90a9eb No.152771
A true love story has no endings.
2731b7 No.152774
>>152771
And yet, life has many doors.
700dc8 No.152775
a2920a No.152777
>Update catalog all last night and all day today
>See this
YES YES YES
90a9eb No.152779
You open your eyes to crisp, morning sunlight. Your window is still a gaping hole in the wall. At least you get a bit of fresh air in your room. You roll over and let out a groan. Kiyoko is curled up next to you, back facing you. You smile.
Despite how sore your body is from yesterday's brawl, things are at least peaceful. No one is trying to murder you, and no one is trying to kill your waifu. You take a moment to let everything sink in. Bad news? This wasn't a dream. Your Uncle is a dead-demon, your cousin has been abused and your Aunt is stupid. Good news? This wasn't a dream. Your cousin is now safe and you have an amazing fox lady in your bed.
You glance down at your shorts, frowning at your morning wood. Maybe a nice shower will help relieve it. You go into the bathroom and clean yourself up. Shower, teeth brushing, hair combing, all that jazz. Walking downstairs, you notice Rosie lounging on the couch, reading a book. It's pretty dark outside…did you sleep into the night?
>"Rosie. Hey."
"Hey."
>"…So…how are you feeling?"
"…Fine. I talked to my Mom. Told her that Dad is dead. He must have cast a spell on her or something because she can't remember ever marrying."
700dc8 No.152783
>>152779
What about Natalie? What does she think of all of this?
73376d No.152784
Uh oh! We should talk with the aunt ourselves.
If she doesn't remember marrying him, does that mean she doesn't remember having children either? Does that woman not recognize her daughters anymore? D :
700dc8 No.152785
>>152783
Also hang the fuck on.
>You open your eyes to crisp, morning sunlight.
Okay, so it's morning.
>It's pretty dark outside…did you sleep into the night?
Not even half an hour later it's night-time.
Either it wasn't actually morning and rather late afternoon and we took a rather long shower, or some asshole is using magic on where we are.
30b39a No.152786
>>152779
"Yeah, that makes sense. I couldn't remember anything after I died either. But that doesn't explain why Nat remembers him. You have any ideas?"
90a9eb No.152787
>>152785
that was a mistake RIP excuse me I am a very tired OP
30b39a No.152788
>>152787
RIP
so which is it? is it morning or night?
90a9eb No.152789
>>152788
Night. please excuse me while I bleach my organs
700dc8 No.152794
>>152789
It could be that the MC is just confused and thought it was morning because of the crazy shit that happened, and taking a really long shower isn't out of the question since he'd be really tired.
2731b7 No.152797
a2920a No.152798
>>152789
Prepare to be bullied, nerd.
30b39a No.152801
>>152789
not until you finish your story goddammit.
90a9eb No.152802
>"What about Natalie? She remembers, right?"
"…Yeah. She's taking it well…life without a Dad, I mean. They weren't very close in the first place, though. So maybe that has something to do with it."
>"Where's your Mom now?"
"She's in her room. I told her my bruises were from falling in the woods…she believed me."
You should probably have a talk with the Aunt…make sure everything is fine. What about your Mom? Does she remember your Uncle?
700dc8 No.152804
>>152802
Talk with our mom first, then our aunt, then Natalie.
Natalie may say she's fine, but it wouldn't hurt to make sure.
c8363a No.152805
>>152802
Talk to Mum first, then check Aunt's story/alibi/memories.
30b39a No.152806
>>152802
I guess we could inspect the damage… And I don't think there was anyone else who knew about kiyoko's murders too well so she shouldn't really be in danger anymore if she is found out.
We can do >>152804
Though I think they only person really damaged by this is Rosie…
4362b4 No.152809
>>152802
"So Rosie, are you gonna be ok?" feels like its gonna be a complicated night, just try to relax.
90a9eb No.152812
>"I'm gonna go talk to her, then. Check to see how bad the damage is."
"Have fun."
You walk back upstairs. To start, you knock on your Mom's bedroom door and peek inside. She's working on a bit of knitting. Old woman.
"Hey there, Jeremy. What's up?"
>"Hey Mom uh, do you…remember Auntie having a husband? An Uncle?"
"Huh? An Uncle? No, dear she never married. She did get knocked up though. Twice actually. She never was one for commitments."
>"…Are you sure? You don't remember any husband?"
"Did you have a weird dream or something? You don't have an Uncle. Er, excuse me. You have an Uncle on your Father's side of the family. Maybe you're confused?"
30b39a No.152813
>>152812
…"must be… forget I said anything."
not really sure what we were expecting.
good thing she remembers us at least.
3ea20a No.152814
>>152812
Can we take those guns off her hands then? Be a shame for her to get rid of them all for a $20 Walmart gift card…
c8363a No.152815
>>152812
Ask if the name Aiko rings any bells
f93797 No.152816
>>152812
Well a wizard got bored and convinced her that they were married, now he's dead and the spell is gone
let's be honest here even if you say it, no one is going to believe you
4362b4 No.152817
>>152812
For the best honestly, go get something warm to drink and try to relax.
083cd0 No.152819
>>152812
Its for the best if they dont remember him. Lets go comfort Rosie…. also introduce our cousin to our new girlfriend i suppose.
6524bd No.152826
>>152812
Get Natalie, get Kiyoko, and get into a cuddle pile with Rosie. Show her she's loved. Show her the healing powers of a soft fluffy tail.
90a9eb No.152837
>"…Must be…forget what I said. Uh, nice scarf."
"It's a hat, but thank you."
You leave the room and go back downstairs to grab a cup of water. Rosie peeks up at your over her book, making sure you're okay.
"How'd it go?"
>"My Mom doesn't remember my Uncle either. Was he just some elaborate spell? How come we're the only ones who remember? Will I eventually forget?"
"It'd be better to forget. Ignorance is bliss after all."
You shuffle over to the couch and sit down, rubbing your forehead.
>"…Hey, are…are you alright?"
"Hm?"
>"…I mean your Dad is dead and you…well I think you went through a lot of abuse."
"….I am not okay. But I will be okay in time."
083cd0 No.152839
>>152837
She requires HUGS.
c8363a No.152840
>>152837
"If you ever need anything, just ask, okay? We're family."
73e2f5 No.152841
>>152837
THE TIME HAS COME
Sit down next to her, put one arm over her shoulder, pulling her closer and PET THE FUCK OUT OF HER WITH THE OTHER ONE
73e2f5 No.152842
>>152841
Also, tell her "I don't know how much I can help, but I'll always be there if you need me."
097c0d No.152843
>>152837
head pats
"…Do you blame me?"
6524bd No.152848
>>152837
Head. Pats.
And I still think a cuddle pile is in order
273650 No.152854
>>152826
Don't think she'd appreciate that too much.
6524bd No.152856
>>152854
Maybe Kiyoko/Aiko and Rosie talking things out would be a good idea though? It should probably wait for a bit, but it should still happen.
4362b4 No.152857
>>152837
"hmm I think soon is too long"
>>152856
Maybe after a few days? when everything is relaxed and not crazy and after we introduce her to everyone and let her get to know everyone.
90a9eb No.152930
You move closer to her and smile.
>"If you ever need anything, just ask, okay? We're family."
You reach an arm around her shoulder but she flinches back and pushes you back a bit, clutching her book.
"…I'll…keep that in mind."
Rosie stands up and shuffles away, keeping her head down.
You spend the rest of the night lounging around the house. Grazing on food and cuddling with Kiyoko in your room. She uses the window to come in and out of your room at her leisure, appreciating the freedom to go wherever. You talk to Natalie and make sure she's doing okay. She's still in shock, but she assures you that she'll be fine.
You spend a couple of hours staring out into the forest from the back porch, thinking back on the crazy week you just had. So many things happened in the few days you spent here…but you're finally getting time to breathe. You head to bed just as the sun is coming up, when everyone else has long since been sleeping. Kiyoko is flipping through a suspicious looking magazine, ears perking up when you walk through the door.
"Jeremy. It is late. Are you okay?"
4cc991 No.152936
>>152930
"I don't get to fight demons and stuff every week. I think I handled it pretty well. I'm just glad you're safe and everything is alright now."
Then hug her.
30b39a No.152937
>>152930
"Yeah… just… a lot to take in with all that's happened."
"So, whatchya reading?"
a2920a No.152938
>>152930
>suspicious magazine
2lewd4me
083cd0 No.152940
>>152930
"This has been both the weirdest, worst and best week of my life. Right now i just need to hug something. I mean seriously i learned that i DIED, Gods are mean, got to fight a demon who was my "uncle," learned that my cousin got raped by him, and found a very cute and attractive person by the name of Kiyoko who i love. All in all i need a hug."
c13927 No.152948
>>152940
This.
Also, ask what magazine she's reading. is it lewd?
9ef75f No.152951
>>152948
Same here.
That magazine is the lewdest of the lewd.
[spoiler]The fuck is a backend fetch toastedkike?[/spoiler
9ef75f No.152952
>>152951
Shit, I need some damn sleep.
90a9eb No.153006
>"I don't get to fight demons every week…this has been the weirdest, worst and best week of my life. I died, Gods are mean, got to fight my rapist uncle, and found you."
She blushes slightly.
>"What are you reading?"
"I found it in the attic."
>"…Why were you in the attic."
"Your cousin allowed me to sit with her and gave me this magazine. I do not understand. There is no literary value to this."
She holds it up. It's filled to the brim with lewd drawings of anime girls. You frown.
"There is no story?"
57825a No.153014
>>153006
"Um…" This is awkward. At least we know she's not into other girls? Try and explain it's dirty magazine and that people uh… do things using them.
37a483 No.153016
>>153006
Tell her the literary value in it is your imagination because imagining her in those poses and that attire makes us very, very happy
804ece No.153017
>>153006
Sit down next to Kiyoko and skim through the magazine. After a few pages, we say: "I don't know, this magazine has literary value to me. I'm getting inspired to try some of these poses with you."
90a9eb No.153020
>"Um…"
You sit down beside her and take the magazine.
>"The literary value is in your imagination. It uh, makes me very happy to see girls in this sort of pose."
"Really? Should I try?"
>"Uh–"
"Do I need to take off my clothes, first?"
>"No I don't…think that's necessary."
She flips through a few pages and studies the girl, nodding as if she understands. Kiyoko then climbs up onto your pillow and demonstrates her pose attempt.
>"…"
"Does this make you happy?"
273650 No.153022
>>153020
"Yes!
I mean, erm, yes, it does."
22eb8f No.153023
>>153020
Explain what we meant by "happy"
37a483 No.153024
>>153020
take a moment to appreciate the full awe of the situation right here, possibly with a single tear of pure joy
55cecb No.153025
>>153020
Yes
It most certainly does
a2920a No.153026
>>153020
>Pure girl being inadvertently lewd
Waifu, how did you know my and all of /monster/'s fetish!?
Curse yooooouuuuu!!!!
57825a No.153034
>>153020
Kiki is so innocent, it's adorable.
Shift our legs to try and conceal our shameful boner and say what >>153025 said. "People will probably start assuming things if they see you posing for me like that, though."
90a9eb No.153040
>"YES– I mean, ah, yes, it does."
"How strange. How can something so simple be so effective?"
She sits up straight and taps her mouth.
"I do not understand, Jeremy."
They probably don't have Sex Ed in the woods…should you bother explaining it to her? It's not like anyone is going to be awake for a while…and you are pretty tired…but you can't deny that you now have a boner.
"What about this pose, Jeremy?"
c46a4c No.153041
>>153040
Give her the dick in a tender and loving manner.
22eb8f No.153043
>>153040
Yes, do the birds and the bees talk
4ab946 No.153045
>>153040
First of all, LOCK THE DOOR,
Now we pose for her, taking our shirt and stretch and ask if she likes what she see's.
273650 No.153046
Is… is she doing this on purpose?
Anyway yes lock the door.
804ece No.153047
>>153020
>>153040
Don't dick the future wife just yet, do what >>153043 said and just have the talk. The situation is still unstable, we don't want to cause more bad things to happen.
55cecb No.153050
>>153040
GIVE HER THE talk
90a9eb No.153051
You quickly stand up and run over to lock your door before things get out of hand. It's probably too soon to get that comfortable with her yet…she isn't doing this on purpose is she?
>"Kiyoko ah, let me explain this to you."
You sit down on the bed and hold up the magazine, pointing to the lewd pictures.
>"Pictures like this…they…are meant to sexually arouse people."
"Sexually arouse?"
>"You know what sex is right? Reproduction?"
"I am aware of the act of reproduction. I see animals do it all the time. But they do not have to look at magazines."
>"Well, with people it's a bit different. Sex is more of a…thing we do for fun."
"Fun? Reproduction does not seem fun."
>"The thing is, people don't do it for the sole purpose of making babies…we uh, well it…it feels good."
"Feels good?"
>"Yeah. Sorta like when you eat good food or uh…scratch an itch, I guess."
"That is strange."
>"So with stuff like this we use these pictures to feel good. It helps, at least. Do you understand?"
"…A bit? I do understand that feeling good is a nice thing so I understand why you would seek it out. I was trying to make you feel good too. I hope it worked."
37a483 No.153053
>>153051
If she has no idea about sex as anything but reproduction, why was she flustered when we asked her if we could take her virginity? Question her
2731b7 No.153054
>>153051
"Oh lord, look Kiyoko, yes humans have sex to make babies but the act is pretty, well, well it feels great. I assume, it's not like I've done it before or anything because sex is supposed to be with.. you know, someone special."
"Christ, I didn't expect this to be so embrassing."
2731b7 No.153055
>>153054
Fug, forgot to sage.
22eb8f No.153056
>>153051
Tell her sex requires some degree of trust and love, it isn't something we do with anyone or exclusively to feel good whenever we're bored.
Also what >>153053 said.
804ece No.153057
>>153051
>>153054
Continue to drop spaghetti as we get more and more flustered trying to explain the act of coitus to Kiyoko.
273650 No.153060
>>153051
Tell her that as she's beautiful it certainly did?
Might as well try and give some compliments to her when possible.
30b39a No.153061
>>153051
pat her head.
"Well you. But understand that it's not really good to try and arouse others unless your ready to have s-sex. Otherwise it kind of makes you a tease."
90a9eb No.153062
>"…If you know nothing about sex, why were you so flustered when I asked about your virginity?"
Her face goes red again.
"…I have been told that…virginity is something I must only give to the one I l-love…I thought you were pronouncing y-your love to me. A m-maiden's virginity is her vow to her partner after all."
She wriggles in her spot, cupping her hands over her cheeks like an embarrassed schoolgirl.
"Such a commitment is…is very important. And it is lewd to try and f-force that onto a woman!"
She hugs her tail, squeezing her eyes shut. Not sure if she knows what lewd is…
083cd0 No.153063
>>153062
"But didn't you say you love me?"
Happenings.gif
22eb8f No.153064
>>153062
Do as I said before >>153056 , explain to her what sex and virginity really mean to humans.
55cecb No.153076
>>153062
Ask her if she loves us enough for cough THAT
WE GOTTA FUG THE FOX
30b39a No.153078
>>153062
"So you at least know a little bit."
We should probably explain what a tease is. She shouldn't do lewd poses if she doesn't want us aroused.
156fda No.153080
>>153062
Let's not fug the fox right now. If anything, she's not going to get what we're trying to explain and probably be turned off to the idea until we gain more of her trust/affection.
I propose, however, that we do as many lewd things as we can up to that point to communicate the point.
Like nibbling on her ears and petting her tail and rubbing* her chin. We should also tickle her thighs and lick the nape of her neck**
Get her all hot and bothered.
156fda No.153082
>>153080
Wow I did a shoddy job of spoilering that one
fa5065 No.153086
>>153080
She has Aikos memories now, so the affection level must already be pretty high.
fa5065 No.153087
>>153086
Forgot to sage, sorry
6cd307 No.153103
I think teasing her would go a long way of explaining it to her
470e45 No.153119
55cecb No.153120
>>153119
POWER UP THE TAIL TOUCHER
FIRE
c10169 No.153123
>>153062
"well they're kind of right in a way" after that get closer "you do know how to LOSE your virginity right?"
22eb8f No.153126
Do not do lewd stuff until she's fully aware what's waiting for her! She hasn't understood lovemaking's true meaning yet! Trust and love!
90a9eb No.153145
>"Didn't you say you loved me?"
"A-Ah…I do love you…this is true."
You scoot over to her and pull her against your torso, rubbing her ears. Maybe sex is a bit excessive right now…but that doesn't mean YOU can't be a tease.
>"Besides, you posing like that is teasing. You're being a tease."
"Tease?"
>"It's like…implying something without the intent of giving that thing. Like sex."
"Oh…I am sorry."
>"That's fine. I'm okay with just cuddling for now."
Your fingers skillfully rub at the fluff on her ears, pinching and tugging, gently of course. Kiyoko relaxes into your form, grinning like a content puppy.
"It feels so nice when you touch me like this…"
One hand occupies her ears while the other snakes down her arm to rub that silky, fluffy tail. You stroke it at a leisurely pace, rubbing a few tufts between your fingers. You could do this all day if you wanted to. It's quite relaxing, actually.
Feeling a stroke of bravery urge you forward, you lean down and blow a tiny puff of air into her ear. She squeaks out, surprised.
"Th-That tickles!"
Your mouth clamps down on her neck, trailing tiny kisses along her supple flesh. She wriggles like a frantic worm, legs stretching out in front of her. Your teeth grave against the nape of her neck, head adjusting to nibble the edges of her ear.
"A-Ahh, n-nhgh…"
>"Does it feel good?"
Your whispering voice tickles the insides of her ear.
"Mnnn…I f-feel funny…"
>"How so?"
"M-My legs tickle."
Your hands rub at her hips, running along her thighs, groping and tickling them, though you're careful not to venture towards her crotch.
"Why am I s-so sensitive? I feel hot…!"
c10169 No.153148
>>153145
"What feels hot" continue teasing her until she responds "show me with your own hands" get her to explore herself.
4ab946 No.153149
273650 No.153158
>>153145
Nuzzle into her hair?
90a9eb No.153159
>"What feels hot?"
"I…I cannot really…"
You lean in closer, smiling from ear to ear.
>"Show me with your hands."
You hear her audibly gulp as her hands tremble down South. One rests on her lower stomach while the other slides between her thighs, rubbing at her sweet spot.
"Ah–"
>"Good…"
You begin to suckle at her neck a bit more, dragging your tongue down her shoulder and along her jaw.
"Jeremy…"
>"Make sure you're not too loud, Kiyoko."
"Mmmh…"
She loosens her kimono, fanning at her face.
"Am I sick?"
2731b7 No.153160
>>153159
"No, youre just perfect. Whar youre feeling is normal."
083cd0 No.153162
>>153159
"Masturbation is normal. You're fine."
c10169 No.153163
>>153159
Let one hand join at the snatch and begin cupping her breasts, don't forget to get into a deep kiss.
c1ee94 No.153165
>>153159
"Don't worry, you're perfectly fine. This is what humans call 'arousal'."
Feel her breast.
55cecb No.153166
>>153159
"You're just discovering your sexuality"
"And you're about to discover mine"
a2920a No.153167
>>153159
this is probably the hottest thing I've read on /monster/… I actually feel like I shouldn't look, like this is their moment and I should give them privacy.
I'm going to get some popcorn.
30b39a No.153169
>>153159
"Your body is just getting excited. It's telling you it wants to feel good."
I always appreciate stories where the smut isn't totally shoehorned in.
90a9eb No.153174
>"Don't worry. This is normal. You're feeling arousal."
"A..Aru…Arousal?"
>"Your body is just getting excited. It's telling you it wants to feel good."
"I do not know if this is good…"
You brazenly reach over her kimono and pull back the flap, wrapping your palm around her breast. God it's so soft. It's like touching a peach. A beautiful, ripe peach.
You knead into it slowly, pinching the nipple to test her reaction.
"Hnn! Ah–"
The hand stroking her tail travels to move over hers, pushing against her crotch. It's definitely warm down there.
>"Kiyoko…I want you to tell me if you're ever uncomfortable or scared, okay?"
"Mmm, I am not scared. You would not hurt me."
You hide your blushing face in her shoulder, moving underneath her hand to rub in between her folds. It makes a lewd noise, the moistened area allowing for easy gliding.
"Ahh…! Th-That feels weird…b-but I want more."
700dc8 No.153178
215dc4 No.153196
>>153174
GIVE THE GOOD LADY WHAT SHE WANTS, SHE WANTS MORE WE STAY THE COURSE
And let's fluster the fox a bit more by saying we like making her this good. Run hands through her hair and nuzzle her face while we're saying it
4ab946 No.153197
>>153174
Waifu you little tease, don't leave us hanging.
c10169 No.153199
>>153174
We must give her the D
6524bd No.153226
>>153174
Rub her good, then whip out our monster masher
90a9eb No.153260
>"Then I'll give you more."
You crane your neck and kiss her with the passion of 10 Rom-Coms. She squeals into your mouth, feet dragging into the bed sheets. While her mind is occupied, you slowly sink one finger inside of her, shivering at how warm it is inside.
Her lips break away from yours, eyes widening.
"J-Jeremy–! D-Do not put it in! I–"
>"Shhh, stuff is supposed to go in there. It'll feel great, relax."
"Mmh…i-it does feel, nh, good…"
Carefully, your finger slides in and out, curling a bit the deeper you go. You can hear her breathing slowly begin to pick up speed, tiny murrs escaping her throat. You keep a firm hold on her breast, twisting the nipple a tad.
"Ah– o-oh g-gosh…"
You lay her down on her back, hovering above her body, making sure she's comfortable.
"D-Do not stop–!"
7d9405 No.153264
>>153260
Is it bad that I want Rosie to walk in on us?
700dc8 No.153265
>>153260
Kiss her some more.
>>153264
Very much so.
443ec0 No.153266
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>>153264
I swear, if OP takes that as a suggestion and uses it to blueball us, I will find you anon.
0e63eb No.153270
>>153260
you should stop and then use your mouth instead.
7d9405 No.153271
>>153266
We can offer for her to join
30b39a No.153273
>>153260
Well, she said don't stop. Keep going I guess.
>>153264
yes
>>153271
no
6524bd No.153278
>>153264
Natalie should walk in on us. Rosie's had a rough enough week she doesn't need to walk in on her crush fingering another girl.
>>153271
Nat could come but it might be rude at that point to not invite Rosie.
Fuck it, get Auntie and Mom in on this too. House-wide orgy! Don't actually do this
ca936e No.153279
>>153266
I will not allow this to be Nothing happens: The anime!
Besides, we locked the door, right? Right.
Right. Rosie can deal with it, I think we're already set on course for Mr. Descartes's wild ride.
Guess we better give her what she wants, and if she asks if she wants us to feel good… well, our pants are probably uncomfortable by now.
90a9eb No.153298
You place some more tender kisses on her lips, moving to untie her kimono. Kiyoko hides her face with her sleeves, tail curling on top of her stomach. With her eyes covered, you move to sit in front of her body, spreading her legs with your hands.
"Wh-What are you doing?"
>"Just calm down~"
You start with gentle breathing on her folds, placing tiny kisses along her stomach and thighs.
"S-Stop teasing…!"
>"Now you're getting the hang of it."
You spread her lips with your fingers and push your tongue inside of her slit, flicking up and down.
"A-Ahn! Jere– ahh…"
Her hands clench at the sheets, legs squeezing around your head. You push a single finger inside, paying special attention to her little nib.
"J-J-Jeremy…i-it feels good…m-more!"
You gladly comply. Pushing two fingers in now, her cries of pleasure go up half an octave. Kiyoko's back arches off of the bed, sweat starting to coat her skin.
a2920a No.153300
>>153298
Waifu STOP!! YOUR LEWDS ARE TOO LEWD!!!
IT'S MAKING MY HEART HURT!!!
I mean, keep going, but still…
083cd0 No.153301
>>153298
Continue on, but please listen for anyone out side our room. I MEAN WE WOULDN'T WANT OUR MOM/AUNT/COUSINS TO COME IN AND FREAK OUT… RIGHT?
083cd0 No.153302
>>153301
FUCK I FORGOT TO SAGE.
0e63eb No.153303
>>153298
tell her to try not to yell. give her a little more teasing.
ca936e No.153306
>>153301
The door is locked, they can't come in unless they used the gaping hole that is the window to our room.
…..
……
Shit, if Natalie is outside, she can hear everything.
30b39a No.153310
>>153298
Keep going until she orgasms. have her bite her sleeve or something to keep quiet.
6517f1 No.153314
>>153306
We have reached the point of no return.
4ab946 No.153335
>>153298
Make her come, then ask if she wants to keep going, if she says yes then give her the dick.
If not then we respect her wishes, this IS the last bastion of romance, after all.
34361f No.153345
083cd0 No.153494
>>153489
>>153488
Please sage next time, i thought OP updated.
c51fdb No.153496
b22149 No.153497
>>153495
>painting in the background
>faggot cat
2e37de No.153499
>>153496
>>153495
Nice proxy posting faggot, laughing at your own joke like that. Try to make it less obvious next time
e02e41 No.153500
>>153499
>>153496
>(1)
Who's proxy-posting the proxy-post commenter?
c51fdb No.153502
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049cb8 No.153507
File: 1457129172467.png (Spoiler Image, 68.05 KB, 1919x925, 1919:925, The_fires_start.png)
>>153500
You hear that Mr. Botero?… That is the sound of inevitability… It is the sound of shit posting and memes…
6524bd No.153516
>>153513
>Adeptus Ar-bites
That pronunciation angers me
Do you have one of "Did I just hear 'Joining chaos?'"
804ece No.153518
>>153516
Ask and ye shall recive.
May the Emperor's light shine upon you, fellow citizen.
658378 No.153523
>>153496
>>153513
it may be off topic, but what the sauce on this ?
e02e41 No.153524
>>153523
Emperor's Text to Speech program I think. Bruva Alfabusa on Youtube.
658378 No.153525
6524bd No.153529
>>153518
You're a good man
691d59 No.153532
Where can I find the threads before 4? Anybody got an archive link?
ca936e No.153534
>>153532
Come now, it's on the 3rd post
691d59 No.153536
>>153534
forgive me, I'm a retarded nigger
6cd307 No.153541
The amount of non-sage is genuinely impressive
4ab946 No.153545
Ammit deliver us from these not saging fool's and shot posters.
4ab946 No.153546
>>153545
Fuck you too, auto correct.
90a9eb No.153563
You keep going, faster and faster until you can tell she's about to have her orgasm. She hasn't announced it yet, but based on how her body is jerking underneath you, you get a pretty strong hint.
"Jeremy…I h-have to…to p-pee…"
>"That's not pee, Kiyoko."
You go even harder, going up to three fingers, gently stretching her out. Your other hand furiously rubs at her clit, tongue lapping at her hole.
>"Keep quiet, Kiyoko. Bite your sleeve."
"Mmh!"
Her body freezes up, muscles clamping around your finger as she experiences her first orgasm. She holds a frozen stance for a few seconds before collapsing into the bed, hips occasionally twitching.
"Ahh…Ahh…"
fa5065 No.153564
>>153563
Lets give ourselves a high five for our amazing abilites at cunnilingus.
Then tease her a little bit about her lewd expressions
a2920a No.153565
>>153563
>"Jeremy…I h-have to…to p-pee…"
Not sure if this is weird or adorable, I've never heard it described this way before…
b22149 No.153567
>>153564
>Then tease her a little bit about her lewd expressions
THIS
>>153565
It's adorable and you know it
4362b4 No.153569
>>153563
"We can keep going, if you want" get up closer and kiss her .
6524bd No.153570
>>153565
>Giving your waifu cunnilingus
>It Ain't Pee starts playing
>>153563
Ask her if she liked it, then ask if she'll return the favor and unzip dick
b22149 No.153574
>>153570
>unzip dick
>fox gets scared
>runs away
502dbc No.153575
>>153563
One step at a time anons.
Just hold her for now. I dont think she knows the first thing about handling a dick so keep it calm for now unless she insists.
a2920a No.153610
Is OP taking so long between each update because they have to fap for hours to relieve the arousal caused by the immense lewdness of their own work?
90a9eb No.153615
You climb up beside her and pet her head, grinning.
>"You make such naughty expressions, Kiyoko."
"N-No! I…I was just shocked!"
>"Don't worry. They're cute."
She huffs, tail flicking from side to side.
>"Do you want to do more?"
"…I…I do not know if I am ready but…my body is still craving something. It is like the feeling of wanting to be full."
You feel your boner strain against your pants.
"When you put your fingers inside of me I found myself wanting something bigger…is that bad? Am I being too selfish?"
f12ada No.153617
>>153615
Make her beg for it
7743db No.153619
>>153617
I agree with this Anon.
Make her beg for our cock.
4362b4 No.153628
>>153615
"I think I know what you want, but you gonna have to bark for it"
>>153619
>>153621
>>153617
Don't just make her beg for it make her wan it
a2920a No.153629
>>153628
Come on man, don't be a jerk to her during her first time. It should be special, not humiliating.
b22149 No.153631
>>153628
>fox
>bark
Nah. We still don't get what she means by "wanting something bigger", we should question her about it while pinching her ears.
b22149 No.153632
>>153631
fuck, why does my email keeps resetting
691d59 No.153633
Damn it, I need to learn to draw.
b22149 No.153635
>>153633
>>>/loomis/ FAGGOT
691d59 No.153636
>>153635
calm down, son
I practice occasionally
…you know
just not as often as I should
b22149 No.153638
>>153636
Sorry, I tough you were one of those anons who have no idea how to go about it.
>just not as often as I should
Me neither, I think the last time I did was a month ago.
I really need to practice more
c46a4c No.153639
>>153629
This. There can always be a second sex scene where we bully kiyoko sexually, but after what she's been through, the girl deserves to be pampered for a little while.
691d59 No.153640
I think a little bullying is okay, just don't go overboard
f12ada No.153647
>>153644
It's okay to bully affectionately, especially if they secretly enjoy it
691d59 No.153650
6524bd No.153653
You fags want her to beg for cock when she doesn't even know what cock is.
Gentle dickings are in order, with sweet nothing's whispered into her ear as we penetrate.
90a9eb No.153655
Sorry for lack of updates tonight all! Things came up. Updates will resume tomorrow!
f12ada No.153657
>>153655
We will wait for you, don't worry
3ea20a No.153658
>>153655
Is it salvaging your relationship with your friends after they discovered you draw/write smut?
90a9eb No.153707
>"It's not selfish…I'll give you something bigger if you want."
"R-Really?"
You push her down onto her back and climb over her.
>"I want you to beg for it…"
"B-Beg? I…"
>"You want it, right?"
"Yes…"
>"Then ask nicely."
You rub at her ears and kiss her neck a few times, grinding your leg against her crotch.
"Mmmmh…J-Jeremy…"
>"Come on…say please…"
"P-Please…put something big inside of me…"
You unzip your pants slowly, exhaling when you finally get your little buddy out of his cage.
"A-Ah! What is that?"
>"It's my penis, Kiyoko. I'm gonna put it inside of you."
Her expression changes from shock to demure curiosity. You can see her teeth bite down on her lips.
>"Are you okay?"
"Y-Yes…I want it…"
You angle yourself so that your member is at her entrance, slowly rubbing up and down.
"Mmmh…"
You begin to slowly push inside, spreading her little by little.
"A-Ah! It is a lot bigger than I thought!"
d5032a No.153708
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>>153707
benis in bagina :DDD
6517f1 No.153709
>>153707
GIVE HER THE DICK
b60ba4 No.153711
>>153707
Holy shit OP
I don't even need to say what to do
cb343a No.153713
>>153707
You know what to do, René demands it.
0e63eb No.153717
>>153707
now to get the whole thing inside.
c46a4c No.153721
691d59 No.153727
f725ae No.153728
Hi hi. Just a person here.
I just came into say,
Show her the miracle of reproduction by doing the good 'ol one thrust. Proceed to check if she's alright, then proceed to 1) caress the breast and 2) suck the nipple
215dc4 No.153736
>>153721
Yeah, if we could have this that would be great
f93797 No.153737
>>153707
"And then Anon woke up, with a massive hardon and a crushing sadness knowing everying leading up to this point was nothing more than a dream"
"After rubbing one out he continued on with his meager existance till one day he was shanked by a 'refugee' who shouted 'MERKEL ACKBAR' as he stabbed anon"
THE END
b22149 No.153743
>>153721
fucking this
>>153737
Pic related. Are you the same faggot who keeps trying to ruin the fluffy tail tales?
cb343a No.153747
>>153737
No anon, NO.
>tfw I had a dream where I met a lovely girl
>tfw I woke up when we kissed
c10169 No.153765
>>153707
Plunge our monster slayer into her unexplored mystic cave.
b22149 No.153786
>>153747
>tfw I had a dream where I was experimenting with alien plants that had mouths and were kind of like worms to save a talking ant that had gone missing and might've been a little boy/girl that got turned into an ant
>tfw woke up and thought about it
f93797 No.153793
>>153765
And then wake up from our coma in the hospital due to the hit on our head and soberly awaken to the realization that the entire time it was all just a dream
90a9eb No.153922
You go in, inch by inch, until you're halfway there. You're proud of your big dick.
"Ahh…i-it kinda hurts."
You lean down and hug her, kneading at her breast a bit.
>"I know, the pain will go away…"
"O-Okay…"
You finish thrusting in, your entire body tingling. You're about to cum and you've barely started. Shit.
"G-God, it is so deep!"
>"Can I start moving?"
She nods. Your thrusts start out slow and steady, slow to a painful degree.
"Faster…!"
You take that as your cue. You begin to pump as fast as your weak, little body can pump. Kiyoko has to bite down on her sleeve once more to cover her moans. You grab onto a breast and suckle, unable to hold out for very long.
700dc8 No.153924
>>153922
When we orgasm, it better be at the same exact time Kiyoko does. Also we should kiss her when we climax as well.
f93797 No.153926
>>153924
When we orgasm the dream ends, we wake up in our empty bed alone with a wet stain in our pants
THE END
c1ee94 No.153930
>>153922
This. >>153924
If we're going vanilla, we must go all the way.
>>153926
GO TO YOUR ROOM RIGHT THIS INSTANT YOUNG MAN
c10169 No.153931
>>153922
use rapid strike and then Finish her off with the mighty move White blast.
d0f74a No.153941
>>153936
NO. STOP IT. BAD ANON.
0e63eb No.153967
>>153922
I wanna turn her over and play with her tail
8da3d9 No.153996
>>153983
THIS IS NOT XCOM 2
a2920a No.153999
>>153996
>SO MANY PEOPLE NOT FUCKING SAGING MAKING ME THINK THERE'S AN UPDATE!!!!
NEWFAGS GET OUT!!!!
REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
b22149 No.154005
>>153983
I'll find you and I'll fucking kill you slowly, then you'll wake up and realize it wasn't a fucking dream, you just passed out from all the fucking blood you lost.
f93797 No.154006
>>154005
That's when you wake up, realizing the blood shed was all just a dream created by aliens as they probed your mind
3ea20a No.154011
>>153922
Shouldn't we pull out? if she lets us
Don't think either of you are prepared for kids…
Unless she obeys the monster girl rule of doesn't get pregnant unless wants to be
f93797 No.154017
>>154011
But as you pull out you wake up, realizing that it too was just a dream
6517f1 No.154018
>>154017
And as you wake up, you see that the aliens really are probing your mind.
f93797 No.154021
>>154018
Which turns out I was dead all along
What a tweest
72862a No.154023
>>154017
>>154021
>>154018
But if you reject instrumentality, you can be the first to crawl out of an ocean of orange goop with your kitsune cocksleeve.
90a9eb No.154034
>"Nnh, are you gonna cum again, Kiyoko?"
"Wh-What?"
You wait until you feel her muscles clench around your cock and her voice squeal out into her sleeve to finally let yourself ejaculate. You both groan out together, body shivering from the climax. The best godamn climax you've ever had in your life.
As you pull out, globs of cum ooze out of her pussy, pooling onto the bed.
>"Ah…we're gonna have to wash that out."
Kiyoko lays breathlessly on the bed, panting like a tired dog.
"Jeremy…m-my body can't move…"
4ab946 No.154037
>>154034
"it's fine, we can just stay like this for a while." and be sure to snuggle her and pet her.
b22149 No.154039
>>154034
>that fucking face
Do >>154037, wait a while and then carry her into the shower and shower with her, with a lot of cuddling and petting.
0e63eb No.154041
>>154034
ask if there's anything she wants and you'll do it for her.
b22149 No.154042
>>154040
God fucking damn it anon I'm running out of reaction images
72862a No.154043
>>154034
Turns out the foxgirl was the korean kind and not the japanese kind, and then transformed and killed you horribly.
4ab946 No.154044
>>154040
Jesus fuck on a pogo stick, you're persistent, if nothing else.
6517f1 No.154050
>>154040
Running out of easily accessible images as well.
98ab84 No.154061
>>154042
>>154044
>>154050
He's kinda got a point. This has been going a little too well. I'm half expecting Rosie to be watching us right now.
6517f1 No.154066
>>154061
Please don't be right
0e63eb No.154071
>>154061
I think you just want something bad to happen.
6524bd No.154080
>>154061
You people are so goddamn pessimistic.
Why can't we just have romantic sex with our fox girl? Why's it all gotta be a coma or some shit?
All this negativity is gonna meme magic us into a bad end.
cc8eaf No.154081
>>154061
pls don't be right
But if you are, is she going to go full yandere or NTR?
fa5065 No.154084
>>154081
Her attitude towards us point that she might not be interested in us anymore.
So my guess goes for neither.
c10169 No.154105
>>154034
Relax and think about a future you might have with her.
>>154061
Rosie did gave Kiyoko the hentai, so this is entirely possible.
c1ee94 No.154182
>>154034
Get some tissues so we can wash the leaking cum. Then cuddles, and if she really really can't move for shit, carry her to the bathroom and shower together.
2da3fb No.154194
>>154034
We Bath Time with Kiyoko-Chan 2: Electric Boogaloo now.
90a9eb No.154291
You pet her and give her a squeezing hug before you scoop her body up to shower. You're fucking tired and you want to go to sleep.
>"Did you have fun, Kiyoko?"
"…Y-Yes. It felt very good."
>"That's why humans do it so much."
"I understand."
After a steamy shower with plenty of rub downs, you're finally laying in bed with your foxy waifu. She's still a bit sensitive from sex, but she falls asleep pretty fast, as do you. You remember the way her hair flows between yoru fingers, the sweet scent that lingers in her clothes. How soft her ears feel against your face, and how her tail softly brushes along your legs. You never want to let go, for as long as you live. For as long…as you live.
..
..
..
Huh?
fa5065 No.154293
>>154291
Cry and masturbate
4ab946 No.154294
>>154291
…fuck this gay earth.
c10169 No.154296
>>154291
Go get dress you dumbass This is a nightmare isn't it you gotta go to your cousins remember?
700dc8 No.154297
>>154291
Kiyoko better be making us breakfast like a proper waifu.
7743db No.154299
>>154291
THIS SHIT BETTER NOT BE HAPPENING!
Pinch ourselves to wake up but if we can't wake up look around to see where we are.
90a9eb No.154300
…For a moment you begin to feel an empty, cold feeling twist inside of your stomach. Was it all a dream? Was it not real? It had to be real. It felt real. It felt REAL.
You stare down at your hands, clenching them together. It was real. IT WAS REAL. Your eyes sting and you feel the entire purpose of your life drift off with the idea of true, monster love.
As you move to get up you see your door slide open. Wait. You don't have a sliding doo–
"WAKE UP DADDY!"
A tiny girl barrels into your room and body slams you, sending you crashing onto your back.
>"OOF."
804ece No.154301
>>154300
Everything went better than expected.
c10169 No.154302
>>154300
[Spoiler] NO WAIT THIS IS BETTER[/spoiler] "good morning sweetie, What time is it?"
a2920a No.154303
>>154300
Yay, happy endings, all is well.
I'm getting the fuck out of here before something bad happens
700dc8 No.154304
>>154300
>daughteru
WE BETTER HAVE MADE SISTERS FOR HER, AND THEY ALL COME IN TO JUMP ON THE BED TO WAKE US UP BECAUSE IT'S OUR BIRTHDAY AND KIYOKO (WITH THE HELP OF OUR DAUGHTERUS) MADE BREAKFAST FOR US
083cd0 No.154305
>>154300
Everything is better then expected and we have cute fox daughteru and waifu.
Also dawwww.
fa5065 No.154306
>>154300
This is either the epilogue or a dream, so lets enjoy it.
I wanna see a milfy Kiyoko.
658378 No.154307
>>154300
Wait, why don't we have memories of the past years
Well, it doesn't matter after all
let's greet our daughteru
d637aa No.154308
>>154300
What if the yandere put us in this state after the event happened and she used a spell to knock us out or something?
083cd0 No.154310
>154300
Everything is better then expected and we have cute fox daughteru and waifu.
So what happened to rosie and our family?
>Also dawwww.
c51fdb No.154311
>>154300
Hug and playfully wrestle with our daughteru and slowly realize that this isn't real and we're either still laying in bed peacefully with Kiki or we've been put under some charm or spell.
700dc8 No.154312
>>154304
well, older sisters work too since judging by her appearance and enthusiasm the daughteru that woke us up is probably between 5 and 8 years old
so it's possible she has younger sisters, but older sisters are more likely
b528b1 No.154313
>>154300
"H-hey" and PET YOUR DAUGHTERU WITH THE FORCE OF A THOUSAND FOX-MAKING SUNS
b528b1 No.154314
>>154313
god damn it cripplekike, let me sage
c1ee94 No.154321
>>154300
Pet the shit out of the most beautiful daughteru in the whole wide world assuming we don't have a whole pack of them and ask where mommy is.
>>154307
It's a premonitory dream.
90a9eb No.154325
>"Ah, hey sweetie, what time is it?"
"It's morning-time!"
>"That's not a time."
"Come on! Come on! Mommy made breakfast, let's goooo~!"
She tugs you out of bed and leads you through a japanese-style home. Where the fuck did you get this?
Then it all comes back to you.
After that summer you went back to school, promising Kiyoko you'd come back. After you graduated, you skipped college and went back to the forest. Pleading with the Gods, you gained their blessings for your marriage. They built you a tiny home in a secluded part of the forest and you have lived here ever since.
Rosie went to college and became a successful manga artist, dropping out her Sophomore year (She still tries to send you nudes sometimes). Natalie graduated university and pursued a career as an undercover cop, solving mysteries and busting bad guys. You still visit your Mom every once in a while…and you make sure your Aunt never gets too lonely either. You ease up and let a smile settle on your expression. Funny how things work out.
Your daughter drags you into the dining room and you sit down beside Kiyoko. She hasn't changed much…but then again, her lifespan is a lot longer than yours.
Your three kids line up across the table, digging in without a second thought.
"Did you sleep well, Jeremy?"
6cd307 No.154327
c10169 No.154328
>>154325
"Yeah honey just remembering how we met" Go up to you wife and kiss her
c1ee94 No.154329
>>154325
"I've dreamed of us again."
Give our official waifu a morning kiss.
700dc8 No.154331
>>154325
"The only way we could have slept better if you were with me Kiyoko."
Then give her a good morning kiss like the proper husbando we are. Also because we're a dad and it's our mission in life to embarrass our daughterus with mushy stuff and dad jokes.
b528b1 No.154336
>three cute fox daughterus
>>154329
this
>>154331
>Also because we're a dad and it's our mission in life to embarrass our daughterus with mushy stuff and dad jokes.
then this.
fa5065 No.154339
>>154325
Scold our daughter for eating like a pig.
Kiss Kiyoko and say good morning
658378 No.154343
>>154325
BEST FAMILY EVER
also, we have a house constructed by Gods guys, Gods !
804ece No.154351
>>154343
What, you mean the vengeful Gods that put the cursed mask on Kiyoko in the first place and let Rosie be abused by a fucking ``Demon`` for only the Gods know how long before we broke the curse.
Yeah, I can totally see them just offering us a house and a life without worries in the woods scot-free.
Inb4 we have to pay the price for our happiness in blood
b528b1 No.154352
>>154351
It's fine, we'll pay in blood.
THEIR BLOOD
658378 No.154354
>>154351
Yeah, these Gods
Life is unfair especially for Rosie and we know now that they're someone to blame for
so this >>154352
wait, you mean we won't live enough to see our granddaughteru ?
804ece No.154358
>>154354
I was implying that we would never be able to have granddaughterus
Take that however you will.
72862a No.154361
>OP turned shitposting into a cute, kitsune daughteru-filled ending for her CYOA
I respect that. Good work.
d5032a No.154363
File: 1457310284824.png (Spoiler Image, 9.98 KB, 452x523, 452:523, ClipboardImage.png)
>>154354
Isn't it obvious who we blame?
Don't go after the gods, go after their chosen people.
b528b1 No.154366
>>154363
>gods
>not g*ds
You had one job anon.
700dc8 No.154368
>>154361
>not posting the superior webm
4ab946 No.154380
>>154325
Thank god for OP being based, lets enjoy a nice, tasty breakfast with our family.
90a9eb No.154407
>"I slept like a rock. I had a dream about how we first met."
You sit down next to her and pull her in for a kiss. Your kids make disgusted faces.
>"I was worried. You tossed and turned all night long and would not wake when I shook you."
Her tail wriggles over and strokes against your leg as you dig in.
>"Hey, Koko, stop eating like a pig."
The middle child pauses, sticking her tongue out at you while she wipes her face. The one on her left, Ino, holds up a chopstick.
"Listen to Daddy. It's rude to be so messy."
"Daddy! Daddy! I learned how to skip stones yesterday! Let's go out and throw rocks!"
The girl who jumped on you this morning, Yono, shouts at you enthusiastically, her mouth full of food. You just chuckle.
>"Sure thing, sweetie. It's best the make the most out of every day you have."
You eat peacefully with your family, nestled in a comfortable home hidden behind a droopy tree. You vowed to keep your family safe and happy, and you were never one to break promises.
END
083cd0 No.154410
>>154407
We have gotten BEST END. It is a good day.
700dc8 No.154412
658378 No.154414
>>154407
Thank you OP, for all you've done
e02e41 No.154417
>>154407
Whew, it's finally over.
0982d8 No.154418
>>154407
Which ones are the names of our daughterus again?
b528b1 No.154419
>>154407
We didn't punch. double flying kick or rip and tear the faggots gods, but living a happy life with our waifus and daughterus was still comfy.
Nice CYOA OP, the first one I managed to follow until the end.
fa5065 No.154420
>>154407
Too bad we didnt get to interact with the daughterus.
I wonder how would Rosie react to the one that looks like us.
Oh well.
Thanks for the ride.
b528b1 No.154421
>>154418
Ojoh, Boukoo and Yono.
>>154420
>Rosie emotionlessly albeit lightly blushing hugging and petting Yono
O-OP please
c10169 No.154429
>>154407
Thank you op for finishing
God this story and its ending helped me heart.
c1ee94 No.154439
>>154407
This is so fucking right.
Thank you OP for the sweet ride.
0982d8 No.154441
>>154407
Now I want to see us visiting either rose and/or Natalie and found out that yono snucked in car with us when we arrive.
e02e41 No.154445
>>154407
A truly happy family…
f12ada No.154450
>>154407
>END
Yay happy ending with cute fluffy daughterus
b528b1 No.154451
>>154445
>bane mask
>not on the tallest one
ONE
FUCKING
JOB
75ccf9 No.154453
>>154407
>End
Well, I guess that's it, then. What a ride.
I'm just glad we got to fug the fox and it ended well for us. Thanks OP.
f93797 No.154456
>>154453
Actually we never did
This is just a coma induced dream, Jeremy is in a hospital on life support, his families pleading for him to wake up
d5e294 No.154519
>>154325
>She hasn't changed much…but then again, her lifespan is a lot longer than yours.
This bothers me a lot more than it should. Good job OP for finishing though.
287277 No.154532
>>154407
>END
This was a great CYOA, good work OP
Farewell anons
We'll meet again
6517f1 No.154543
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>>154407
Great End OP!
Happy to see a CYOA that is finished and wrapped up with a satisfying ending!
cf4de7 No.154548
>>154407
You did good OP, I really enjoyed this ride. Came into this still salty about Monsterz, came out a satisfied and happy motherfucker.
Are you going to make any more?
6517f1 No.154551
>>154548
I'm still salty about Monsterz too
967c6e No.154552
>>154548
>>154551
Our salt piles grow ever larger. The salt must flow.
Thanks for this, OP. You usually updated just as I was getting home from work, so it gave me something to look forward to and hope for each night. I eagerly await anything you do in the future.
90a9eb No.154555
3ea20a No.154556
>>154546
Good job Waifu, was relatively short and sweet. Keep improving and I hope to see you around.
>>154548
this
90a9eb No.154558
Honestly I want to make a fun sexventure but at the same time heart warming is really cool. Not sure yet!
cf4de7 No.154560
>>154558
smut is nice but sugary sweet good feels is even better.
700dc8 No.154562
>>154558
While your stories seem to be popular on here, there's still a lot of CYOAs/quests going on right now. At least you didn't abandon this one after one fucking day, AND finished it on top of that.
>>154560
The thing is with me is that I feel like if the reader has an emotional bond with two characters, then when those two characters bang it makes said banging more believable and enjoyable to the reader.
083cd0 No.154563
>>154558
Do what you want, we will support it.
90a9eb No.154567
>>154563
Well hey, don't gotta be that nice. If it's shit you better tell me it's shit. ;)
6517f1 No.154569
>>154567
But it isn't shit
b60ba4 No.154570
>>154558
Did you like Zootopia, OP?
90a9eb No.154572
e02e41 No.154573
>>154567
Pretty generic story brah. I mean I didn't read half of it because I hate the characters with a burning passion (Their faces just, seem too innocent for your switchy decision making. You made her dangerous, then pulled the dindu nuffin card.)
But even from a lense of kindness it doesn't seem surprising or new. The ending was predictable and the sex was bootleg porn tier. Her innocence destroyed my suspense of disbelief and the MC's lack of innocence was less destructive but still questionable.
"I'm gonna pee." made me want to split my urethra with a crowbar.
Coulda used some shading on the art but it's better than I could ever do in my life. You can create mood with lighting, but considering you were throwing out shit every 3 hours I can't complain.
I can go into more detail but I'd have to read it with detailed vision.
In short: Git gud and Glo back to /mlp/.
90a9eb No.154575
>>154573
Less generic, consistent characters and better sex. Fair critique. I will try my best to git gud. I'm by no means an Oscar-winning writer but if I can someday do something to hold your interest then I will consider it a job well done.
also /mlp/ is bully pls no
e02e41 No.154576
>>154575
If you so desire, I will post in the writefag thread a full critique of your thread. Not sure if you even give a flying fuck about my credentials but it will take time to read the whole thing and write an actual analysis. All I will reveal is I have radiation levels of autism, but if it ain't useful to you, there's no point.
90a9eb No.154578
>>154576
Ah! I appreciate the offer but I don't really want to force you to read a story you have no desire to read. To be quite honest I didn't put in as much effort in this story as I probably should've since I have to divide my attention between school and work and regular starving college child things. (though I don't want to make excuses for poor writing)
Although I do kinda wish I could talk to you outside of 8chan since a ballsy writing critic is something that would definitely help me.
e02e41 No.154580
>>154578
Yeah no problem. Just hop in here and make your name public on this thread then I'll PM you. Just to make sure some faggot doesn't jump in. It's the public voice IRC/Discord chat. No account required, just pick a name and say go.
https://discord.gg/0kScMPim3Fm6DaZ5
700dc8 No.154582
>>154578
What I noticed is that between this story and Monsterz is that some plot elements were the same. Mostly that the waifu had some big bad chasing after her, or she ran off and we had to find her.
Making things different makes the story more enjoyable because then people don't know what's gonna happen. But if you do make things the same, then people who have read previous stuff will know what the story's going to be like, and the only real difference is going to be the waifu of choice.
0e63eb No.154583
72862a No.154584
>>154573
Gonna have to agree with this. 3 things I liked about this CYOA:
The fact that you turned shitposting into an actual ending is funny and shows you to be a good sport
The illustrations are nice for something you did in a relatively small frame of time.
It updated quickly (then again, this may be a result of me being a slow as fuck writefag).
Otherwise, the writefagging was sparse and poorly done. Story was generic, characters weren't well-done, buncha other little frustrating stuff. It's shit, not gonna sugar coat it. But if you can draw stuff like that in a short time frame, you might have a future in drawfagging. Follow his advice about lighting and shadows and you can improve significantly. We could use more drawfags here anyhow.
And I must add further,
>being a brony
>getting bullied by /mlp/
b97c5d No.154646
>>154580
this was a wonderful conversation
470e45 No.154660
The ending was kind of.. abrupt
It felt really unreal to me, I was like nah this can't be it can it?
I think you could have played more with how kiyoko is actually dangerous instead of going lol curse of the gods
same with the house at the end, it just throws me out of it
f93797 No.154699
>>154660
that's because OP can't pace for shit nor write
b528b1 No.154716
>>154546
Fucking nice, thanks OP.
658378 No.154740
Out of curiosity Waifu, did you planned the main storyline beforehand or did it just came post by post ?
Also there are many flaws and some plot-hole, some involve characters others the storyline, plus some events seems rushed…
but it was still enjoyable, thank you again
90a9eb No.154788
>>154740
This story wasn't really planned out very far. It was mostly just a distraction from work ahha…
I'm sure the plotholes and flaws are many but I will work to improve in the future!
658378 No.154941
>>154788
a great distraction btw
looking forward for this then
e02e41 No.154963
>>154788
Hey Glo, can you hop in the discord again and either IM Commissar with some sort of email/skype/curse contact or something? Alternatively you could make an account but that's pretty gay.
273650 No.155415
This was a good run, thanks for drawing and everything else Waifu.
I had fun!