>>130OP here.
I was going for a multi layered approach, keeping the first half strictly descriptive narrative whilst peppering it with NS and German references to add some ironic foreshadowing.
Once the reader has engaged with the compelling first half of the story, naturally they will be curious and interested and want to read more. Then the second half slips into /pol/ mode, it seems ridiculous, 'but the story is good, he must be making some sort of point right?' so the reader reads on.
The story is now in full satire swing, a mixture of genuine redpill and insight, with unadulterated trolling of normal views and normal opinions. Each line gets more and more ridiculous, but the reader has to finish it now, no matter what they think about the subject matter
Once the reader reaches the end, there is no proper conclusion to the narrative, open ended to keep the reader thinking, but the redpill has been imparted. The result will not be instant, but with time the reader will be able to separate the trolling from the redpill insight, and only then will they truly understand the value of this redpill.
I will rewrite some of it and post it here, I agree the batman quote is very cheesy and gay, so I will see what I can do about rewriting it into some sort of dream sequence, just to keep the narrative a bit more grounded and readable for normies.
Will post more later, glad you all enjoy :)