's riddled with grammatical and style errors.



I mean, probably not, I'm just pointing out ways you can improve. Writing skill isn't frequently a barrier between me and my partner if we're into the same things, they have a fuckable character, and they're a cool person.



Is it considered bad form to use the same inline as someone else who plays the same character? Not one they designed themself, just the same art.


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nah, fuck 'em. I'd be a bit worried if your profile was just the inline, but you don't sound like the kind of shitter who does that.




fuck you vauun


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kek posted this in the wrong thread.

rate me.



worst girl/10



not chihiro/10



not futaba/10


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what the fuck anon

I didn't even take this picture


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>someone is using my picture on /erp/

nani the fuck




>Implying Vauun is old enough to vote.

Good joke.




>not old enough to vote

makes you think



>Implying he's 18

Good joke famalam.





You already got rated Vauun you retard



literally where

c'mon now




go away faggot




i didn't post that but alright



i never got a note, anon




>Vauun is underage ban

>Cucklord Vauun isn't even old enough to be on here

Go to Gaia online and be shit there.




Is that good?


Whaat, why 0?




no, it's an F





+Art of best daughterfu

-Typical backstory

-No hook

-Poorly rendered inline

-Awkwardly written, filled with useless details

-No real way for partners to come into your story


you've got potential but it's very hard to see


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Yeah, yeah, I know. Pre-release canons are bad and I should feel bad. I do. Because GHSA's release date is never ever. ;-;




Nice. Thanks for humoring me, Anon!


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It's a canon


I keep changing the formatting and I don't know what's good or not

but feeling good about my profile is getting old so how 'bout that rating[/spoiler]



rip me

fucking spoilers


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Ha, jew



43, most likely because nokinks



but anon they're one click away come on gimme a 45



Not the grading anon, by why don't you just import your kinks to that character from the other, minus the one custom?



other profile is a 71




That sure sounds like effort


File: 8d376bb9a157f87⋯.png (40.82 KB, 739x386, 739:386, x.png)





Shoot, forgot to highlight the button.



is joke

I'll probably get around to it at some point


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for the record, anon, that poster isn't me, and your criticism is nearly completely indefensible



YouTube embed. Click thumbnail to play.


Bookmarked. I do have a few criticisms and compliments.

I'd center your first inline with the rest of the page. As it stands, the inline is just hanging out in your peripheral vision after you take your initial glance at it, which I found more annoying than interesting. Especially when you have the full version on the "Images" tab. Not saying it's inherently bad to do that, but at least make it something more than a shoehorned, neutered version of what we can already see.

The first two collapses on the page are entirely unnecessary, and it kinda turned me off from reading the rest of your profile (Though I of course did.)

You've got a good hook, if a little bit long, but "Save for one, that is." drew me back in when I was starting to get mildly bored. The only thing I can suggest is to make the intro to that line a little shorter.

The profile is paced well enough, though I found your use of "Oh, no." to be *ever so slightly* grating. But I'm just being a little nitpicky with that. Overall, though, the way you dropped off each paragraph kept me reading.

"Why didn't you tell me that dad was a Lord of Hell and that I'm half-demon?"

"I just didn't think it was that important, sweetie."

Great dialogue bits, I smiled. It gave me some better insight into Akemi moreso than some other previous bits of your description did. The anecdote at the beginning was decent enough, but this was pretty damn good. It's memorable.

As for the kinks, I'd like to see more customs. The collapses are a nice gimmick, but everyone you'd be interested in roleplaying with already knows what "Fave", "Yes", "Maybe", and "No" means, and I think you have the smarts to be able to tell who that is and isn't. I don't want to click an extra time to see what you're into when I already know what these four things mean, but I'm the kind of person to get autistic about that kind of stuff.

Overall, I'd say your biggest downfall on the profile is the formatting. I give your profile an 85. It was quite a nice read while listening to vid related.

My recommendation to you would be a few small, artsy inlines that you could throw into GIMP or Photoshop and make work. https://4walled.cc/ Here's a good resource for finding nice pictures to use as bases and what have you.



Thank you for the thorough comments! You certainly went into a lot more detail than I expected.

In regards to the inline, I was thinking of doing something different with it. I sorta like having Akemi's smug face on there, but maybe I could cut her out of a picture and make a transparent inline - then center it over the dropdowns? I'll have to play around with that.

As for the dropdowns themselves, I'd loathe to scrap the first big chunk of the profile, as I think it's important for establishing Akemi's standing in the world. Would a bit of a rewrite be better? Make it a bit more energetic to read? I certainly don't want people to get bored at the very start.

As for the kinks…honestly, I enjoy having the dropdown subkinks. I'm pretty autistic too I guess so having them all organized like that pleases me greatly. But I understand that it may seem tedious.

Thank you for your thoughts though! They'll certainly help me develop the profile to be even better!



Fix your grammatical errors. Make a fucking interesting character instead of this "my life is war" nonsense. Or, if you feel you can't manage that because it's your character's major focus, do something to color the profile. Is she a decorated sniper? Does she have a nickname among the enemy? Did any particular engagement shape her more drastically than the others? As it is you've made a woman unable to feel strongly on the outside but somehow she's definitely been changed, we just can't see it because her goals haven't shifted once since childhood.


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Well, I didn't want to imply that you should get rid of the information, I just think it should be taken out of the dropdowns. Don't remove any information, just remove the necessity to click twice to get to the rest of your profile.

The first two need to be removed, and the information inside them planted right in front of you. Use [hr] for a decent divider.

Glossing over it again, you could do some awesome stuff with a strip of inline and the flavor text in pic related.

I might shoot you a message later tonight.


If you can point out any major grammatical errors in the profile, I'd be more than happy to fix them. As it stands, I think it reads quite fine.

Anna's life is war, yes, but she wants to get out of it. This is her goal. Her goal when she was a child was to get away from her family. "The answer for her lied within the military." Now her goals have changed to getting out of the military because as it turns out, she doesn't like her friends getting shot all that much. Sounds like a pretty big change, right? "She's just gotta find a way to get to that greener side of the fence." Who'd have figured? If you'd read the profile at all or had a lick of reading comprehension you'd be able to figure out where she's heading in life.

No, she's not a decorated sniper. Again, read the profile. She's been doing this for a year. That's small fry shit when it comes to the army. She just happens to be a minor cut above the rest with a rifle.

>As it is you've made a woman unable to feel strongly on the outside but somehow she's definitely been changed

This is where I'm going to stop taking you seriously. If you're implying that all change that someone goes through is visible, especially in situations like these where a fragile mind is at stake, you are /pants-on-head retarded/.

Your criticisms just read like you have some sort of shit on me you want to air by posting fallacies anonymously.



" This abnormal proficiency with the gave her the role as a Squad Designated Marksman" With the what?

" Joining the Russian airborne infantry – The “VDV” – at the tender age of 20, she was particularly revered for her exceptional marksmanship skills, which stemmed from countless evenings on a sleepy farm, hunting vermin with a rusted pellet gun. " This is a single run on sentence that could easily be broken into two complete ones.

" wasn’t ready for what truly lied ahead for her." First off, it's lay when you're in past tense. Second, "actually lay ahead" might suit you better, but that's personal preference.

" originally sought after – A better life." sought after: adjective: in demand; generally desired. Consider chased, sought, or desired, but definitely drop the after.

I'll continue later.


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>" This abnormal proficiency with the gave her the role as a Squad Designated Marksman" With the what?

Didn't even notice that one. Must've glossed over it when I re-did the profile last night.

The second bit is a friend's writing, but it was in my final edit, so I'll take the blame for it.

These are good criticisms. I like it more than your original post. I'm fixing them now.



"[Lookin' for a way out]" and "She’s just gotta" You've switched from proper English to slang and back twice. Is this a biography about her or a dictated story?

"Anna Chaykovsky; born in 1962" http://writing.wisc.edu/Handbook/Semicolons.html

Death being in your Faves makes little sense based on your description of the kink.

"Pain is something she gets off on" It should be off to, not off on

"I like talking about it OOC, and Anna likes talking about it herself. Something about the quiet lethality, you know?" Quiet lethality of a sniper rifle?

"Alternatively, if you want to play into Anna's canon, I don't mind if you need to change up your character some to fit with her." Re-word this so it doesn't sound so one-sided.

"i don't fuckin know sometimes i like someone i can…" Capitalization.

You have Vaginal Sex (Giving) in your yes category, but nowhere does it have where you prefer (Receiving).

You have a favorite for Tentacles yet your setting is "realistic" and you have a custom No for Unexplained Rarities. Are we talking octopus zoophilia then? Oh, got zoophilia under No, so probably not.

Having Sex Driven under No and Instant Hookups under Yes might lead to some confusion.

She gets off to pain… and you have Genital Torture with Breast/Nipple Torture in your No list.


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>Death being in your Faves makes little sense based on your description of the kink.

It's what I like OOCly, Anon. It's fun to roleplay through. Kinks aren't entirely reflective of her.

In regards to the semicolon, I'll point my finger at my friend, and then back to myself.

I don't know where quiet lethality came from, but that's removed.

>"Alternatively, if you want to play into Anna's canon, I don't mind if you need to change up your character some to fit with her." Re-word this so it doesn't sound so one-sided.

I think I balanced it out well enough with "I'm also willing to change up Anna some" in the kink /directly above/ that one.

You have Vaginal Sex (Giving) in your yes category, but nowhere does it have where you prefer (Receiving).

Must've misread, or it's left over when I copied the kinks over from my worst-gender.

Again for the tentacles, left over from when I copied the kinks.

Same for instant hookups.

I'm going to stop copying kinks over, I think.

>and you have Genital Torture with Breast/Nipple Torture in your No list.

Yes, that's correct. I don't like having my tits sliced off, but bones broken is A-okay.

I'm weird.

I much more appreciate this than anything else. Thanks, Anon. Even if you are a tsun.



My suggestion to you is to elaborate in your gore custom then. If you want specific types of gore it helps to know that, agreed?

>Alternatively, if you want to play into Anna's canon, I don't mind if you need to change up your character some to fit with her.

Now let me explain what people see when they read this. "You do work for me to make it fit." Ideally you would word it so it comes across as "Let's collaborate to make things work."

I've noticed a few more kinks that seem out of place, including pegging, prostitution, hypnotism/mind control…

Should we even get into the camo pattern and Dragunov? Or how the 56th, from what I can find, wasn't a part of the VDV until at least 1989?




I'm on chat right now if you want to talk, I don't really want to spam up the board any further.

Points taken, though. SVD has been around since '63. Camo pattern is beyond my control, and I'm not really going to sweat it.

'56th was more or less "I can't find much information on VDV battalions in the Afghan war, so let's just roll with the 56th."



>"Pain is something she gets off on" It should be off to, not off on

Wrong. http://idioms.thefreedictionary.com/get+off+on



You're the one who wanted me to point errors out.


Oh, I stand corrected. Thank you.



>You're the one who wanted me to point errors out.

I never implied that to not be the case.


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Most of the issues I'd like to talk about concern your personal story and you've shown a resistance to listen to my input on that front.



Then I'll offer my perspective.

>Painful to find any sort of emotion or enthusiasm for what you do in every part of your profile.

This isn't what I seek to put in a profile. The profile is designed to display a character, not talk about how much I love roleplaying. I'm not even quite sure why or how you'd put something like that in a profile, but maybe that's just me. I don't particularly notice it if/when others put things like that in their profiles.

>which is only compounded by lackluster customs and grammatical errors.

I think we've taken care of that, largely.

>Add to that the fact that your weathered survivor is somehow submissive.

This is what really made me go "nigga what?" I don't understand how she would be a dominant. She's not a /survivor/, she's just slowly getting fucked in the head. She's got the logistics of an entire army supporting her, she's not some lone, live-off-the-land girl. As for the dominant bit, she's been:

-For all intents and purposes, abused by her family

-Lacked true friends her entire life, which was mostly because of her reserved nature.

-Taking orders her entire time in the military

When you put all that together, I don't get how it makes more sense for her to be a dominant. She's quiet, shy, and rather introverted. Not really the ingredients for a dom. This is probably the thing I'm most interested in hearing your perspective on, since I can only really imagine one angle where she'd be a dom.

>You mean the one who did the same thing as marksman, but better, and the one who took the time to figure out how a semi-canon might fit into the setting while keeping her original appeal? Rewrite your profile and we'll see if you deserve a higher score.

I don't know what you're talking about in the slightest, but Anna isn't a canon at all. That generic furry didn't do anything close to what I was shooting for, so, uh.

>Make a fucking interesting character instead of this "my life is war" nonsense.

I think it's pretty interesting to watch someone escape a military as traditionally brutal as the Soviet Army while dealing with mental and emotional trauma, but maybe that's just a subjective taste.

>Is she a decorated sniper? Does she have a nickname among the enemy? Did any particular engagement shape her more drastically than the others?

These are all things that would come with experience, which is something that Anna doesn't have a lot of. See my previous comment of "She's only been doing this for a year, which is small fry shit." My intention with Anna was to make an interesting soldier who wasn't some god of war.

>As it is you've made a woman unable to feel strongly on the outside but somehow she's definitely been changed, we just can't see it because her goals haven't shifted once since childhood.

Again, I've touched on this, but I'll do it again for the sake of completionism. People can absolutely change inwardly without showing it, and Anna /did/ show her change, regardless. She went from "Friendly and optimistic" to "Reserved and quiet." Her mental state changed much more than that.

As for the goals bit, that's blatantly wrong in my mind, and that's what gave me the impression you didn't bother trying to comprehend what I was going for, hence my initial hostility.

I hope this offers some insight as to where I'm coming from and where I'm going with her.


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Okay, so let's start with two major points. First off is the submissive side of her. When I hear Soviet Union female sniper, I think of the following people and the attached images. To give you an idea, there's 775 credited kills to the women in the first image. The last image is of Lyudmila Pavlichenko (309 confirmed kills which earned her the nickname Lady Death). I'm not saying Anna has to follow the same mold but when every example of women in combat in the Soviet era is like this or nurses…

And as for your last point, you don't establish that she was once friendly and optimistic. You state there's a change but only mention what she once was in a single sentence about her changing. Why was she friendly and optimistic when she had such a harsh upbringing? Had she bonded with her squadmates at some point, making the losses harder? And to top it all off you said she was friendly yet she lacked true friends because of her reserved nature. Those two statements don't mesh.


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The bit about optimism is a fair point, and I can most definitely make mention of it in the profile when I have time, but I still don't agree with you on the bit of submissiveness. These women certainly didn't join the military with the nicknames 'Lady Death' or have hundreds of kills. Not only that, Anna isn't really a sniper. I still don't see how having hundreds of kills and a nickname on the battlefield inherently means you're a dom in the sack, but maybe I'm still waking up and I can't grasp it.

Thanks for your help, Anon.



>Anna isn't really a sniper

Okay, you're the one with the realism custom, so let me ask you this: How does an intelligent woman going into the military become a marksman and not a nurse? Because she shot well, right? Did you know most of the women listed, including Lady Death herself, started as nurses despite their displays of talent? So why isn't your character a prior nurse or support that proved her worth?

Actually, you know what I think? I think you saw the image you're using and fell in love with it, then made a half-assed profile around it. The friend you've mentioned helped fill in the blanks and you thought that it was good. And then, completely unrelated, you pushed for realism in story-driven RPs not noticing your character had nothing about her beyond a good eye that put her on the squad. A BB gun? Not even a Mosin-Nagant, icon of the Soviet Union, but a BB gun.



Its wonderful that you keep pushing your World War II sweethearts, but not everyone follows their path. It's a hard fact to face, I know, and I'm sorry to break it to you. If you want to play with your dick to the thought of their stories then do it to their stories, because they're not Anna's. People don't go through situations the same way, and they certainly don't get into said situations the same way either.

Yeah, a BB gun. As it turns out, its pretty hard to find a mosin nagant in a shed, especially for a family who has to take a loan out to flush their toilet. Its much more feasible for a poor girl to save up for a BB gun and feed it over a rifle and feed it, but I don't think you looked into the character enough past "muh soviets". The Mosin Nagant is an abysmal rifle, anyways. You're pretty wrong about the bit with the friend, since you first read the profile (presumably) when it was done by myself originally, and I looked for the picture after I made the character.

I appreciate the pointed out grammatical issues, but holy fuck you're an idiot.



>Hi I'm a super cool sniper woman

>Who's a meek submissive fuckdoll for everyone and everything

0/10 go back to highschool fam



Being submissive doesn't always mean you're a fuckdoll though. And besides, how they act in person shouldn't always be how they act in bed.





This is an excrutiatingly hard concept for some people as it seems.



>How they act in person should always be how they act in bed

>Lets remove the personality. charm. and hook of my character away from the sole act I'll do with this character, because reasons.

Cause we all know you sure as shit aren't going to do anything interesting or character driven with this bitch.

Sure there's some people who do 180s but hory shiet fam you're stretching it. 'I literally murder people and see their brains explode' to 'U-uh, I-I-i'll listen to you.' 'S-sure you can fuck my ass' or are you going for the 'Emotionally distant uncaring angle?' Like fuck fam this is awful / 10.



I meant shouldn't for that first line, oh well.


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>Someone used to seeing death can't willingly submit themselves to others

>Submission is tied into your personality and not just what turns you on

I know you're extremely autistic, but this is just too much.



Wow you sure showed me!

>Someone used to seeing death

>Implying I'm not saying she's a fucking murderer who kills people for a living

>Implying thats the same as 'used to seeing death'

Get out nigger. Fundamentally different. Also

>War-torn sniper having sex for anything besides procreation and to blow off steam in passionate, vulgar fucking that leaves just as many claw marks on her as her partner

It's like his character is shit and or boring or something / 10.



So basically what you're saying is you only write tired, insipid tropes, but somehow the other guy is boring and shit.


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I'm saying his Sniper character where snipers LITERALLY go for days without sleep and have fucking nerves of steel is a goddamn bottom is hilariously out of touch.

Maybe she's in the Army. :^)


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>don't play against expectations

>why would you want an icy cold lady who is the white death on the battlefield but has a secret desire to be muscled under by a grunt

>every sniper is exactly the same and should be played as such

Excellent ideas, memerino!



>Implying vauun is capable of playing against expectations well

>implying vauun would be able to make her transition from white death to wishing to be pinned to the floor and fucked stupid in any decent manner

>Implying I'm saying every sniper should be play this way, and not specifically telling Vauun to not over reach his bounds




Except DM said themselves she isn't the best. Or is she?



I wrote in the profile that DM is just /barely/ a cut above the best in her platoon. In the grand scheme of things, she's just a promising rookie.



Also on this note, did you even read the profile, Fai? I encourage you to read on the role of a Squad Designated Marksman. They're just normal riflemen with guns more suited to longer range. They stay right alongside their squad, and a lone marksman is a dead marksman. She's not a fucking sniper.



So let me be sure I have this straight. You've made a woman a Designated Marksman in a realistic setting, at a time when around 100,000 women (a whopping 3% of those enlisted) served in the Soviet Union. You've put her in a combat role despite a vast majority of those women serving being in medical, and you did it because she was a "promising rookie". Not even in one of the all-female combat units either, you've shoved her in the 56th, a rough and tumble air-assault brigade. Is this accurate?



Yes, that is wholly accurate. Perhaps I was too vague with how realistic I go for, but realistic within her setting is what I was gunning for. That's why the profile isn't how you'd expect it to be for TURBO-REALISM. It's not as if I simply ignored the fact that women like her are an absolute rarity, but I made the profile what I want it to be, which boils down to being more important than anything else. The partners I'm seeking out understand what I mean by realism, and that's all I particularly care about from that angle.




>wants realism

>people google the stuff related to their character

>She's an airborne assault MARKSMAN for some fucking reason who's a rookie but MYSTICALLY good enough to be put on the front lines with men

>whilst being a promising rookie

Sounds legit fam.




4/5 Would prefer to see more in customs, and perhaps an explanation about why you don't like those No kinks.


They will not understand what you mean by realism because your version of realism with her in that position isn't realistic.



want to cuck/10 tbh



real grade: 79



>glass half-fullchan

Why do all you faggots put shit like this into your kinks?



i'm gay



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>MYSTICALLY good enough to be put on the front lines with men

>Mystically good enough

But Fai, I even explained why she's proficient with a rifle. She spent a lot of time hunting rats in fields with her pellet rifle. I know you're retarded, but even that was mentioned in this very thread.



>Being decent with a pellet rifle means that as a woman you're a viable candidate over any man to be put onto field

Have you ever used a pellet rifle to kill vermin? Fam. It really.


Isn't that hard.


Hahahahaha. I'm fucking dying Vauun.



"I used to bull's-eye womp rats in my T-16 back home. They're not much bigger than two meters." Sure thing, Skywalker.



>4/5 for a shitty inline and dropdowns


>the ugliest thing you could use




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Got the right thread this time! Good job!


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i'm tired no bully


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Make me.



I want to bully you for that but…


I have to bully this dumbass first.


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i'm glad someone caught the inspiration


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C'mon fam.



Why? Just… why? You've made a character that's "inspired" by the LITERAL SAVIOR OF THE GALAXY. Do you want to compare yourself to him too, because I'd love to open that can of worms you waste of space.








No, I made a character who has a small piece of background vaguely inspired by an offhanded quote. Go shave, bud.


see above, i don't really care for star wars

i didn't even want the thread to go this far down the rabbit hole about my character so i'm just going to leave it alone at this point



Thank you, darlink!



you're welcome



You're a huge faggot, Vauun, but even you are above this petty shit.


In this thread: People expect consistent storytelling out of typefuckers.

Someone please help me why do I come to this website



i am willing to take criticism and would appreciate visual examples of what you think looks nicer. i'm trying to find a new format for my profiles that's not inline above dropdowns.


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I'm going to just put this simply:

If you're taking advice from people on this board, you're going to become like the people on this board.

The people on this board are horrible.



you got a 79 man it's a decent grade



i just wanna see what that guy says tbh


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Constructive criticism is welcomed.



needs more customs



Yeah, some of the advice is good but I take all of it with a grain of salt.



Nice inlines but it's weird that you imply you know Fifty Shades of Grey isn't what women want when you aren't a woman




I personally like reading custom kinks but that's just me. Really like your profile though. Also been wanting to play with her when I see you in rooms sometimes but I'm not sure our kinks align




Yeah, delete it.

Homestuck is aids.



Yeah, Aranea is shit.



That's not a suggestion ::::(



Aranea is the shittier of the two (2) spider bitches. Most of the time. If you ignore some parts. This is fact, not a suggestion.



Feel free to contact me, I don't bite. Even if our kinks don't align I don't mind talking to anyone.



The top info bar being done in the Homestuck navigation style is really good. The Aranea inlines go from cute, cute, to weird, which is a little tonally dissonant. Maybe switch it to some depiction of Aranea behind her booth? Other than that, maybe list some of the headcanons you've got. Flesh out the character a little more. Sure, there's what's canon, but how does your Aranea differ?



Shit taste.


You're not wrong.


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Randomly picking some of my profiles, so do your worst. I don't expect to rate very highly due to being 2hus.





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>using Zun's art as an inline

Bold, at the very least.


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>not getting instantly rock hard with ZUN's ragdolls

How lame!


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I am permanently rock hard.


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Not good, anon. Something has to be done about it.


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Like what? I've already been to the doctor with it. She called me sick, and I said that's right.


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If a doctor can't help you, clearly you need to check with a specialist.


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The proctologist referred me to a gynecologist, and the gynecologist called me a freak of nature and kicked me out. So I don't know about that.


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Adult profile: https://www.f-list.net/c/Fo%20Po

Loli profile: https://www.f-list.net/c/little%20wendy/

Need to add further kinks and otherwise i'm shit at BBcode or whatever.



how bad is it

I feel like i'm doing quite badly



Its fuck awful work on Floof.


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Looks like it's time for the doctor to get a checkup! *cue shitty laughtrack*



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>The torch in the Darkest Dungeon inline doesn't line up with the centered text below it.



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Caramell dansen is my fetish.

Also, sexualizing videogames about despair/10

"This character has been based…" should be at the very top. Not at the bottom. It's a summary, it should be summarizing something for people who can't be bothered to read the rest, so it should be in the most visible spot. Either above or under the top inline - which, by the way, is kind of silly in its own way. That's like making a Luke Skywalker profile and having images with the title crawl.

Big ol' 5 paragraph general description should either be spiced up somehow (broken up with inlines or additional formatting) or moved to the bottom and spoilered. So should the quirks, really. Either and or. Doesn't help that the quirks are at odds with the kinks, and they're in the awkward place between trying to poke fun at the game and being lewd.

WIP is completely redundant, negative if so. 'Pictures are not mine' doesn't do anything as some lawyer explained some time ago. It might even make you seem worse in front of a court (where it will never get)



Trust me, it annoys me too. I've tried to fix it for a while but things just made it worse, so I decided "fuck it".


Is there a way to have text both on the left and right side of the page simultaneously without it looking like cancer? I've tried to do that for the quirks and the text for another profile of mine, but I haven't had anything that looked good so far.


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No, there is not. Blame f-list's horrible coding. You can't be fancy without it looking shit for all chrome users, because HTML formatting is so last decade. You just have to work with the tools you are given, even if the tools are a whole bunch of nothing, a twig and some sodden twine, and you're supposed to perform arterial surgery with it.

Believe me, I'd get fancy with it if I could. http://pastebin.com/raw/WjDfDK55


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Also, use this. It should be centered exactly.


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>>>136465 (You)




Really? How did I rate so highly and what did I get right here? Positive criticism is still criticism, and I'm probably not the only one here who'd like a rundown of the good aspects.


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Thanks, mate



Well I do like the good doctor, so saying anything would be horribly biased

…I like how it's set up in a way that fits the setting that she's from and I think it's a really cute touch, plus it's well-written so y'know… Y'know I'm amazing at critique you dig me fuckin' 10/10 or whatever










plenty of customs, inlines show off the character, the writing that's there is solid, no red flags


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Kinked up nerd. Tell me how many carpets I need to munch to be loved.




Suggestions for what I could work on?


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Possessed boxing with a penchant for going on late night murdering benders. Lemme know how weird and stupid this character is.





clean up writing



Suggestions on what I could clean up on >>137229



don't set a preference for kinks unless you actually care about them, it's cluttered and makes it hard to tell what you're really into or at least up for




Add more pics on the profile, too. She sounds cute, so make her cute.


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rating niggah is wrong and stupid

ya'll char is better than a 62, they're just a faggot

anyways, i like it a lot, although they're right about the kinks. less extraneous kinks that you don't care about



Personally, I do like all my kinks. They're roughly things I'd enjoy seeing in a given scene, if they came up.



you have filled out every single kink you liar

there is no way on earth you care about every last kink that F-List provides



How do you know I'm not that autistic? I took out the time to fill out every single kink.



Vanilla sex, humanoids, human cocks, intelligent partners, humor, etc. Too many kinks makes it hard to distinguish what you're looking for and what you like. No need for generic things that are usually give-ins.



Unless they're important. If you only like human cocks, for instance, then list it.



And what if you only like elf cocks?


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Probably looks like shit, but just skewer me please.



65, incomplete but cute pictures



I'm pretty sure it's a mess but I'm not sure about the specifics




this is a rating thread not a specifics thread



What can be done to make it more complete?



how about some scene ideas? some backstory?



Expecting something pretty low, to be honest.




Really? What makes it so high?



what would make it low? it's a fleshed-out, complete profile


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captcha: C yeu Qt


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Don't use small text on profiles or you alienate pretty much everyone who doesn't have perfect vision. The regular text size is just fine, making your text smaller has no benefits other than taking up less space.



I actually disagree. It's used on a great amount of profiles as a sort of 'excuse' to pretty up lacking information, but small text is critical to making a lot of larger profiles, look tasteful. In the case of this profile, larger text would probably look fine, but the way her text is stretched around and spaced makes it easily legible and in fact, highly enjoyable to look at.



nobody reads any of that small text shit. at least I don't. It's a good way to tell the reader: "this is not important, skip it"




>being this retarded

it's okay to not like things but just because you do not like things doesn't mean other people have to dislike things too.



>just because you do not like things

I don't like it either. What now, shithead?

Just stop trying to pretty up your profile with unnecessary shit like small text or adding hiragana for no reason. It makes you look like an aspie.




first anon here.

i don't use smalltext/moonrunes on any of my profiles.

>what now, shithead

>it's okay to not like things but just because you do not like things doesn't mean other people have to dislike things too.



Since none of the other anons actually gave you an actual grade.

80, needs more custom kinks IMO and the inline are all kind of on the super large size. Everything else is gud though.


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I like small text though.


Thanks! I'm really no good at this customs thing, but I'll give it a spin this afternoon just to flesh out the profile a little bit more. As for the inlines they look fine on my resolution but I'll shrink them anyway.



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The canon character thread helped me out with some advice for my Rosalina profile, what do you guys think?




I'd say its worth filling your kinks out with the actual preselected stuff F-list gives you. People use the search to find compatible partners, and those kinks help with that.



Nothing activates my almonds more than someone complaining about not getting roleplay when their kink list is made up solely of customs.

Doubly-so if they spent the time to type out an essay or five for their character description.



>Does anyone even read all the things you've done?


I've even gotten approaches that specifically mentioned, that the list is one of the reasons.


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I'm new to f-list and I'm still learning a lot of stuff.

What should I add to get more people to come to me?



You are a disgrace on humanity.

I hope you die a quick and efficient death so you may be rid of this world as speedily as possible.

I'm exaggerating it's shit



>I'm exaggerating its shit

Well, that's what I was asking.

What should be done to improve it?





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I revamped a profile recently to the point where it's almost a completely different character. How is it?



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I… really, really like the idea of this. I've got you bookmarked and I'll probably hit you up at some point.


I want to know whether I should junk the whole description, or expand it.



OC Doughnut Steel Mecha pilot pls r8


Please let me know if the way it's written makes me sound autistic or something, I was always bad at creative writing back in highschool.


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i want to try edgy shit minus the edge

character is left intentionally vague, designed her to be somewhat of a jack of all trades.



is that you, anya?



nope, but anya is a good friend of mine


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>friend of anya


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>Anything but an [REDACTED] cuck


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Do you have like two reaction images total?


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Harddrive space is at an all time premium, famalam.


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I want to improve my profile, so any criticism would be much-appreciated.


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I'm just a victim of that "install discord or we won't be able to talk again" scenario.

What about everything else though?


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Y'all are so fucking pathetic with that high-school "omg he's friends with WHO???" bullshit.

It's Internet smut, stop taking yourselves so goddamn seriously.


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>not taking this so seriously


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Please do! I love hairbuns!



Try adding more by deleting your pictures of dickless elves.



Get rid of unnecessary collapses



Eilidh's profile is horribly generic though. She's just a dull character, with no hooks. You can't have a good profile if you don't have a hook.



I like it a lot. Well done. Generally, profiles are better if you have something immediately out the gate to look at; making things all drop downs is both a little boring to look at and less immediately interesting.

Also, you need more of a hook. Something to catch interest and keep it; generally, hooks are sexual.




Idolmaster faceclaim


testing how to use spoilers fuck youse all


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Here's mine. It's really cheesy.


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Just finished making this guy. I'm curious to see if I can make him better.




Steadfast does not do what you think it does and that's triggering me hard




What they said. You're describing Contrary. Steadfast makes your speed raise one level upon flinching


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Because why the hell not, another eye glancing over it never hurt. Odds are not much will change outside of adding more kinks whenever the need arises, I do enjoy the general compactness of the whole thing.


Bring on the bully





>░█░░█░░█░░█░ Put This

>░████░░████░ On Your Signature

>░█░█░░░█░░░░ If You Roleplay


on an RP site…




>two massive, unnecessary inlines



You approached me and had the enthusiasm of a bag of sand.

Maybe try a better line than "I want your butt" and you won't need to seek gratification from illiterate blowhards like the two you have on your profile.




>Males in no

How does it feel to be completely and utterly awful?



You could delete everything except the kinks (delete the custom kinks too) and it would be 100% improved.


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Compactness might have been the wrong word to use there, anything else dipped out of my mind. My bad there.That said the whole thing looks decent to my eye and on my monitor but might be a decent idea to take one out now that you mention it, as well as spread out half of the faves in the yes column for more symmetry and less empty spaces. Which one would ya' suggest to keep tho', the scenery one for a more "immersive" - again for lack of better words - allure to the whole thing or the dialogue one for personality / atmosphere's sake?



Personally, I think inlines are only good for the few who make their entire profile an inline. Images are not as important as writing, especially when it comes to story-based profiles like Victor's. A small artsy one here or there to serve as line breaks might be nice, but I don't think you really need them at all.




I'm bumping this thread just to petulantly announce that the animation flub in OP's image makes me want to pull my hair out every time I see it.




ok but fuck you for making me look and noticing it


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>Only do micro/macro sizeplay stuff

>Recently made a tiny male profile, a first for me

>As was expected had much less success than on all my other profiles because tiny males are notoriously hard to get anywhere with

>Wonder if it's the profile's fault

I tried to keep it VERY concise because I have a habit of rambling, especially with custom kinks. Since I don't want to bore the person reading it I was keen on keeping it just stuck to the "schtick" of the character which is that he's some super egotistic alpha male dreamboy in his mind but just a cute tiny shota in reality. Should I have more? Is what there is just cringy? Should I kms?




>https://www.f-list.net/c/Katherine Von Ivian/


>in 4 months




By being a bitchbreaker bait shitter.



Spamming their ad and approaching anyone that even remotely shares their kinks.

It's a shame - they seemed okay when they posted here, but on F-list they're terrible.

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