>>803I'm going to ignore the few grammatical errors or typos if you don't mind. Take the following points as commentary as opposed to criticism.
You seem to want to demonstrate that what some people call consequencialist ethics is, as seen in the rendition of the trolley problem, more an adherence of the intrinsic value of life. You do this by demonstrating that the consequences cannot be fully evaluated, and that any imperative guide to action is thus based on an assumption or speculation, and not on the actual consequence itself. Or in other words, you demonstrate that it is possible that what the Actor percieves to be the favourable result due to his application of consequentialism is not (necessarily) the best outcome.
If this summary captures the essence of your essay, I'd suggst a different title, seeing as it's currently misleading. Perhaps "Critique of Consequentialism" or "The unfeasibility of Consequentialism" or something of the sort would be more fitting.
That said, there are still a few things you might want to take note of.
First, though this is probably just me, "Normal Person" is supposed to mean "Average Person", so I would go with that rather than use the term "normal".
Second, the notion of a "mistake" in ethics, remains unexplored. For one, as you argue at the end, the formulaic application that "more saved lives > less saved lives" makes the outcome (provided it was not possible to save everyone) the correct one, regardless of the nature of those lives. You'd have a better point if one of the survivors were a killer, thus creating a conflict between saving a life that threatens other lives, but aside from that, there is no reason to call the decion made in your example "false".
You may disagree, but if you do so you are essentially interprting consequentialism in a specific way, like Utilitarianism. So in effect, the consequences were not the objectively best ones they could have been, because different applications of consequentialism contradict each other.
Now, you imply that the Average Person shares the same view of better consequences that the survivors do. Had they known who the individuals were, he might have decided differently. But this again presupposes a specific take on consequentialism, as well as introduces the problem of lacking knowledge that was a key issue for Bentham and Mill. The point of the trolley problem is to reduce any possible consideration to just "saving lives" and reveals that most people go by quantity. This is not unreasonable if no other information is given. And even if information is given after the fact, it cannot lessen the "correctness" behind the initial decision.
So perhaps the main issue I see with the essay is that "consequentialism" signifies an approach towards ethics, and does not offer a key or a set of moral values that must be considered with it. So your Average Person only serves as a representative of the possibility that ones perception of a moral action doesn't have to be the objectively best one to make. As such it exposes a flaw in pure consequentialism that wouldn't happen if there wasn't an additional moral stance (in this case "it is okay to kill people willing to die in order to save someone else").
Overall though, nice deconstruction of consquentialism and "intuitive" morality.