No.26
I want to write a story and would like you opinion on it.
>anon is trying to masturbate but is too uninterested to finish
>starts thinking about how shit his life is
>decides to turn a new leaf (again) and go for a run
>starts to run down the stairs and trips
>breaks neck and blacks out
>wakes up in a new fantasy world
>thinks he is going to start an epic adventure, optimistic
>enslaved by orcs and used as fuck toy cause his long hair and bony skin makes him look like a girl to orcs
>broken anon is despair/delirious, goes full /d/
>orc camp is raided by elves
>elves take slaves including anon to frontier fort
>anon and non-elven slaves is used for experiments by alchemists to test healing properties of certain medicine
>anon accepts his fate while missing his own world and prepares to commit suicide
>slave in same cage frees himself and and fights with guard
>guard is killed and slave is badly hurt
>slave begins looting for weapons
>alarm rings
>slave is surprised and look outside window facing woods
>arrow is lodgeg in slaves neck
>slave is dead, frontier fort under attack
>anon thinks about is he want to escape but is uncertain if even wants to remain living
>sees Orcs are attacking fort and doesn't want to go back
>decides to take guards heavy armor and puts them on
>other slaves in cage are yelling something at him, but he can understand their language
>dungeon shakes, anon is scared shitless
>anon runs and leaves other slaves locked up
>anon begins running down stairs
>dungeon tower is on fire
>anon panicks, everything is falling and on fire
>tower collapses and burns on anon
>anon literally broiled alive inside metal armor
Anon survives and actually ventures into the world, but would you guys read this story if it was 50 pages long? I have written a few things before when I was in high school of similar length, but nothing like hard core fantasy or anything. I would say this is more like a long short story if that makes sense. But I want to get intake on whether this would make a decent story or not.
No.27
Seems interesting enough but you'll need to develop more in terms of a plot imho
No.30
You might be interested in checking out Lester Dent's pulp plot formula and adjusting your story to fit.