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File: 1434708877083.pdf (160.31 KB, Austrian-Keynesian Dialect….pdf)

 No.381[Reply]

Or,

Framing Economic Thought: Global Control by Monetary Means

Originally

Austrian-Keynesian Dialectic: Economics as Psyops, taken from a thread on /32/ here

>>>/32/1459

This anon delved into the reasoning behind economic theory and the popularly touted thoughts commonly known to any student of commerce. It becomes clear via their reasoning that a glaring hole is left in each adversarial school of thought: the purpose and place of usury in the economic system. Anon goes on to detail the shortcomings of the varying economic "options" presented to the common man, and how, in the absence of a rational and moral stance on usury, he is manipulated to believe in the false worth of an economic system doomed to inevitable decay at the expense of his creditors.

A captivating and essential read for every man's understanding of debt, economic theory, and the criminal scum who to this day hold the world at large.

 No.421

File: 1436077241215.jpg (1.26 MB, 1764x875, 252:125, Zimbabwe_$100_trillion_200….jpg)

Now my head has cancer.

Thanks OP.




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 No.285[Reply]

ITT: We post some of our favorite posts on /pol/

And board owner, there needs to be an apostrophe in the name of the board you fucking faggot
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 No.370

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 No.371

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 No.376

File: 1434075380138.png (195.29 KB, 1823x447, 1823:447, POL on Liberal Hypocrisy.png)

Every time I come to the top of the page, I'm forced down to the bottom. What the fuck?


 No.378

>>285

>capping your own posts


 No.379

>>378

Just realised that, kek




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 No.267[Reply]

Anyone interested in writing movie scripts or story boards? This could be scripts written for real actors (dystopian diverse future, what if the Nazis had won? Or showing today's progressive society tongue in cheek)

Pic not related.

Or be written for a compiled YouTube video with a script.

I am sure there could be 8chan collaboration to produce videos

 No.271

I am a director/cinematographer and I would love to be of help in a /pol/ production. However it would be rather difficult since I'm in a small European country where there are pretty much zero /pol/acks.

 No.273

Well, I have the ideas, but I've no experience in the industry or in writing scripts at all. I have the interest for it, however.

I can write normal novel-style writing well though.

 No.279

>>267
I'm majoring in Film/Video, so I've had some experience with scriptwriting. Plus, friends and I used to make home videos all the time.

 No.375

>>279

>>279

Same with me, but I have writer's block right now. There are so many concepts in my head, but I can't get them written down.


 No.377

>>273

Same for me. Tried writing a script once and it didn't turn out so great.




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 No.358[Reply]

Hello /pen/! I'm reading pic related and even though I'm not too far in, I've been thinking about some things, specifically things that come about in Part 1 Section 2, "The Big Secret of Dealing With People".

In the book, the author comments that "The desire for a feeling of importance is one of the chief distinguishing differences between mankind and animals." You'll have no argument from me on that point. However, my primary question is dealing with application and utilization of that point. I know that with many of the people I have dealt with, that they would see the attempt at flattery and piling on of "importance" as a sham and might distrust the individual who tried to do as much.

Therefore, my questions are as follows:

1. Are the majority of people receptive to this type of attention/compliment/flattery?

2. How is one able to tell if an individual might be receptive to such forms of flattery? Repeated encounters? Using a few and gauging reaction? Both? Something else?

3. The book does not talk about individuals with Autism/Aspergers. Does anyone have experience with people on the spectrum and how these sorts of tactics affect those people?

4. Are folks in certain professions more susceptible to these types of flattery? I would imagine that an artist may be more receptive as compared to a given physicist due to (what I think, anyway) a person with a different type of mindset gravitating towards these professions.

Any thoughts? Comments? Thanks.

 No.360

>3. The book does not talk about individuals with Autism/Aspergers. Does anyone have experience with people on the spectrum and how these sorts of tactics affect those people?

kek'd


 No.363

Read further, your questions are getting answered in the book.

It's not about giving poor compliments, flattery is exactly the way not to go (as you'll read later), but rather commenting on something you can truly, without inflation, see value in or appreciate - something that the other person is able to do, did, has, you'll read that if you read further.


 No.372

I would argue the following:

1)Yes, but to different degrees in different ways. A cynic or a person prone to paranoia would of course see a strong attempt as deliberate and disingenuous, while on the other hand, an egoist such as a salesman would be more likely to not notice the calculated nature of the attempt or not care.

2)On this, I would say appearance is a good first gauge. Perhaps not as refined a gauge as repeated encounters, or getting to know them a bit, but useful none the less.

3)We're basically talking about Spock on this one. They're going to want to feel that their logic is sound.

4)I would submit that there is a difference between professions insomuch as there is a difference of personality type between professions. Salesmen, politicians, preachers, etc, are in general insecure people and want very much to be liked and admired as people while doctors, soldiers, tradesmen, etc, in general want their skill or accomplishments to be admired.

My two cents on the topic.




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 No.112[Reply]

What do you think of my short story /pol/? Anything I need to change before entering it to every single short story competition on the web?

http://pastebin.com/hZ5f4Kpt
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 No.299

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>>151

This really is fantastic, more people should be reading this. This is an intelligent way to troll people, as the first half of the story appeals to everyopne including normies, and the rest is pure unadulterated trolling

 No.306

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>>296
I take it you've never read first person reflective narrative before have you?

 No.308

I made two stories like this. Much shorter, though.

http://pastebin.com/j8D34Liq
http://pastebin.com/f1hbGHVZ

 No.335

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 No.357

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 No.338[Reply]

For seven years our empires favourite son

has turned from the light of our sovereign goals

two hundred years work has become undone

the forces are mighty under traitor control

half of the legions

third of the guard

uncounted regions

no person unscarred

a deadly path home

no resolution

the void they roam

no absolution

at Saturn a monstrous fleet

our brothers surrender their lives

and suffer certain defeat

by the thousands they died

the fateful news relayed

the traitors are coming

their fleet is barely delayed

no victory forthcoming

from above Emperor's speech

defend the palace

of our lord's fury teach

hearts formed of malice

from orbit canons reach

and scar the holy surface

end this madness the subjects beseech

of all the cruelty this is the furthest

the forces of greed have corrupted their souls

the enemy has landed

and the virtues they used to extol

now lie abandoned

the Primarchs they stand and with us hold the line

side by side Astartes and man

sworn by oath, loyalty enshrined

with our bodies we form a dam

fifty-five days

no ammo, no food

commanders survey

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 No.339

>>338

>Some 40k poetry




File: 1423380286101.jpg (213.24 KB, 1288x620, 322:155, RISK.jpg)

 No.48[Reply]

PDF made from the thread that got lots of attention on /gamergate/ and /po/. Interesting stuff. Definitely thought-provoking, even if you don't agree with the conclusions.

I'd like to see an expanded commentary on this with additional links to further reading on some of the subjects the OP alludes to.

Here is the post, with a few edits for clarification and one of the best comments in the /pol/ thread included; along with the sources.

IF we ever have a journal or anything like that I think we should include this article along with some analysis and further links provided by other anons.

 No.49

File: 1423380319824.pdf (778.4 KB, geopolitics_censorship_gam….pdf)


 No.337

This is a pretty good PDF.




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 No.322[Reply]

Nzolo, whats your say on my newest poetry?

Feedback on my poem?

Genuine

Give me the sweet green exception
of your genuine red affection
not the chalked up, blacked out alienation
far below our crowded white sunny sky sensation
where planes fly and our infatuation never dies
which where way above in the dark abyss
across the ocean of time, love is just a myth
I have to say hell no, fuck yes,
fathom the aesthetics from which you are blessed
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 No.326

>>322
I would have to hear it, I can't get any rhythm from reading it.

Besides that, and I mean this with respect, what the fuck are you on about? It reads like a schizophrenic's manifesto.

 No.327

>>326
Does it really? How so?

 No.328

>>324
Such as what?

 No.329

>>322
I like it, anon.
But try to carve out a bit more of a rhythm.

 No.331

>>327
My understanding of the poem is this. It's a confused profession of some bastard of adoration and lust for some other - never defined nor articulated, like the first stanza zooming about in its caprice. All of this urge directed towards some person that we are assured is 'genuine' and worthy of the 'best' treatment, I presume, despite that treatment not being the most noble in the first place.

Now, am I off the mark, or is this poem really a Frankenstein's monster of traditional, virtuous love and misguided modern "love"? The lack of discernible rhythm helps to exude that vibe of a fickle narrator. This is why it reads like a schizo's manifesto, or perhaps more strikingly, the midnight text messages I receive from my junkie friends. It's all over the place, like a budding, awkward teenage writer's first poem for his secret crush.

It shows great promise, but it is simply unrefined and immature in its structure and motive. Practise and read more, learn more about the ways of the world, and make sure that your next inspiration is more of a tour de force, and not like this tour de farce.



File: 1428550574503.jpg (1.51 MB, 2560x1600, 8:5, 1422316059173.jpg)

 No.320[Reply]

Hey, /pen/, im trying to write a sci-fi story based in the far future. I dont really want to go into what the story is about, but i plan to have it heavily based around internet messages and chats.

Normally when i write, its poetry (and pretty shitty free verse at that), and i have never written a full story before. How the hall do i make the online dialogue nice, and not super shitty? Any advice would be greatly appreciated.

 No.321

Write something and we will tell you what you can do to improve it.



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 No.313[Reply]

Greetings!

I have something to share with you.
Would you mind giving this a quick glance and tell me what you think?
I hope creating a new thread for this was acceptable.

-

Dear Allies,

After World War I, you nurtured the young Soviet Union and tried to internally poison and destroy post-WWI-Germany, which ultimatively led to the events of World War II. When one single man, tried to relieve the world of the Jewish plague. To finally restore order and peace to all lesser men around the globe, which were and will now forever be, thanks to you, pawns in the games of the Jews, you decided to stand by Great Britannia and her Empire of lies, instead of doing what was good and what was righteous. You then proceeded to side with Stalin and destroy Nazi Germany, the last bastion of hope for the Occident. Roosevelt led by greed and fear of losing influence over South-East Asia put an embargo of steel and oil and Japan, leaving them no other option, but to join the war and tricking the American citizens into yet supporting another war. After war, you came to realize where you had done wrong. The Soviets had occupied Europe and the Jew gleefully rubbed their hands, sensing the great wealth that could be gained, from simply supporting both sides with weapons. Yet, did you learn? When the Iron Curtain fell, instead of offering a helping hand to the crushed Russians and establishing lasting peace, you smugly looked the other way, hurting their pride even more. Russia extending its claws again, is solely your fault. Instead of seeing the threat that China became to be, even more so today, you nurtured a deeply corrupted and perverted nation, traded with them, built them up. Well, you see were that led you to. Lets face it, by killing this man you doomed us all. Picture very related. Do not call it a grave, it is the future you chose. You are welcome.

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 No.315

>>314
This is not perfect yet, I agree.
But "the allies" is the biggest generic term I could come up with, addressing every country not being Germany or sided with Germany.
Simply writing America wouldnt have been correct.

 No.316

>>315
You misunderstand my main point: what on earth is the purpose of this? To dance over the finer points of geopolitical and economic history so that you could steal some moral high ground? Are you going to mail this into the oval office?

 No.317

>>316
>You misunderstand my main point: what on earth is the purpose of this? To dance over the finer points of geopolitical and economic history so that you could steal some moral high ground? Are you going to mail this into the oval office?

That is an excellent idea!
The purpose of this text though, is simply to startle people and give me replies so we can work it trough.
That worked perfectly on pol, I consider this thing to be a success.

 No.318

>>317
Let me get this straight. You're attention whoring?

 No.319

>>318
Right, making people think a little is attention whoring.



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 No.276[Reply]

Posted this on /pol/, first time writing poetry
pls no bully


the chaos of warring tribes
Came one great enemy to unitize
Each tribe held fast each tribe held firm
As great people weathered the storm
Of Roman armies marching forth
To face the might of a united north.
The Goth, German, Gaul, and Celt
Each of their blades the Roman felt
And as Europe's might descended forth
Great Rome fell before the North.

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 No.277

File: 1427418048825.jpg (20.26 KB, 250x300, 5:6, 1426140013936-0.jpg)

>>276
Really good for a first poem. Keep it up.

 No.297

Pretty good.

One critique is that you're inconsistent. You've got the rhyme down, but not the meter. That's okay, not every poem needs to be in meter. I believe it's good to study meter and grammar, and unless you really know what you're doing it's usually better to stick with tradition. Just think: how many postmodern poems were written in meter? Not very many. They reject what has proven itself to work very well.

>Years passed and kingdoms fell

>The years and ages passed away
>Many people still today

This, along with your use of fell, north, etc., is very repetitious. It's a bit of a crutch to start a stanza based in a new time with "years passed" or "days turned to months to years" that sort of thing.

Repetition can be used well but if it isn't it just makes the poem seem, well, not poetic, and can be monotonous. It can be hard to find ways to describe things without naming it directly, but it's important have that ability. Don't be overly vague though, that's probably worse haha.

Overall I agree with the cat above me: breddy gud 5/5. Practice, study meter, read poetry, and you can get better.

 No.298

>>297

Oh and if it wasn't clear you need to write poetry too. That's really the most important part to getting better: developing your technical ability.

That is one thing I believe to be fundamentally wrong with postmodernism: that little value is placed on technical skill, and more on "how it makes you feeeel"; whether it can shock the reader, or make the reader happy. Art is more than a means to pleasure. It isn't just an expression of one man's emotions. I don't know what it is, but I know it's meant to be beautiful.

 No.311

[quietly donates unique IP]



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 No.23[Reply]

(Will bump with pdf)

So I've had a scifi/fantasy conspiracy novel floating around in my head for years. Last January I penned this chapter to use as a prologue. There's not much action but I felt that it was better than the other introductions/chapter one's that I tried.

The scope of the novel ballooned significantly since I started writing it, though progress has been slow since I maybe have 20 mins. a day to work on it. The premise of the entire story is this:

> Journalist unknowingly stumbles upon a massive scandal involving private military corporations and elements of the CIA

> Journalist craves attention and recognition, but gets more than she bargained for when these things do come
> Initially publishes a rather mundane story on her blog which is picked up by other media and later, a photograph she posted (provided by her source) becomes the focus of much scrutiny because it purportedly shows a convicted murderer – who is supposed to be in a military prison – as an employee of the company
> Strange things start happening almost immediately, and the person who broke the story disappears. The journalist herself becomes increasingly paranoid; it becomes more and more obvious that she is being watched and followed (and this is a deliberate strategy from the agencies and corporations harassing her; a tactic called “bumper locking”); trying to cause extreme fear and paranoia, and eventually a mental breakdown
> Blackstarr PMC is gradually implicated in a massive corruption scandal and many of their nefarious activities are revealed. Reporters start disappearing and important bankers/financial industry people start dying mysteriously
> The government and military-industrial complex, along with big pharma, are gradually implicated as well; as it is revealed that Blackstarr's behind-the scenes criminal operations and its practice of securing convicted criminals to work in important positions are merely part of a network of CIA front groups

The twist:
In a "conspiracy within a conspiracy," Blackstarr and its employees are actually (unbeknownst to them) the victims of a much larger secret experimentation program; unwittingly helping to beta-test pharmaceuticals and technology for use in applications relating tPost too long. Click here to view the full text.
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 No.85

this is awesome! keep up the good work man

 No.108

You've certainly got skill, and the premise has potential. I hope you continue to work on this.
I hope to see some subtle parallels in this story that relate to the current state of affairs.
While there is room to refine your writing style, you're of to a good start. Perhaps once you've got the initial draft written you can go over it. It's already showing promise, and I find it compelling.

I enjoy your references to the board culture and general cynical outlook we have on here. It will go over most people's heads if they are not familiar with the references, but it reads well whether or not the references are understood. Readers here will appreciate the references.

>>76
I agree about "showing and not telling."

 No.163

I disagree with previous reviewers. This reads like young adult detective fiction. The narrative scope is extremely limited and linear, being almost completely nothing more than the main character's observations. The fact that there is next to nothing but dialogue and lacking themes, messages, or etc reveals the female sex of the author, and the seeming pro-SJW slant is unfavorable. This is not the kind of inspiring or well-written story that necessary.

 No.307

>>163
I completely agree with this post.

 No.309

>>163
I agree. I think the author should try to make the story a little bit more "big picture", so to speak.



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 No.199[Reply]

Once upon a time there was an ugly duckling. The ugly duckling was very ugly, causing normal people to be grossed out, but they still made friends with the ugly duckling, they just didn't want to fuck it. So the ugly duckling got mad and turned into an SJW who complained about beauty standards and how it was truly the beautiful duckling. This ugly duckling had deluded itself, and in turn deluded many other impressionable ugly ducklings to believe that being an ugly duckling was the thing the be, and that if you didn't like ugly ducklings you were a sexist homophobic patriarchy pig. How dare you not use xers deluded pronouns to address it as the beautiful duckling that it really was, you ducking shitlord. Then one day the normal ducklings got tired of this bitches shit and popped a cap in her ugly duckling ass. And no, this bitch was not a swan, just a fat slob.

The End.

 No.288

>>199
That was amazin m8

 No.291

>>199
ebin cheers



File: 1426737159740.pdf (181.1 KB, Chapter 1.pdf)

 No.256[Reply]

So I'm writing a novel of sorts, trying to shoot for 1500 to 2000 words per chapter. I'm trying to be subtle with the /pol/ themes, so a publisher won't be scared of it. The story is about a disgraced ex-reporter hearing from his friend who was murdered in Mexico, prompting him to go and investigate his murder, as well as the conspiracy he was going after.

The first two chapters are done, I was hoping for constructive crit?

 No.257

File: 1426737196769.pdf (103.03 KB, Chapter 2.pdf)

Also posting second chapter.

 No.269

>>256
Surely, a proper critique would have to occur on the whole. Godspeed anon

 No.274

>>269

Right now I'm kind of at a crossroads- how do I describe Eddie getting to Mexico? I don't know if I want to take him out of New York so quick, since I don't know if I've done enough to explain how miserable and overgrown the city is. That being said, there's not a lot that has to happen, other than him following James's posthumous instructions. Advice?



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 No.34[Reply]

Why hello thar, aspiring writers. I've spent the better part of my adult life writing short stories and such and finally got around to finishing my first novel last year. I'm hear to answer any questions you have on the gory reality of fiction writing.

You can read the beginning of said novel at: 112029.net
Some of my short fiction is available at: astropulp.blogspot.com

Fire away!
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 No.40

>>38

I exist. I'm sorry that upsets you.

No, I'm not.

 No.43

>>38
Projection

 No.60

>>37
Do you have anything to say to a poet or is poetry deader than dead now

 No.63

>>60

Poetry didn't die, but the market for professional poets is miniscule. In the US, you have the national poet laureate, currently Charles Wright, a position so esteemed it pays a measly $35k. Many states have their own poet laureates, but these are often honorary positions that confer little benefit beyond name recognition.

That said, it's stupidly easy to get your poetry published in anthologies. Mind, you won't be paid for your work, but it'll appear in print. Also, participating in poetry readings is a great way to meet people in the literary industry, particularly those who run journals in which you can publish your work.

 No.272

Have you ever had anything published by an actual publisher?

and have you ever considered just writing YA



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