/storytiem/ - Onyxdime's Storytiem

Are you going to make choices meaningless again by using coinflip dicerolls on every action?

>>32827

I kinda like that idea for char gen, my only concern would be it taking much longer than intended though

>>32828

But our choices weren't meaningless anon. We made bad choices coupled with bad rolls, doesn't mean we gotta blame the author

>>32827

I like that idea for character gen, as long as it doesn't last too long. It should give the character more realistic traits and define her personality a little better, which is something a lot of stories on here miss. Good idea

>>32828

Can we stop doing this now? So OP maybe misbalanced some rolls, whatever. When you write and perfectly balance a CYOA, then you can judge. Don't blame OP because of bad luck, back choices, or because the plot didn't go exactly your way. It was still one of the most enjoyable stories on the board. Don't ruin the new story for the rest of us with your pointless negativity.

>>32827

looking forward to it.

Will you be going for a more balanecd difficulty for this game or will you make it hard mode again? Personaly hoping it wont be hard mode again.

>>32831

This.

I've told stories ten times worse than what the OP has told back when I was starting to write on /b/.

Everyone makes mistakes and needs to work out a system of storytelling that works for them. Practice makes perfect.

>>32832

>>32828

While the difficulty on the rolls may or may not have been off, I propose that the main problem is the votes don't always have a consistent strategy or even a good strategy.

I want reader choices to be meaningful by way of having long time impact. which paradoxiccally makes later choices feel less meaningfull since you feel railroaded by earlier events.

I'm not 100% sure how this is gonna play out I might just play it by ear. This story is again a first for me so basically everything might be subject to change.

>>32829

the length of the introduction is also a concern of mine, I'll try to keep it within limits (basically only one event for early childhood, adolescence, and early puberty each).

>>32837

Looking forward to it!

Hi! So I'm a pretty big fan of your games MR. I definitely like the general idea of Jungle Fever and now this. However, looking back on jungle fever I would like to give my opinion on how things could run in this new game. You can take or leave any of it, I just want to put my opinion out there.

If you are going to bring in a derivative of the role-finding / societal casting element of jungle fever, I think we should have a system that uses tiers for social interaction.

Basically, in jungle fever, we just walked around the forest until we met a small array of other characters, and just continually battled against/with them. When we first met Lariana, we lost a fight and then everyone complained on how hard the game had become. I remember having to roll 80+ on a confidence test just to not get raped by her. I think this is because we were forced to stay with Lariana and not venture out and find new people. Because Lariana grew more powerful after our first loss, it became easier for her to keep us down and dominate us. In my opinion, the main problem with Jungle fever was that it was very hard to comeback from a loss.

I think for this game we should have a tier-based system that is centered around groups, clubs, and sports. This will allow our character to avoid being trapped with people who can easily dominate / control them.

For example, say our character wants to try Judo. They join and develops friends but quickly gets dominated by a senior member in the judo group. Because of this, drama occurs and the group turns on the character and forces them to leave. Since jungle fever had the female / herm for sub/dom behavior, our character will probably be feminine after being cast out.

All of this allows for mobility but the same sense of punishment for being dominated that Jungle Fever brought. Being forced to leave means the character can’t comeback and has to find a spot in another area. This also means that our character is free to leave the circle to avoid continual domination, but will have to work harder to get back to their original standing in another group because their physique will tell other people that the character was dominated.

MR, I loved the idea of Jungle Fever. I loved that losses in jungle fever meant you had to play more passively/smartly. Losses weren’t just a simply nerf, it meant a difference in play-style. But please, whether or not you accept this advice, the game needs to change so that we can’t be continually be beaten down by the same character. We can’t be stuck after 1 loss, hoping that the role won’t be so high to survive. Thanks and good luck!

>>32852

You make a couple of excellent points, and they were also a huge reason why i changed the format, since I realised there's not much I can do to give you this mobility in the jungle, since it would be too dangerous to go alone as a submissive.

Having the story set in a school like sysem allows the characters to not only get by with their own strength but can rely on othres to enforce rules that protect the weak.

There mwill of course be predatory dicks around that will pounce on you and make your life miserable if you let them, but I'm sure the player will try to do the same when I present the oppportunity (and I will if the story permits)

But it has to be said that this goes both ways, where the player has to play smart even when they are strong so as to not get ostracised from groups for being a giant dick (pun intended)

I'm thinking about adding a rough reputation system that will help you rise in socialö status without necessarily fucking everything into submission.

How does this sound?

>>32864

That sounds pretty good

>>32864

Sounds neat!

Rolled 5, 1, 1, 4, 2, 4 = 17 (6d5)

Alright everybody, since it seems like I'll have a day without obligations I'm gonna get the introduction started. I'm gonna make some rolls to determine some starting parameters while you guys vote for a name (names will be more in line with real names this time).

The solls determine (in order): number of siblings, where you place among them (if higher than number of siblings you are automatically the youngest), social standing, physical, mental, and social. For the last four a 3 would be average, lower would be below average etc. If you need more explanation on this just ask,.

So I'm gonna start writing the intro and you guys get started on the name.

>>32917

So we're the oldest of 5 siblings and the one everyone walks all over, is that right?

Katherine, Kat for short

Kat is a good name.

>>32918

>>32919

Lets go with Kat.

You are Katherine, or Kat for short.

You live with your mother and your 4 younger siblings in a small house.

You are not quite aware of it yet, but you and your family are at the bottom of the social ladder, which will make your life an uphill battle against stigmatization and financial disadvantages.

You love being outside and playing with other children more so than most children your age.

You are not very good at focusing at a single task for too long and have a trouble grasping difficult abstract constructs, and you often get chastised for it.

You often play games outside with your younger sisters and other kids of the neighborhood. When you make teams you are usually a team captain with one of the other sporty kids, partly because you are good at most sport games but also because you are well liked and manage to prevent disputes from getting out of hand.

One day you are playing a game with 2 of your sisters and 3 neighborhood kids around your age, when you are interrupted by two girls you've never seen before.

They look a little older than you (but you bet you could take them anyway), and you notice their clothes look nicer than yours (or the other kids). You see them whispering to each other. They point at you and laugh, you don't know what this is about.

They approach one of your friends and while you can't really make out what is being said you immediately notice that a fight is going to break out if you don't intervene (your friend has a short temper). You could go over there and ask what is wrong and try to diffuse the situation, or you could try to stay out of this and let your friend handle herself, since she didn't ask for your help (yet). Or you could go over there and tell the newcomers that they should get lost, possibly escalating the situation. Or maybe you need an adult?

What will you do?

A) Try to solve the dispute peacefully (social interaction)

B) Try to stay out of it (lets see how the situation unfolds first)

C) Tell them off (high likelyhood of escalation)

D) Try to get help

E) Other

>>32920

A

Have to play to our strengths

>>32920

C

Let's start strong, guys

>>32920

A

>>32920

Hope you're saving that post and any others you make because they will get wiped when the server swap happens.

>>32920

Hope you're saving that post and any others you make because they will get wiped when the server swap happens.

>>32924

I save everything locally.

>>32920

A

>>32921

>>32923

>>32927

A wins, give me a 40+ social roll to see how well you handle the situation.

Rolled 98 (1d100)

>>32928

Rolled 3 (1d100)

>>32928

Social

That was close.

>>32929

>>32930

7 seconds made a world of difference, huh

>>32929

>>32930

look at that, you didnt call your roll.

just kidding, but I'll use this as a reminder to call your rolls, especially when there are multiple rolls colled.

next part coming up.

ou decide to go over and see what the problem is. (98 rolled, you are quite the diplomat)

You quickly realize that the two strangers only wanted to join your game because it looked fun, and your friend thought they were mocking you.

After clearing up the misunderstanding you let them join the teams and proceed to have a good time.

When it is time for the two of them to leave you made two new friends (Twin sisters, Bella and Mary). All of you hope to see each other again in the future if possible.

As you grow older you never have problems finding people who want to be friends with you, but sometimes your popularity makes people envious, especially since some kids see you as beneath them and don't understand how you can be so popular. Sometimes your friends get bullied because they hang out with you, but you try to stand up for them whenever you can.

When it's time for you to enter school your classmates often look to you for comfort or to solve disputes and you develop a natural leadership. But you also notice that you have trouble in most classes (except anything involving sports).

You could just accept that that's how you are and focus on your strong points (this will exacerbate your strengths and weaknesses).

You could try to focus on studying instead of spending more time with your friends or playing sports or both (this would be the best opportunity for you to increase your mental score which influences awareness, focus, willpower etc. but might hurt your social and physical according to die roll).

This decision will also influence your forming event.

A) screw studying, have fun instead (your mental performance will permanently suffer)

B) sacrifice sport to study (will make you at least average in both mental and physical, plus additional effects decided by a roll)

C) let your social life suffer to focus more on studying (will make you average in mental but still a bit above average in social plus extra effects etc.)

D) sacrifice both (will make you above average in mental, but your social and physical suffer, plus roll)

>>32934

B

>>32934

A

>>32934

B)

>>32934

A

>>32935

>>32936

>>32937

>>32938

alright give me a tiebreaker between A and B

>>32939

A

>>32940

A wins, give me an encounter roll

Rolled 51 (1d100)

>>32941

Here comes the 1

>>32942

You spend most of your time playing with your friends and keeping in shape. As a result your grades suffer and some of your teachers worry about your possible future. Although it will be possible for you to focus your energy on things you enjoy and are good at, you will still have to pass basic classes in school and in college.

One way to make your life easier in the future would be to excel in sports, and although you are pretty good in your own right, there are some who are better.

Over time there's been a clear pattern where you Nadia and Florentine would often place among the top 3 in most rankings.

While you and Nadia got along pretty well, Flo mocks you whenever she can and you have a severe dislike for her. There's an important event coming up, where you can make name for yourself as a young talent if you place first. Flo and Nadia are both better off than you, so not much is riding on this for them except the bragging rights, but you don't expect either of them to go easy on you for your benefit. Although you might be able to appeal to Nadia to help a friend out, you're not sure you want that.

How will you prepare for this event? You could train extra hard to give you an edge over the competition, or you could try to sabotage them. Maybe ask Nadia for help? Or maybe you shouldn't stress so hard about this and just relax.

(the event will be decided by me rolling for Nadia and Flo and you will have to beat their score.)

A) Train extra hard (you will roll to see how effective it is, you have a a chance to hurt yourself)

B) Ask Nadia to let you win (easy social if passed her roll will get halved)

C) Try to sabotage Flo (harder roll, if passed her roll will get halved)

D) Do both of the above (there's 40% chance you will get yought cheating)

E) Do nothing special

>>32943

A and B

>>32944

Seconded

>>32943

A

Let's go pump some fuckin' iron

A

>>32944

>>32945

>>32946

>>32947

A) and B) win

Roll a 20+ social roll to convince Nadia to go easy on you

roll a training roll to see how well it goes

remember to call your rolls this time or I will not count them.

Rolled 92 (1d100)

>>32948

I'll take the social roll

Rolled 8 (1d100)

>>32948

Training roll

Rolled 30, 79 = 109 (2d100)

>>32950

well at least it's not a 1, which would have left a really serious injury. This way you "only" get a -20 modifier in the event. I'll give you a + 10 for the social roll though, since nadia decides to help you to train. which comes out at -10

too bad you didnt get the 92 in the training roll.

anyway, my rolls are for Nadia (gets halved) and Flo. You need to roll above Flo to win this tournament (you get a -10 modifier)

>>32950

well at least it's not a 1, which would have left a really serious injury. This way you "only" get a -20 modifier in the event. I'll give you a + 10 for the social roll though, since nadia decides to help you to train. which comes out at -10

>too bad you didnt get the 92 in the training roll.

>anyway, my rolls are for Nadia (gets halved) and Flo. You need to roll above Flo to win this tournament (you get a -10 modifier)

>>32952

hm 8chan is acting up again.

>>32951

this suddenly got pretty hard, I'm not sure if that's because of my set up or because of bad luck. I hope it doesn't come across as me going hard mode puposely again :/

Rolled 4 (1d100)

>>32951

Don't worry guys, I've got this performance roll down

>>32953

It's our luck, no worries

>>32954

Uh, that's before the -20

>>32955

I don't take modifier into account when it comes to criticals. nevertheless this is pretty terrible. Nothing could have really saved this, you didn't even manage to beat Nadia and she wanted to let you win. I'm guessing professional sports will not be your thing, but hey at least you got your epic social skills.

I might need a bit to flesh out the last introduction event before we are ready to jump into the story proper.

I'm getting tired so I'm gonna call it a day for now. I might be able to squeeze in a day or two over the holidays, but don't count on it.

Oh look, choices are meaningless because of rolls on literally every action. Who could have possibly predicted this outcome?

>>33000

Ya know, some of us can enjoy things without your superior taste or intuitive sarcasm. If you have a problem with story, you should really add in some constructive advice to make your post actually meaningful, lest it come across sounding like a whole lot of butthurt over a couple bad rolls.

Hey guys, i got up early so i have a little time to write before my dentist appointment.

Give me a puberty roll to see how it affecs you (you are on the dom side right now so you get a +10 on your roll).

Unless you roll above 90/below10 the changes will not be too extreme, in case some people are worried that this would completely decide everything.

Rolled 86 (1d100)

>>33012

Puberty roll

>>33000

Shut up. Just shut up. If you have a legitimate critique, form it into a suggestion. Don't discourage people from being creative and trying to tell a story on the board.

>>33013

Noice

You manage to convince Nadia easily, she even offers to help you prepare for the big day. But even though you try your hardest you can't make a significant improvement, even worse you put too much strain on yourself and manage to hurt yourself.

When the day finally arrive you're not too confident in yourself, and it shows. Even taking into account that you are injured your performance is abysmal. You can't even place in the top 3 with Nadia trying her best to let you beat her without drawing attention.

After Florentine took the chance to mention that you finally know where your place is you sulk into the shower to wash the shame away.

Although you still like to spend time keeping fit and healthy you never quite enjoyed competing on sports like you did before.

Finally you and your peers reach the age of sexual maturity, where all (or most) of you undergo physical and mental changes.

Many of your classmates start to grow curves and you notice that your chest grows bigger too, but more importantly you start to grow a decent chunk, becoming taller than most of your peers. You also notice your body becoming stronger.

The most drastic change though seems in the way people interact. Suddenly not everyone is just a friend or not, people become partners, rivals, lovers or anything in between.

A popular topic of conversation is gossiping about who hooked up with whom, and speculating if anyone grew a dick (you doubt it). While there's some rumors about people being hung (sometimes you included) you are sure there's not much too it. If someone claims they have a dick they most likely insecure about not having one, which had been proven on a few embarrassing occasions.

Sometimes you get a little insecure about your lack of equipment, mainly since you get asked frequently how big yours is, but you try not to let it get to you.

Then there are relationships. Most relationships at this age are not made to last, but people still attempt to prove their worth by finding someone who can tolerate them over an extended period of time. A very important aspect to dating is the perceived social standing. While some people don't care about class as much as others, they will still feel the effects, since they will often make themselves a target of ridicule when they “fuck down”.

(There are 5 classes in total, where the higher on the ladder you are, the more damaging it is to your reputation if you consort with the plebs)

Which puts you in a peculiar position, since your background is at low as it gets, but your social skill makes you popular enough to have friends amongst the higher classes.

If you were to get intimate with someone from the higher classes (3 or above) you would likely provoke a response from someone who sees it as an affront against the natural order, but it would raise your social status accordingly if you can keep it.

You could avoid trouble by only dating within the accepted circles (bottom 2 classes), but your reputation would suffer. You could try to get with someone from the higher classes (there is no one available from the top class so only 2 or 3) but keep it on the down low (makes it more likely to succeed but you will get only a small boost to your reputation), or you could try to deliberately provoke a reaction to stick it to the man (high risk high reward option)

You could also ignore the whole dating nonsense, most people are way too immature for you anyway. (This would result in a slight penalty to your social and starting sexual skill)

A) Date within your circle (needs to pass a 10+ social roll)

B) Date someone higher up without causing trouble (pass a 20+ social roll, followed by a 40+ to see if you get confronted)

C) Date someone higher up and be open about it (needs a 40+ social roll for someone to agree to this, which will then lead into the extended encounter)

D) Ignore all of this nonsense

>>33019

C because i like the possibilities if getting caught as well as getting away with it, as well as giving no fucks

>>33019

B

>>33020

You can't get caught if you're being open about it.

>>33019

C

Let's be the over-sexed jock character. Maybe kick some sand in Archie's face.

I have to leave for now, feel free to keep voting in the meantime, this decision will influence your future behavior, depending on your success.

>>33024

not that im saying that your approach is wrong but remember that is the approach that we took in the last game, you know the one that a lot of people got buthurt about.

Just throwing that out there

>>33019

C

>>33028

Hopefully all the "losing isn't fun" people have left by now.

>>33019

C

>>33024

>>33020

>>33029

>>33032

C) takes the lead, give me a 40+ social roll

>>33033

I wanted to change the difficulty to 30+, sorry about that.

Rolled 100 (1d100)

>>33033

social!!

>>33035

OMG!! OMG!!

>>33037

well…i'm asking for a redhead now…

>>33038

I'll give you two if you want, RNGesus looks favorably onto social rolls. I think you rolled every social roll aboce 90.

I'm not gonna be able to write the next update today (maybe not tommorrow either), so feel free to suggest things you want me to do with your perfect 100. I'll see what I can work in.

Guys, I think we just got the head cheerleader and her twin sister to date us at the same time. And their ok with it.

threesomes with upper class girls?

Not sure that a crit when rolling to provoke a reaction is entirely a good thing.

I kind of want something like this.

In locker room after sports/chearlearder event thing (because everyone is a girl there is one big locker room maybe) we're takin of our clothes because we're all hot and sweaty. Catch head chearleader mirin' us and confront her. Shes basicaly drooling over our sweet bod and we just start making out/finger-banging her in front of everyone. +1 social status, +1 gf.

Years later: "And thats how your mom and I met"

>>33040

Something big, something public, something that'll cement our dominance to everyone else around and give us a reputation as someone to be feared and respected.

>>33064

I like this

>>33077

>>33064

We should at least get the twin sister with this to. I mean cmon guys, threesomes with wincest? What isn't to love?

I thought of something that i think you're going to like. You'll be going around and "convince" the members of the upper class to see your point of view. There's 10 of them total, where you automatically convince the first one to be your gf.

For every convert you get a reputation boost.

If you manage to get 5 or more on your side the rest will not object openly even if you do not convince them (big reputation boost)

If you manage to convince all of them you basically changed the social structure at your shool (massive reputation boost, you're basicall one of them by that point).

If you fail to convince one before getting at least half there'll be a confrontation.

You get two chances to convert each first will be a social roll (will get harder with every proceeding member) and if you fail that you can try to dominate (difficulty will be listed below)

For every 90 or above you get a +10 to subsequent social/dominance rolls a hundred will half the next opposing roll). inverse is true for low rolls.

Here are the 10 candidates (I'll let the first two be Bella and Mary because twins):

Bella (automatically convinced)

Mary (10+ social, 10+ dominance) very easy because twin sister.

Lea (20+ social, 20+ dominance) easy because she is submissive)

Nadia (30+ social 20+ dominance) is a little more concerned with status but thinks you're really hot

Malena (40+ social, 50+ dominance) here start the snobby more dommy people, if you convince her you avoid direct confrontation

Sasha: (50+ social 50+ dominance)

Lexi: (60+ Social 50+ dominance)

Cin: (60+ social 60+ dominance)

Flo: (70+ social 70+ dominance)

Remember to call who you roll what stat for. Very important since there are going to be many rolls.

For people who think I try to cheat them out of an easy win: This option is only available because of your perfect 100, and will give you the opportunity to preemptively win the confrontation, you don't lose anything if you fail 2 rolls (unless maybe you roll two 1s in a row) and you can get massive bonuses, so low risk high reward.

>>33081

Well than let me roll for Mary

>>33082

Rolled 62 (1d100)

>>33083

How to roll? Brain no Work

>>33084

Be sure to call the name and type of roll in the future "Mary social" for example.

Also, since there so many people I'll allow the same person to roll again if either ten minutes passed without anyone else rolling or 2 other people rolled after them.

>>33085

My apologies, so we can pick which one to roll for or do we have to do Social then dominance?

>>33086

I'd recommend social first, since you forfeit your social roll if you go directly for dominance (if you try to forcefully convince someone and fail you're not gonna have much luck trying to convince them normally)

So you should only roll for dominance if you failed the social roll.

>>33087

Makes sense. But if we manage to Dom roll so many people don't we already get our dick?

>>33088

yes, if you convince 4 you get your dick after the encounter.

>>33088

yes, if you convince 4 you get your dick after the encounter.

Rolled 43 (1d100)

>>33081

Also, Rolling for Lea Social

Rolled 87 (1d100)

>>33081

Nadia social

Rolled 99 (1d100)

>>33081

Nadia social

>>33093

>>33092

So fucking Close

Rolled 3 (1d100)

Sorry for the double post, 8ch got me errors

>>33095

It's acting up for me too.

Apparently your luck evens out.I'm gonna leave for now, good luck with the rest of the rolls.

Rolled 8 (1d100)

>>33081

Fuck it, here is my last roll. Malena Social

>>33097

Fuck me

is it possible to try and dominate the twins mother?

>>33097

You're gonna need to roll 60+ to pass the dominance roll now.

>>33099

i think that's too far reaching for the introduction, and probably not a good idea unless you want to get assfucked by "daddy".

Rolled 4 (1d100)

>>33100

Ok ok. But it's my personal goal now.

dominance 60+ roll

>>33101

Aaaaand i'll stop rolling for a while

>>33101

I will not count this one as it was not properly called.

Rolled 14 (1d100)

>>33081

Going to make Malena into our good little cock slut.

Rolling dominance and dick growing powers

>>33104

lol

Do we need to keep rolling?

Rolled 51 (1d100)

>>33081

Well, fuck the order and fuck the rules since i'm the one rolling the 100.

I roll for Flo's Dominance!

Rolled 18 (1d100)

>>33081

Rolling social for Sasha

Rolled 5 (1d100)

>>33081

And dominance for sasha

>>33111

>>33112

>Also, since there so many people I'll allow the same person to roll again if either ten minutes passed without anyone else rolling or 2 other people rolled after them.

>>33112

>>33111

>>33108

>>33104

>>33101

>>33097

Slow clap of approval. It wouldn't be a MR game if we didn't fail spectacularly.

>>33114

well… we started good

Rolled 20 (1d100)

>>33115

It's the thought that counts. And fuck it. Lexi Social

Rolled 90 (1d100)

>>33116

Ya I'm just gonna stop

>>33117

WTF RNGEESUS! WHY!

>>33118

i think we are messing a lot with this uncalled rolls…

>>33104

ok looking at the following rolls I think it's clear that it's not meant to be.

But not all is lost, I'm gonna start writing the last encounter now (you can stop rolling before you hurt yourself btw) and we'll see how that goes. I might take a little longer to work in some smutty goodness.

which reminds me, does anyone know when 8 chan is scheduled to work properly again?

>>33120

ty mate, take your time

>>33120

>does anyone know when 8 chan is scheduled to work properly again?

No idea, they just said it would take a few days to fix thier problems.

Rolled 87 (1d100)

>>33081

Lexi dominance

Rolled 5 (1d100)

>>33123

I did it!

>>33123

>>33124

>>33120

>(you can stop rolling before you hurt yourself btw)

>>33125

He said we can stop. And there's no actual rule that says we have to stop because we've got a high modifier.

I'm going to be mad if that doesn't count. I wasn't able to be here before and I didn't get to roll, and by some miracle I still made the roll.

Rolled 64 (1d100)

still gonna roll a social for cin.

lets see how that goes.

I guess i could have been clearer, but the "event" stopped when you failed to convince Malena, sorry :(

>>33128

>>33123

Aw, we could have gotten two more.

>>33133

we have a nice harem

>>33130

Is this done for?

>>33481

Nah, as i said I'm busy over the holidays. Expect more in january.

Why were all these posts deleted?