/monster/ - The Last Bastion of Romance

Thanks OP. but be wary. Eventually we'll be switching to the new sight and this will be wiped. Keep that in mind as you progress.

But thanks. This is very generous

>>120311

>magnificently talented Mary Turgeon.

I mean if she's doing it for free then I can see why you'd compliment her like that but eugh, that face . . .

I like it! Thanks for posting it here.

>>120616

The face is that way for a reason. It's meant to evoke a Chinese doll, rather than an actual, human face. You're not the first person to be put off by it, though, which I can understand- But for what it's worth, it is meant to be a little intentionally unsettling and alien.

And I'm really glad that you have enjoyed it so far. I'm working on a better summary, which I will likely post here. And it's probably for the best that the new sight will wipe things so I can start afresh.

A little summary of the story to pique the interest…

The Only Empire, an ancient race of unthinkable power, dying off in the face of ennui and hopelessness. Its nemesis, Heaven, the god-like entity that opposes it from the Galactic Core. And humanity, the race that holds the key to curing the Empire's sickness and Heaven's loneliness. Humanity has only recently ventured out into the stars, and finds itself the center of attention from the two most powerful races in the galaxy. Its independence and its very survival rely on being clever enough to avoid being torn between Heaven and Eden.

A young scholar finds himself shanghaied by Imperial pirates, to be sold into slavery. To save himself, he decides to tell the story of Sinbad the Spacefarer, disgraced captain of the Orion Hierarchy, first human Crown Knight of the Empire. His seven voyages took him from the unknown birthplace of the Whale Clan, to the outer reaches of the Empire, to the deep unknown on the far side of the core, and other, stranger places. Sinbad's story is a romance, of a man torn between his duty to his superiors, and the strange, lonely Imperials who he finds out among the stars. He struggles to give hope to his people, and the Empire, while forced to confront the fact that he's a small fish in a great big ocean. In the meantime, the scholar desperately tries to find out why the captain of the pirates has such a deep grudge against humans.

Chapter 3 http://pastebin.com/kdBNAARp

This week, we begin our second arc, wherein Sinbad finds himself in the middle of a planet-sized graveyard, meets a beautiful young woman, and tries to figure out how to deal with extreme age differences in a relationship…

http://pastebin.com/qRc7PHxz

I'm reading your pastebin, specifically the Humanity pastebin, and the text constantly cuts out in the middle of descriptions to describe the next thing.

>When we'd slowed to a speed that didn't spit on Einstein's grave

Terrific line by the way.

>>120311

still surprised /mgt/ didn't notice your post when you first came up with that setting of yours.

I found it interesting since heaven ships reminded me of peculiarity of old holy weapons. And how they granted power to worthy subjects.

Anyway just finished reading it. It's good anon, you're a talented writer. I might have bought the book if my computer hadn't broke and I wasn't using a Windows XP laptop. I'm worried I won't be able to actually read it if I buy it since it's listed only as a kindle thing.

>>126007

For reference, I'm pretty absolutely sure you can read Kindle stuff with their program on any computer, but I can understand not wanting to take that chance. The feedback is quite appreciated, though, because I sometimes don't know if posting things on here is even worth it! It means a lot to me! If you enjoy it, the most I ask is that you tell other people about it.

>>126002

Aaah, thank you! I was quite fond of that touch myself, it's a conceit I'm very fond of.

>>126567

I'll probably get it once my desktop is repaired.

>>126567

I also read your story on…The relic weapons? I forgot what they're called. Toying with the idea of writing a story about a swordsman that's weak willed, and knows he's weak-willed, but carries a normal sword and a preta for emergency situations.

>>126832

Sounds like a cool idea! I've always been a deep fan of empathic weapons and, in general, intelligent artifacts. The third arc is going to be delving a bit into the Construct Kingdom. You'd have to remind me which specific story involving the relic weapons; I've written a lot over the last couple of years.

>>126875

The one that has four stages of development. Preta, beast, uhh…Deva? I don't know. Inspired by indian shit I guess. At the end the sword falls in love with you.

>>126987

Kek that was for MGU?

>>126988

Yep. It's a fun idea, I'll probably scavenge it for later!

Chapter 4!

http://pastebin.com/3epcnJsx

Chapter 5, rather. Buggering hell.

>>128258

Monster girl space opera is best space opera.

>>128257

You are an amazing writer.

>>128314

I'll be honest, this entire project started as 'Space Opera Monster Girl Encyclopedia'.

Then I kind of went straight off the fucking reservation.

I'm glad you guys are enjoying!

>>120311

your writing has been hit and miss for me because of all the different fetishes you cover. I appreciate that variety because some your stories has featured my favorites thanks to that and in your stand-alone stories you have been really good about warning as to the major fetishes covered.

But it also means that when you advertise a long novel like this, it's a potential minefield.

Any chance you could a post a spoilered list of fetishes that appear in the novel for us?

Also, have you considered selling through any other outlets (like Smashwords or something). I know Amazon is the biggest seller but they also follow the practice of DRM and force reading clients. Some of us don't appreciate our modern book stores trying to lock reades into their ecosystems of software and devices. Plus they've been know to pull crap like delete purchased books off reader's devices over copyright disputes….

Other online ebook retailers keep it simple - buy a book, log in and download a DRM free copy in several formats and read it on any device and whatever software you prefer that knows how to handle said format - leaves readers free to use our preferred e-readers and library managers.

>>128412

I, in fact, had no idea that Amazon is unique in that; I'd always avoided using Smashwords as a result of its relative lack of market base compared to Amazon, and because I didn't know that it offered those options. I always opt for DRM free on amazon, but knowing that this is an issue, I'll certainly be adding things to Smashwords as well, so as to ensure that people have a proper choice! Thanks for letting me know!

As to the fetishes: Yeah. I am, personally, an absolute deviant to the point that there are only a handful of fetishes I don't have, but I try to keep each of my individual novels somewhat focused, and give fair warning. A brief description of the fetishes present in each arc will follow; Usually, there's only sexual stuff in the second chapter of the arc, and not a whole lot of it, so you should be able to dodge any kink that you'd prefer to avoid without losing any of the story. Just as a warning, these tend to have a LOT of spoilers for what's coming up.

Arc 1: Colossal sandworm girl, pregnancy fetish, blowjobs.

Arc 2: Dullahan girl, substantial age differences, clingy young women.

Arc 3: Yandere, homicidal robot girls stabbing and getting bullied.

Arc 4: Sexy cougar ladies, both in the sense of 'being older and wiser' and 'Is an actual killer mountain cat woman', Pregnancy.

Arc 5: TRIGGER WARNING FOR /MONSTER/:Sinbad gets genderbent into a woman; The love interest is a lamia monster boy. CAVEAT TO TRIGGER WARNING THAT SPOILS ARC 7: The lamia monster boy winds up getting genderbent into a girl.

Arc 6: Crazy angel??? chicks, sex with a lot of anonymous women.

Arc 7: Potentially disappointing wrap-up. Not because I think it's bad, but wrap-ups always tend to be disappointing.

Tumblr Writer are you there?

Chapter 6!

http://pastebin.com/1DmymC6B

In this week’s chapter, the Far and Sunless Land is invaded by an extragalactic creature, and Sinbad tastes failure.

And yes, I am here. I've just been working on a really freaky commission lately. Think 'Beelzebub from MGQ' and all the weird fetish-y Xenomorph porn you've never had the balls to check out.

Chapter 7!

http://pastebin.com/kbjYneUB

This time around, Sinbad finds himself in a bottle situation. After a train malfunction, he winds up adrift in interstellar space, on the opposite side of the galaxy, with nothing but a non-sapient butler robot for company.

Things go surprisingly badly.

Where's my update.

http://pastebin.com/3nv26wLa

Chapter 8. This week, Sinbad shows an artificial intelligence that she’s not remotely ready for the intimacy that organic creatures are capable of. NSFW this week, for crazy yandere computer bitches.

The last two chapters are good (although I think the machine ship went from crazy back to sane way too quickly). I really like how needy the machine clan are portrayed towards human, and how…humaboo they are? But the constant memeing and references were really irritating and ripped me right out of the story each time. The machine analysis of Terminator 2 was cute and I liked reading it, but Diogenes quoting Shodan and Jeeves saying "Don't stick your dick in crazy" was extremely cringy, no offense.

That said I do look forward to every new chapter and do like this stuff.

>>138013

Just because someone isn't acting crazy at the moment, it doesn't mean they're sane.

I can understand how they're not everyone's cup of tea. An important thing to remember is that 'Humaboo' is a big thing with the Empire as a whole, and the Machine Clan more than many. They're more obsessed with human culture than most humans are. It's usually fairly harmless.

It's intended to come across as something along the lines of someone tossing out Charles Dickens lines. It's a little bit weird, but considering that Imperial culture is so enamored with human society, it'd be a bit strange for them not to make references to it. It's not as up-to-date, but you'll always find nerds pining away for the good old 'classics'. Even if they're, in fact, older than said classics.

But even with all of that, I can certainly see why it'd make you cringe nonetheless. C'est la vie!

>>138064

Like I said, I LOVE the humaboo thing, it's something I wish was explored more in MG stuff.

But memeing just shatters my immersion. It's my own deal. Maybe it works in-universe in the cultural context the MC has, where it's as classic to him as someone quoting lines from classic literature, which is a staple in stories for high minded characters, but since I've been brought up among the fiction they're quoting it feels like someone making Monty Python references. Rips me right out of the narrative.

>>138123

I can dig it. It's odd getting yourself immersed in a futuristic story and then suddenly getting yanked back to the present day and age by a quote.

The next story I want to write along these lines is going to be based loosely off of Ali Baba and the 40 thieves, and I want to make one of the main characters to be an AI made from a human's personal digital assistant. Might be interesting to see how that plays out.

>>138213

You're a good writer, I'm looking forward to it.

>>138213

Wow dude, mad respect! I try my hand at some writefaggotry with CYOAs and whatnot, but your stuff is amazing. I find that what makes a good story isn't just how it's written, it's what you want to convey and how you do it. Anyways, love your stuff and I'll definitely buy your story as soon as I get my kindle.

>>138456

That's super kind, and thank you! I'll let you in on a secret: I can never believe my work is worthwhile without the help of kind people who share their enjoyment of my work. Thank you for the kind words, and please do share the CYOAs you work on, because it's always good to have other people's work to enjoy.

>>138506

I'll do ya one better, you got Skype? I'm always looking for people who like mamono to talk to.

>>138536

Sure. You can e-mail me at mgexaminers@gmail.com, and I'll pass on my skype name there, because it makes me feel like I'm not being completely fast and loose with personal information.

I really like your works, but I have a question: Have you ever written a story involving an arachne?

>>138761

Hmmm… A handful, but none in a while. I am extremely fond or Arachne, though, so I should look into one again some time soon.

In the setting of Between Heaven and Eden, most arachne are, essentially, peace-officers for the Insect Clan. Not technically insects, obviously, but that's part of the point- They're predators of the other Imperials of the Insect Clan, hunting them down and generally being treated as very scary individuals. This makes them extremely lonely and clingy. One of the three candidates from the Insect Clan for Empress is a dark horse in the form of the chief of the Insect Intelligence Bureau, whose damaged genes mean- under current Insect Clan law- that she's not allowed to take a human as a mate. The only way she could do that is break the law- something she's not willing to do- or take a position as Empress or Queen of the Beast Kingdom.

I'm admittedly somewhat into the whole 'Willing to overturn the entire established order just to get a boyfriend' thing.

Chapter 9

http://pastebin.com/G4HX0Bti

This week, Sinbad finds the terrible truth, or a very inconvenient lie, and the Scholar finds himself forced to choose who will live and who will die for the choices he's made.

Chapter 10

http://pastebin.com/2eDkKyX8

This week, the scholar is forced to offer the life of someone he deeply cares about to placate the Captain's rage, and Sinbad is asked to take on a suicide mission.

>>144129

Thanks bro. You're a talent.

>>144135

Just bought your book on amazon by the way. Just my way of thanking you for being such a credit to the board.

That… means a huge amount to me. I've been feeling a bit bummed about my writing lately- The usual 'Nobody gives a damn' stuff. It's tough to keep going when you feel like it's doing no good. Knowing there's someone out there who enjoys it, though- That means a hell of a lot to me.

>>144147

Thanks man, that really does help quite a bit. It's tough to keep going in the face of adversity, but it's much easier with a few good friends.

>>144150

No problem. Now show me your dick.

http://pastebin.com/CPw4pP5Q

Chapter 11

This week, the Scholar is kidnapped, and Sinbad hooks up with a cougar. NSFW this week, for horny jungle catgirls, and blatant imperialism on a primitive culture.

fugg I missed the update

This one sounds like a good one. I love ´modern man gets sent back in time and people think he´s a wizard because of his technology´ stories, it´s a really underrated genre I wish more people would explore.

Is your work available anywhere else yet? I'd like to buy it, but not from Amazon if that's possible.

>>149327

Haven't gotten around to it yet; I'll probably look into Smashwords or something like that. It's one of those things where I'll probably do a whole lot of work at once on it.

>>149310

Yeah I had a lot of fun writing this one. Coming up with a situation remote enough that it could even cut off contact from the Empire was an interesting mental exercise.

>"Say hello to the Chief of Security. Halfway Intelligence, what's the largest and most intimidating security construct you have available?"

>"The largest security device is the T-386 Intimidatrix."

Bit on the nose lad. I also don't understand the thinking behind making the first contact protocols so internetty and unserious, but apart from that the story is good.

>>149810

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cyberdyne_Inc. There is a real-life Japanese company specializing in robotics who calls itself Cyberdyne and who has invented the HAL robotic exoskeleton suit. Real life is a bit on the nose. It's also pretty likely that Sinbad forgot the exact model name of the security construct, and just threw out something that sounded good. This is a third-hand story, after all.

The first contact protocols, in turn, are kind of a demonstration of the EU's position among humanity as a whole. Before humanity learned about the Empire, absolutely nobody thought intelligent life was out there. Afterwards, nobody thought they'd find intelligent life that the Empire hadn't already contacted and most likely annexed long ago. First contact was a joke before humans met the Empire, and it's become a joke afterwards. On one level, it's meant to be rather funny that such a major institution gets away with such tongue-in-cheek attitudes. On another level… Well, it says a lot about the despair that they can feel, sometimes.

http://pastebin.com/yzKtiVku

Sorry for the lateness, step-grandmother's visiting hours today, interview tomorrow.

Chapter 12.

This week, the Captain kicks some goddamn ass, we learn about Dragons, and Sinbad makes a choice.

http://pastebin.com/LRkvaGci

Chapter 13. This week, the scholar learns even more about Dragons, and Sinbad falls for a honeypot. Trigger warning: monster boys and gender bending.

Chapter 14. This week, the scholar nearly gets his ass murdered for how many times is it now? And Sinbad fucks a snake boy. NWS for snake boys and gender-bent fun. Trigger warning for monster boys having sex with human women who were once human men.

http://pastebin.com/nYJG6GXm

Sorry I'm late with this, I've got a job! Upside, it pays $26 an hour! Downside, it's got looong hours.

Chapter 15. This week, Sinbad learns about the Paths, the strange transport systems of the Fae, saves the Empress from a terrible plot, and fails to save Llewellyn from himself. And we finally learn the truth about Sinbad’s brother.

http://pastebin.com/AB7UUGwK