Sometimes we all need a little study to achieve the best we can.
This board has amazing writefags, and OC is the lifeblood of the board, however some people long to see stories about their waifus that writefags don't normally do.
In the same spirit as a Drawthread, this is for Violated Heroes to request stories they'd like to see written, or for new and old writefags to link their work for critique, or for others to enjoy.Shilling is encouraged!
If you have large amounts of text, or are running an update to stories, please consider posting it all to a pastebin and posting here when it is updated or finished.
Please keep things on topic. It's fine to talk about stories, characters, plots, etc, but keep the blog-posting out of here.
Thread 1: https://archive.is/eT2UX
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Thread 3: https://archive.is/yUCIq
Thread 4: https://archive.is/5e1Qr
Thread 5: https://archive.is/vWMc9
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Thread 7: https://archive.is/B7Hfg
Requesting dryad content of any kind.
>Go to forest
>Chopping down tree for firewood
>Hear someone gasp behind me
>It's a woman covered in leafs and flowers
>"DO YOU KNOW WHAT YOUR DOING" she yells at me
>"Uhhhhh cutting down trees for firewood"
>At this point she is foaming at the mouth
>Man comes out of the brush dressed similarly as the green woman
>He explains to me that his wife is a dryad and is extremely passionate about the forest
>All of a sudden cop cars crash through the trees as helicopters hovers over me and drops ropes as cops rappel down
>Dryad looks smugly with a phone in her hand
>Cops yell at me to get on the ground while pointing their guns at me
>Do what they say cause I don't wanna die
>Go to court get call from my attorney that he can't make it due to his pelvis being crushes by an oni but wishes me luck
>Dryad is there talks about how I was destroying the forest for the sole reason of burning the wood for fun
>Look to the jury its filled with alraune, wood elves, and cervitaurs their completely infatuated with the dryad's lies
>You see dryad pass danuki judge a bag of shekels
>Try to call her out on it get told if I have another outburst like that I'll be held in contempt of court "another that was the first"
>Judge orders officer to take me away
>Don't even get to defend myself just get told I was found guilty
>Get to prison put in cell with ushi-oni called Big Bertha
>Starts massaging my back with her claws, hurts immensely, whispers in my ear that I'll be her new bunk
>Uhhhhh don't you mean bunk mate
>Nope bunk, but don't worry we'll be doing a lot of mating
Anyway kids that how I met your mother
im looking for centaur stories please
>chopping down live tree for firewood
You're really not supposed to use live wood, ya dingus. You use dead wood for that. It burns better anyway. The dryad was a dick, but you are guilty of practicing shitty outdoorsmanship.
good greentext though
>What monster girls do you think need more love?
I'd like to see more stories for the less prolific members of the mermaid family. Sea Bishop, Merrow, and especially Selkie.
Thanks for the complement tho
>Go to the north they said, they have monsters that need to be slain and glory to be earned they said
>Last time you listen to a danuki, I should've noticed something was amiss when she offered to sell me a ticket to the northern archipelago for a "reduced price"
>Well it's not like I can do anything to her now
>Looks like I'll have to join the rest of the criminals and fools who came here under guise of adventure freedom and wealth
>As I set up camp for the night on an ice beach, I dig a hole and I take out my fishing rod and place some bait on the hook leaning back near my fire waiting for dinner
>I see movement around my fishing line I reach for my axe as I slowly start reeling back the line to entice the fish as I feel it bite the hook I start leaning back while reeling as fast as possible pretty soon my dinner flies out of the water I grab it and cut its head off with my axe
>But just as the blood seeps back into the hole I hear rumbling, stepping from my fishing hole it gets louder and louder I start to run away from my campsite grabbing everything that's not nailed down and booking it
>I hear the unmistakable sound of ice cracking and then the lake blows open in a glorious shower of snow and ice
>I look what came out of the lake to see a…
>Poking its heads out scanning the area before finding me and crashing down towards me
>I throw my stuff further away besides my axe so it doesn't weigh me down I continue running for the natural beachhead before a one of the serpent's heads pops out in front of me blocking my path and causing me to fall back crashing into the weakened ice causing me go into frozen water
>I grip onto one of the hyrda's heads burying my axe into it and hanging on for dear life when it tires I dig my axe out and jam it into its eye
>It dives into the cold water I try to hold on for dear life but my axe can't grip its eviscerated eye and I fall into the dark waters cold tired and out of breath
>I feel something grab me before I completely black out
>I open my eyes to see a woman giving me cpr and feeling of water in my lungs pushing her off me I turn over onto my hands and knees throwing and coughing up water
>I try to stand up but feel her grab my wrist and bring me into a hug "What are you doing?" I ask her while shivering "You're going to catch your death if you don't warm up" as I feel her pierce the cold and provide a warmth more comforting than any fire
>As I warm up I feel more and more of my feeling come back to especially the feeling of her breasts up against me waking up my member downstairs I turn away from her with my face red as a tomato
>Eventually she takes notice and coos in my ear "I see I'm doing more than warming up, please let me take care of it for you" she reaches her hand towards it gripping it through my pants causing it to become fully erect
>"But first" she says "F-first what" I stammer out "Well I need something from you" she asks me "Anything please don't leave me like this" I beg her "Well I need about tree fiddy "
>It was at this time I realized I was getting hugged by an 8 storie tall crustacean from the Paleozoic era
>That god damned loch ness monster had tricked me again
Pic not related I just like selkies
Nice greentext. Some inexplicably coed prison rape greentext could be interesting.
>Buddy at school says he has something cool to show me
>Go with him to small park that nobody uses except hobos who pass out in it.
>gives me magazine
>pictures of kitsune, kobolds, you name it
>They are holding hands with men
>some of them are even cuddling them
>realize this is very very cozy
>"Oh shit, the fuzz!"
>friend runs off
>Chris Hansen rounds corner
>"Get on the ground, shota!"
>comply, piss self
>dragged to cell
>arm tattooed with number
>given bread and water, guard raps my knuckle with knightstick when I ask for phone call
>taken to court
>parents are in the audience, Mom is weeping,
>Dad is comforting her
>glares at me and calls me a dumbass
>charged with 30 felony counts of lewd handholding trafficking, one for each picture
>Judge calls me despicable pervert
>Sentences me to death by hanging, is angry when bailiff reminds him he can't do that
>sentences me to four years in jail at MG State
>brought to prison
>timidly ask why being brought to mamono prison, get told to shut up
>girls are slavering for me, hooting and grabbing the air as I pass.
>One Jinko actually breaks out of her cell, is brought down by cattle prods inches from me.
>Thrown in cell
>Guard makes some quip about my cock being 'stained green' by morning
>Doesn't take long to unlock his subtle hint
>Orc girl steps out of shadows
>tall, brunette, huge tits, wide hips
>Its Grizelle the Gruesome
>My schoolyard bully who tormented me for years
>Hung me upside-down until I kissed her
>She went away for holding up an armored car
>She didn't rob it, just held it at an angle and gave the driver a concussion
>She smiles wide at me
>"Pockets! Oooh, you don't know how much I missed you!"
>(she used to call me Pockets)
>Gives me big hug that I think snapped something
>lays across my lap, blinks yellow eyes at me
>"So what did you do to wind up here?"
>"I…had pictures of handholding"
>She looks at me with wonder
>"Shit, you're hardcore!"
>She rips my pants off
>Rides me like a jackhammer
>Rapes me for six or seven hours
>Actually engages in handholding
>Have four kids in the clink
>daughters and sons form street gang
>So yeah, that's where the Held Hand Clan came from
Posting the new girl in case any writefags want to take a shot at it
Im not even going to read the profile and wriye a story about her getting high with an Ittan Momen.
You cant stop me
"If all you do is bleed for others, sooner or later, you will run out of blood."
Chapter 10 of A Stranger in Paradise: Malinalli
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/04/25/chapter-10-malinalli/
You got a sensible chuckle. Nice offering.
Looking for a pastebin/story link about a vampire to goes into a boy's room in his village, sleeps with him and takes him to be lord of her castle. It's a few years old by now.
It was on the old monster girl collection website.
>Doing a nickel for selling snow cones
>goddamn yeti swore it was lemon
>Told I am changing cells
>Taken down like six levels of stairs
>In weird subterranean place
>march through maximum security
>bunch of minotaurs, orcs, and oni glare at me
>march through super max
>Hellwan, dragons, centipede girls
>Go into wing marked 'NO PERSONNEL'
>Down at the far end is a steel enclosure in middle of black expanse going downward forever
>bridge comes down, we cross it
>"Um, why am I going in here?"
>"I suspect it was a software glitch, but it's easier to do this than the paperwork."
>Not sure what the hell is in there
>Guard pushes me in
>Door shuts, bridge goes away
>Little Gremlin Girl inside
>wearing black and red costume with cape
>Helmet and goggles
>Sitting on bench with arms folded
>"These FOOLS can't hold me…"
>"I'll get that Wonder Wan! Her and that 'boy' of hers…"
>(Clear my throat)
>Stares at me, face still pouty
>Explain about glitch
>Say I'm new bunkmate
>She just stares at me
>"I am Rachetta, the Gizmo Goddess, the Mayhem Mechanic! You will BOW to me!"
>rub back of neck
>she looks at me with pleading eyes
>think she might cry
>don't want this any more awkward
>get down on one knee
>she puffs out her chest
>"Yes? I mean, Yes! You know who is boss in this cell! You can be my new henchman!"
>Ask what that means
>"You'll do my bidding, take part in my plots, assist in capers."
>Look around cell
>Not much going on
>Might as well play along
>Tells me about last plan to conquer world
>Army of deathbots all set to go
>World Leaders quaking in fear
>Wonder Wan showed up
>deathbots blown up
>Landed in supervillain wing
>she's really sad about deathbots
>lip quivering, eyes brimming with tears
>Ask wat do
>"we're gonna break out of here! We'll build a mecha-suit out materials in the room."
>Take off my pants
>she grabs pants, throws in toilet
>Somehow builds a cold fusion reactor out of my pants, the toilet, and air molecules
>toilet is glowing purple
>"The rest should be easy"
>Uses toilet energy and some device in her gloves to transmute cot into complex polymer and motors
>Shapes polymer around me into suit of ultra hard powered armor
>Left arm is encased by some kind of plasma cannon
>"Crude, but it should get us out of here."
>climbs onto my back.
>"Now, shoot through the ceiling!"
>Aim and Fire at steel ceiling
>Fire foot rockets
>Blast way through floors of prison
>Hit open sky
>"Excellent work, Henchman! Now to find a hollowed out Volcano or abandoned amusement park for our base!"
>mfw I only had two days until I was released
"Humans are sapient. From the least to the greatest, no matter how little power we possess, not one of us is meat."
Chapter 11 of A Stranger in Paradise: Ozohmatli
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/04/29/chapter-10-ozohmatli/#more-691
That's right, it was mostly just me being unable to write anything decent after a while. Even after the first few chapters it kind of got ehh. Sorry for the late reply, I haven't lurked here in a month or two.
And yeah I had a ton of fun with Sledge. Sometimes I re-read parts because it was pretty cool to write. I still wanna write though.
> it was mostly just me being unable to write anything decent after a while
>I haven't lurked here in a month or two
That's how it starts, anon. You're becoming normal. You'll hang out and get drunk with your work friends and meet somebody you think is special. You'll laugh at the idea of waiting for your 2D waifu before going raw into somebody you thought you knew. Next thing you know, you'll settle down with a "nice", human girl and have two kids that you believe to be yours. You'll slave away at a job with two growing and now indifferent kids at home with a wife that isn't as nice as she used to be. You'll try desperately to re-capture the passion and love between all of you, and when that doesn't work, you'll bury yourself in work wondering where things went wrong. You wouldn't even know where "your kids" or once wife are as you slowly drink yourself away. In your darkest of times, just before the moment you commit to the end, you'll think "Why didn't I finish Colder Nights?"
Once you're off the righteous path of waifu, it's a slippery slope. Try not to fall. All joking aside, do you think you'll finish that story or has it just died for you?
>All joking aside, do you think you'll finish that story or has it just died for you?
Sorry, but I'm not really sure. My confidence snaps out really quickly, so even when I think I've got something good going, I just scrap several thousand words worth of writing. I've also considered re-doing stories I've shafted, but never created something readable.
I've been thinking about more Yeti snuggles, but if I decide to finish it, I'm pretty sure I'm going to rewrite the whole thing. Mostly just to cut down on a lot of the stuff that I believe didn't really contribute to the story, and partly to add some more depth where I felt it's needed. Again, that's if I don't scrap it once more.
Also that guy's almost going to have another birthday, holy shit I've put this off for too long.
Now what if -and hear me out.
What if Arturia Pendragon… was summoned as a centaur?
Hey, I'm kinda new and I'm not seeing one so I have to ask, do we have a dedicated site with links to all these stories, or do we just look through the threads?
>I'm kinda new
Joking aside, the idea has been thrown about for a while but nothing's come of it yet
Best to look through the threads and save what you like somewhere.
This block is fucking killing me.
Okay, thanks guys.
Reading through the Tusktaker stuff right now. Is some good stuff right there.
While you're still here, I have a small list for you. I'm not sure if you already read them, but they are things I enjoyed:
Homeless Vamp and sequel:
Another by Penywise called "Oni":
Age Gap(Baph with her brother. Non-lewd):
Semi-Incubized Vet (not lewd):
The above authors also made a decent bit of other stuff that's there to check out. Should give you plenty of content to read.
Awesome. I've already read the Homeless Vamp, and that is what got me looking for more. I haven't read the rest of these though. I'll definitely give them a look.
I wish my folder wasn't a clutter otherwise I'd find you that Swap of Saber and Cerea.
That sounds oddly familiar. Seconding this if only to sate my curiosity.
“Do you want to fight, too?” “No. No, I do not.”
Chapter 13 of A Stranger in Paradise: Cuetzpalin
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/07/chapter-13-cuetzpalin/#more-712
anyone got a link to that monster-girl story involving pizza delivery guy anon falling for an introvert manticore?
Extreme interest in this
It was a story that was from a few months back, around October maybe? Bad news is about a week or so ago he deleted the pbwiki he had his stuff on, and scrubbed the wordpress site he was using before that, and of course I was too fucking dumb to have saved copies of the work before hand. He was the same dude who did the longer story with Max and Marie, with the guy and the wolf girl a post apocalyptic setting, and did the short bit with the sick guy and his Hellhound girlfriend taking care of him.
In review, all of my fucking regrets.
Oh, so that's what happened to that hellhound story, been looking all week.
All of this sounds great and it's a damn shame we might not get to see them again. The hellhound with a sick boyfriend sounds adorable.
Guy does have a twitter aswell if someone wants to reach out to him.
THIS FUCKING NIGGER RIGHT HERE, I'VE BEEN READING HIS SHIT FROM NEWEST TO OLDEST AND I GET TO THE FUCKING GEOMANCER AND ITS GOT FUCKING NETORARE AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
>"Newest" story is from december 2014
>Also among the stories is a huge egostroking rant shitting on other writefags
Now why we should give a shit about this writefag again?
Didn't that story end with the geomancer burning the webbing off himself and then stabbing the spider to death to protect his wolf waifu? This is also really old news.
We shouldn't I was just ass mad and was kinda hoping people would tell me I was wrong the story was good until that
Yes but he also got raped by the spider till he was half insane
Well I don't blame ya for being assmad, it's NTR after all, just saying with its post date it's not the most relevant thing for the thread.
Unrelated, but the recent lull in writefag content has me itching to once again try writing something a bit longer and with more substance than a greentext. I kinda want to resurrect one of my old projects, but I do not know if there is an audience here for that. One's a giallo style thriller, one's got kind of an MiB vibe to it, and another is more of a light-hearted "MG's as hippies" kinda thing, to name a few. Though I still need to finish that damned hellhound greentext first and foremost.
if you happen to find it, let me know.
…Oh yeah, we're all anonymous here. I'll see it eventually.
It's not made by us, as far as I know, but the people over at monstergirl collection have a fairly extensive list of pastebin repositories. they also send a weekly email alert about fics and mg manga updating.
Are you talking about the greentext thread that has a hellhound in it as a group's leader, or the old one about the religious hellhound that you left for it to rot, you piece of shit?
There was also the one about the guy who accidentally summoned a hellhound, that was unfinished.
That one is mine. There's pretty much one smut scene and a morning after end scene that's left. However, I've had yet to write something down that looks and feels right, and I don't want to post a half-assed ending cause that's unfair to the reader.
Hey, sorry I pulled it all down without warning, though suffice to say it was due to unrelated drama (probably not the best idea to write under the same name I use everywhere). I'll reupload everything sometime today, under a different name this time.
That's still going on? Feels like that was made ages ago. The one where he throws the hellhound a beer or two when she's behind a salt barrier that doesn't actually work? I hope you have your greentext saved because I can't remember much and the thread probably doesn't exist.
"Don't give heavy ordinance to cats, Private."
Chapter 14 of A Stranger in Paradise: Nemontemi
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/09/chapter-14-nemontemi/
We should start calling you Jexx.
Okay, so pastebin is a shit and won't let me upload more than 20 pastes per 24 hours, so I was only able to get the first 20 chapters of Monster World Story up. I'll UL the last few chapters and my other stories tomorrow. In the meantime everything will be here:
The hellhound greentext is pretty short so I can just post it here if you guys want it now.
Ouch. Hopefully that shit doesn't cause you too much trouble. Thanks for taking the time to reply though, I appreciate it.
Nice to see you're still around. Don't sweat the wait, I'd rather you take the time to put down something you're happy with.
That being said, do you have a pastebin of the work so far, or could you repost what you've already written in the new hellhound thread? There's no archive for thread one, so the first part of the story is missing to my knowledge :(
I do have it saved on pastebin, it's not publicly listed yet, but here's the link.
And yeah, the screenname I chose was dumb but it was an inside joke at the time.
I was confused as fuck by your name for a moment when I opened the link, until I realized I had your pastebin already bookmarked. So thanks for all the other stuff you've written that I've already read, I guess.
Will start writing more again.
Here is something just for starters.
Alright, everything's up now, Monster World Story, the one I did around the holidays, the hellhound greentext, and the one with the introvert manticore. Again, it's all here:
I've been out of writing for a little bit but I'll try to get something out soon, how does everyone feel about something with a griffon, since it feels like she hasn't gotten enough love since KC revealed her?
Thanks for putting everything back up. I always wanted to see more of griffon or pic related. I feel like both could use a little love.
Griffon would be interesting. Thanks for getting everything back online, by the way. I appreciate it.
So I wrote again after like a three month break. Based off of an ara~ ara~ Lamia from something on /cyoa/. Very first choice in the image.
What do you think of it? Worth finishing or anything?
Here's the thread to view/discuss it so none of us clog this thread with it.
You can link across other boards without pasting the whole URL right? I don't know how because I'm dumb, but I'd like to know if you can.
I'd marry her.
Can I see the cyoa?
Anon, he links to it right in his own post.
Fisher Price is best girl in that CYOA.
Older snek in a sweater is always appreciated and I always like a nice story. Also, never ask if people want you to finish it, because I'll always say I want it done. Let's make it the second story you finished. As for how to link across boards: >>>/cyoa/2809 I think that's how you do it.
It's right there in the second link.
and yeah, looking at it, definitely shark girl. tall, muscular, idgaf attitude? sign me up. But none of them are bad
>Christmas cake rape snake
Hey, that's something alright.
>Let's make it the second story you finished
Ah yes, good idea. I was pretty uncomfortable with how weird things were though. Not sure how apparent this weirdness was.
And thanks, that linking method seems to work.
Hopefully the comfy kind. But yeah, Christmas Cake indeed. Definitely the biggest age gap I've written.
Swain comes off as a bit of a weak willed robot and I just attributed any awkwardness to his nature and the fact he just might suck at anything social. In a way, it feels like "Colder Nights", but with a snake. The situation itself is weird in that, when you come of age, you're forced to marry if you're desirable, so it's somewhat understandable that he'd behave the way he does. You're also just getting your feet wet into the story and its characters and so are we. Don't lose faith this early.
Gonna write more stuff periodically, sorry for break. Anyone got request?
Yeah, this is something I needed to ask about. Not just about stories seeming similar, but I was concerned with protagonists seeming similar. There's a lot of stories I just scrap instead of posting here, but most of them have this character archetype. Even for the one's that don't, they still at least speak pretty similarly. Ehh. It's hard for me to write someone who sticks out without "sticking out", if that makes sense.
But also, at least it seems pastebin supports SSL connections now without paying for their PRO bullshit.
>You can link across other boards without pasting the whole URL right?
you can, simply put 3 ">"s, then a "/", then the board, then another "/", then the thread number
in the case of the thread you linked, it'd be >>>/cyoa/2089
>switched the 0 and 8 around
fucked it up, but you get the idea
something with a mantis or a story about a monster girl thats on the hunt for "prey"
So when are we gonna build a goddamned archive for the stories? If we want longevity, we gotta organize.
Remember that civilizations are built on libraries.
What kind of archive should we have?
>A sticky with a fuckton of pastebin links
>A seperate website
What do we think, writefags?
holy christ i need a continuation of this its fucking hype
adding to that fuck aftyn and his bullshit ntr crap
To start off with, some sort of master pastebin that links to everyone's stories probably wouldn't be a bad idea. but something more organized would probably be preferable. Whatever we use should also have some way to host images since there are a lot of screencapped greentexts around (unless someone feels like transcribing them or knows of some program that can do it).
I'd vote for someone to manage a pastebin where we keep proper pastebin links to stories and art (imgur links or something). It's pretty easy to keep one, as long as people post their new stories' links in the writefag/drawfag threads to be added to the list.
Gotta save the writing history if we want to grow.
Alright. Assuming we go with a pastebin, would pastebin pro be necessary?
Normally pastebin limits you to uploading 20 pastes per 24 hour period (pastebin pro lets you do 250 per 24 hours which should be more than enough) so yeah, probably.
Well, unless I'm misunderstanding how pastebin works, anyone who writefags can stick their story on its own pastebin and set it to never expire - then, all we need is some kind of master document, be that a pastebin, a different webpage or a library thread here.
I don't really think a master pastebin is a good idea, purely because it would make organising and sorting everyone's stories (however that gets done - by writer, by monster, whatever) a bit of a hassle.
As we're probably aware, /tg/ has https://1d4chan.org/wiki//tg/%27s_Smut_Index
Perhaps we should try and model it on that?
Yeah I actually had something like that in mind when I suggested the idea of a master pastebin (minus all the furshit and monsterboy faggotry that's there, obviously).
Degenerates gonna degenerate, I suppose.
If it's a wiki-esque list that gets set up, how do we go about doing it?
Some sort of free wiki hosting like wikia or shoutwiki maybe? That'd be ideal because it'd mean people could add their stuff themselves without having to get someone else to add it for them.
Alright, I knocked this up very quickly. No idea how any of this wikia business works other than people can upload their shit. Might turn out a complete mess and the entire thing needs returning to the drawing board.
(I'm also going to transcribe Running Laps onto there now, just to get us started.)
Never mind, I can just upload the image. Derp.
No thumbnail though.
You should set this as the main image that shows up for people using the monobook layout.
Might wanna figure out how to get authors more control over their stories. Anyone can edit a page without protections, and only admins and mods have control over that anyway. At the very least it's got revision history to correct stuff like that, but it's still a problem that's almost exclusive to collaborative sites like this. Maybe try another host, unless someone here wants to host it themselves.
So what's the procedure for the wiki? Are authors putting their own things up there, or anons are putting up stories they want to store?
Both should be available imo. But I think just making a list of story pastebins with tags would be easier for everyone, kinda like the MGE wiki fiction archive.
You know what, I hadn't considered that. Authors can (and should) put the original pastebin links there, but people who come to the site are probably more likely just to read the contents of the page - which, as you say, may have been defaced.
I still like the idea of a stickied library thread here, although I have no idea how it could be properly organised.
If the guy who was looking for stories is still around, I have another small wave if you finished the first. I blew my load of favorites a little early, but these are nice:
Massage an Ushi-oni:
Static Gazer (Might as well put Weavwine's whole pastebin up):
Echidna fam (by Hellhound guy in this thread):
A smile in the rain(Nureonago):
Death Stalker pt.1 (Girtablilu):
Weresheep greentext CYOA (I don't know how you could not know beard, but just in case):
I tried not to include any writefags from before and I'm not sure how much you've already read.
I forgot to post this one before. I tried finding his pastebin, but couldn't. Found it on TFT. It's a nice, awkward story and probably the longest I posted.
Finish this shit! I want to see christmas cake snake to be happy.
Anyone reading 'The Care and Feeding of Magical Creatures'? It's updating again.
Yeah, I'd go with >>287736 in making a pastebin link dump. Not the best kind of sorting, but perhaps you could try appending the monster girl name in brackets after each story. People could just Ctrl+F through if they're looking for something in particular.
You could just update it every once in a while when we get new shit in. Or if not, someone could always just copy the list and re-paste it somewhere else if one of us just stops lurking.
“I am War. And that is all I will ever be.”
Chapter 15 of A Stranger in Paradise: Mo Hayi Twa
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/13/mo-hayi-twa/
There was a story, set in a pseudo wwi setting. A guy fighting monster girls, centaurs in particular. I remember it was brief and he met a centaur that was impaled on a bayonet. He was helping her, stripped a kit from a fallen comrade, had first aid stuff in it but also a gun.
Anyone know where to find it? Was there any more to it? Can someone run with that and finish the story?
Completed version of A Knightess' Tale, the salamander mercenary story.
Never thought I'd actually get around to finishing this and I have a new respect for the Manticore Purification fellow but here it is. Cheers.
You have no idea how long I've been waiting for this story to get done
“I love you, too.”
Chapter 16 of A Stranger in Paradise: Mo Laimé Twa
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/16/chapter-16-mo-laime-twa/
Ayyyy, it's done. I was wondering when the armor would show back up again. I liked the story, though I wished for more of a romantic payoff and I wanted to see the reaction of Edwina after she was absolutely fucked from that fight.
One can only hope we'll see the end one day.
Could someone discuss or help me out with character motivations in slice of life stuff? When I view other mediums, characters almost always have a concrete objective in mind, moving the story along at a consistent pace. How's that supposed to work with a slice of life? Everybody's got goals and motivations, but these kinds usually take months or years, or are otherwise just about boring shit. In fact, I think this is one of the things that gets me to stop writing altogether. I could use some help.
If anyone's following the Relocation, ara ara snek story I started, I wanna continue it. Might have to redo the first chapter though.
The thing you have to remember is that there's more than just long term goals. there are short term goals too like, wanting to get your head pat or wanting to have that perfect date or wanting to get that project done but your little sister and her wacky monster girl friends keep barging into your room with increasingly weird excuses.
Remember Slice-of-life is just that. a little slice of their life. you don't have to show us them struggling to decide what brand of soap to use, unless it is cute. Then you should.
>Town is besieged.
>Tons of my neighbors killed in a desperate attempt to defend it.
>Women and children dragged out of their homes and slaughtered in the streets.
>Get forced into maintaining an undead soldier, a previous neighbor that had their old life destroyed and is nothing but a husk.
>At least I got laid.
What a happy story that totally didn't convert me into a paladin.Seriously, this has to be covert pro-Order story to make people hate the undead.
>Undead Kingdom has become a near unstoppable force.
>Undead armies are making maneuvers to position themselves to capture very large swathes of land.
>You're a man at arms.
>Your division was ordered to stop the undead spearhead.
>Your division forms rank and faces down the enemy.
>They have a huge undead army of all sorts of monsters.
>Doppelgangers that are already transforming into what looks like your fellow soldiers in an attempt to sew confusion or break morale.
>Dragon zombies that have begun to transform into giant ghastly undead primal dragons: terrifying organic machines of war.
>Ranks of dullahans form up into their own divisions as heavy infantry or acting as sargeants for others.
>Seems like some Jiangshi with their small frames but tough bodies were imported in for a bridge between the heavy and light infantry.
>At the same time an entire unit of elite samurai like Ochimusha were brought in.
>Squads of ghosts can be seen floating in the skies, acting as spotters, scouts, and air support all lead by phantoms.
>Many floating liches glow a variety of bright colors as they prepare their spells for casting.
>Flanking the liches behind the main body of the undead army are vampire lords, similarly they are preparing their great magics.
>And of course, plenty of shambling zombies, spooky skeletons, and blood covered ghouls while wights can be seen within their ranks acting as officers.
>Unfortunately your division is down wind from the undead.
>Smells like rotting fish.
>Some time passes.
>The signal is given to advance.
>The signal is given to charge.
>The signal is given to retreat.
>You lie dead in a field.
>Blood crows feast.
>The undead advance continues.
>Thousands of soldiers will perish to stop the advance.
>Thousands of women will be slaughtered to fuel the advance.
>At least some people are getting laid.
>Be undead army
>Dead and brought back to life
>Tons of health benefits, including improved regeneration and durability, immunity to disease and immortality
>Decide to visit nearby village to spread the good word
>Paladinus rise and say fuck off
>No matter, we'll just show them how awesome being undead is
>To do that, we need to kill their women
>Set up army
>Kill as many women and girls as possible, while avoiding male causalities
>revive all the dead as new undead monstergirls and incubi
>After a few weeks, town goes back to business as usual
>Army gets bigger
>People get new lives
>New demon realm is born
Pretty much another invasion. Seriously, how do you become undead without dying first? Fags
>Tons of pain and suffering
>Lets fix that by causing pain and suffering
Thank you. That story never sat well with me. I ended up making my own take that had an undead invasion cut short of killing a blacksmith's apprentice by a dullahan.
I'm not entirely sure how to solve that, but I guess one thing you could think of is the next key moment that'll happen in their relationship and focus on that. Maybe it doesn't even have to be major, like some awkward and cute things about snek's personality. Flesh characters out a bit as to who they are before they inevitably fug and the right choice is made or just something that could be humorous. You have a countdown as well, which helps you from dicking around too much. You can also use that to gauge how intense their moments will be. First few days can be small things, like snek wagging the tip of her tail like a dog and being unaware of it until it's pointed out for her embarrassment, or her tail knocking things over when she moves while excited. Mid points could be her wrapping herself around him on dates and maybe we can get a glimpse into her flaws, like being over protective/possessive. There should also be things related to her being a snek, like shedding or how cold nights will require a lot of warmth for an easy cuddling scenario. Final days for us seeing her without any facade about her obsession for kids and a loving family the reason for it other than being a monster girl and accepting it. Something of a linear progression can be made with little endearing things mixed in before and after heavy things to keep things feeling natural is all fine.
You can just balance yourself out with the time allotted. It doesn't have to be very important early, but I imagine we'd learn a lot of the not so pretty things later on, which don't have to be too grim or bad, maybe she's an air head or slob as well. Something about her personality that will make her feel more natural, and the same for Swain as well. Maybe things that are even more beautiful about her that may not be apparent on small dates, like how she'll actually act around kids or something. The thing about slice-of-life is that it can be just a bunch of small things, but as long as we can still feel for the characters and enjoy all of the little stuff, it's fine. Don't feel compelled for an adventure. Don't forget that Swain has to develop as well, but as mentioned before, it can be really small glimpses early on and there doesn't need to be some major reveal towards the end. All that matters is that by the end, we know both characters and why they learned to love each other. I hope that helped in some way.
>need to build armies
>by raiding graveyards of the honored dead
>by slaughtering innocents who just want to live out normal lives
>by making those killed pale reflections of who they were, losing any potential they had for greatness
"It's for a good cause, guys!"
>t.Beta who won't even defend his home.
Really, the lesson to be learned is that the undead could so easily get out of control, and for the sake of everyone, it would be fine if the Order killed them when something like an invasion or kingdom building happens.
>all the paladins in this thread
> all the reddit mongrels derailing a writefag thread.
Your simple minds end up turning everything into a conflict. There is conflict beyond the niggerbrain ooga booga stick and rock made scenarios.
WHY ARE THERE NO STORIES ABOUT FEMINIZING FEMALE WARRIORS AND MAKING BRAWNY MONSTER GIRLS GIRLY AND CUTE?
Also reverse corruption.
Bitch, if laying siege to a town, killing men who are just trying to protect their families, and dragging their women and children into the streets for slaughter, ain't a conflict, what is in your eyes?
you just named like every single African raid that has happened in the past 10000 years.
You are turning your setting into Africa, step back and think about it. You have niggers in the brain and gained a mental illness.
I don't see how Africans doing terrible acts of violence and connecting it to the acts of the undead in the story at hand, Undead Invasion, is a bad or invalid thing? Are you just that concerned about Africans?
the story of genocide has been done to death. have more imagination. also comparing monstergirls to niggers is pretty bad on you.
Protecting one's people and waifu is important. Making stories about it or feeling bad when one can't protect them is perfectly fine. Also, don't mistake me as the author of Undead Invasion, I like you, find it distasteful, as the undead in it are, as you would say, acting like niggers.
Because that's heresy, you fucking heretic.
I would say that, that already happens pretty often since human women who get corrupted usually get more lustful and such due to the succubuzation, and Lizardmen and the like are supposed to go from warriors to house wives when they find a husband. There has to be plenty of stories involving this, you just gotta look around.
>calling >>289002 heresy
I want newfags to leave.
Pretty sure he just wants strong monster waifus to stay strong monster waifus, or shy waifus to stay shy waifus. Or just to be joking, and he himself doesn't have a real answer to the question at hand.
It would seem to me that whoever throws out the word, 'newfag' is the newest of them all as they would be able to pick things like this up really easily otherwise. I probably shouldn't be escalating the problem, but oh well.
I'm saying that in a setting where there are tons of monster girls that are grotesque and ripped and raised primarily as combatants either by law or nature, these girls are likely unlucky to find a boyfriend without threats of violence.
They need training, but not the physical kind, the kind that makes a bloodthirsty ghoul into a polite young lady, though it goes against their nature.
A Lizardman doesn't just magically turn into a good housewife over night, there's a process, son. Years and years of practice. And that process is adorable.
What stories scratch that itch?
Reverse corruption is taking a slut and turning them into a homely woman with good moral values and purity.
How that heresy, son? That's purification.
Oh, now I get ya'.
So like wife training?
Yes, this all helps. I guess I could use smaller or less important things to drag the story along. That being said, I still feel a bit uncomfortable about the whole scenario. Feels so empty, how Swain's just dating because he has to, and nearly has to play around with the feelings of two girls who are emotionally invested in him (not that he really has a choice). That kinda irks me, makes it hard to write. Thanks though.
Dude yes, monster girl wife training. Girls who have no earthly idea how to act like a civilized girlfriend getting trained on how to rape their boyfriend less and do sweeter things like baking their boyfriend a cake or knitting them a sweater.
I wanna say that there has to be something like that with a Ushi, somewhere.
I remember having a thread about this where it got shitposted to the point of no return by saying that used goods weren't monstergirls and the idea of taking a whore into a good woman was "/r9k/ tier posting." Though I think it was less about sluts and more about skank-dressed bitches or amazons that wanted the man in the kitchen and not the other way around. The OP not being smart ruined it, if I'm remembering right.
I have to agree that setting him up with having to pick between two women and having him date both at the same time was probably not the best move as that will get really awkward. The focus is more on snek, but now you have to bring in the other bitch because you introduced it. You could treat it like an after thought or retcon it if you really hate it; It's not like we're paying for each installment here. Unless you're feeling a twist and go for her instead, you've already stated that it's mostly a snek story. I would have just focused on snek and made it a choice that he was already forced to make and this would have just been him trying to live with it or some kind of 2 week period to see if the marriage is agreeable. Have it be something like a trial period where you can keep such lines as "I'll fined a way to keep you." As for starting with small stuff, think of it as a build up for a payoff. Just keep enough stuff going on while hinting more about the characters for the eventual payoff. Or if you've got the stomach for it, go crazy. Either's fine.
Sorry I read that as "feminizing male warriors' and that implies crossdressing.
Dyslexia fucking sucks man.
Well yeah, I already want to rewrite it to remove that weird shit. Honestly the hardest part of writing that story. I was thinking along the lines of just going with the original CYOA idea of, he picked milfsnake and was stuck with her, no warning or anything. Alternatively, he may not have even been able to choose, though that's even harder to justify in the story than the original "month-long grace period" thing. Still not the best, but it gets rid of that thing.
>Driving through the black forest
>Swerve to avoid animal running across road
>Car is totally demolished against tree
>Am okay and crawl free
>Hear shrieks and wailing over the sound of the burning wreckage
>Reminded that MG that couldn't integrate into society live here
Another chapter of The Care and Feeding of Magical Creatures is up.
It's not mine, I just think it's a good read.
Hey guys It's me again. Made a story about Wonderland this time and a Cheshire that isn't a meme spouting faggotcat!
Nice introduction, but when will they hug?
>The trees on the other side of the road practically explode
>A tall woman with long monstrous horns rushes towards
> holding a bundle of ropes
> Oh fug time to go
> Run into the trees behind me
> Glance back to see she is looking into the car
> Get a good distance and climb a tree to hide
> Wait a minute she wasn't holding rope
> Were those… bandages?
"Randall saved everyone. So why the fuck did you murder him?"
Chapter 17 of A Stranger in Paradise: Vwyaje
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/20/vwyaje/#more-740
Good stuff, anon. It's always great to get more Salamander stories. Also it's neat to see a living armor girl in it, I don't see too many stories with them (or about them in general).
I'm working on a larger story and I figured I'd post what I got so far here
That one seems way too Tumblr to get into. I can deal with a bit of self righteous politics - insertion, but the minute it starts becoming entire paragraphs of non sequitur rather than just aside sentences is the point where I give up on attempting to force immersion.
At least the guy behind it didn't flip his shit at Lovecraft over that cat named after the 44th U.S. president.
I'm basing this over that Jabberwocky Dio thread story.
“Fights are when people die. Before and after you gotta celebrate. Gotta remember what’s good in life, so you can hold onto it.”
Chapter 18 of A Stranger in Paradise: Manjé
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/23/manje/
I wanted to create a sci-fi story and I'm wondering what use would a interstellar empire would have use for Mamono mana? I want to do it makes FTL travel possible in the first place, but it feels to close to dune.
FTL communication perhaps? If FTL engines are required to be huge enough that you can't just send probes around for example.
Or just monsterization for easy habitation of planets with fauna.
That sounds good, I was also thinking it'd be used for genetic engineering considering the sheer amount of monster girls that's available as well has terraforming.
Yo deadass what would happen to a normal person with non-insane libido in this world of mongirls?
Go back to cuckchan
Now I want a story about Tyrone and his MG wife
"-and the quim-guzzling aristocratic horse you rode in on!"
Chapter 19 of A Stranger in Paradise: Danse
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/28/danse/
You could have it be like ADAM in Bioshock, I think that was pretty flexible as far as that went.
Come to think of it, that would be a fun setting. Bioshock but instead of making you crazy ADAM monsterizes you if you're a grill and makes you horny if you're a boy.
>and makes you horny if you're a boy.
So you just relive puberty? Doesn't sound that great tbh
So basically this?
I'm working on a story that's like 'The Purge' except instead of retarded stories about how people are inherently evil, it's going to be about 'The Snuggle' which is the one time of year in which monster girls in society are allowed to let go and monster out.
Would this interest anyone, or should I work on a different concept?
Seems like a interesting twist on the usual full moon situation, I'd say go for it.
That would be a fun read. A typical hoodrat being slowly civilized by a monster wife. He wants to fuck around and smoke weed all day but his wife says she's hungry so he gets a job to pay for food. He wants to live in his mom's house but his mom won't accept him fucking a monster and he finds himself leaving home to keep his wife instead of dumping her for the free room and board. He plans to leave her the moment she mentions pregnancy but she looks so happy when she tells him and when she rubs her full belly and when she finally holds their daughter in her arms that he realizes, he doesn't want to skip town the way his dad did, and his father before him, he wants to stay and raise the child, see her grow into a healthy, happy hellhound
I think I'd enjoy that. You could also have some "angry" type monster girls who secretly want to snuggle as well, or maybe shy ones who are still hesitant to initiate snuggles. That'd be cool.
“I’m always open to the possibility that I’m making a terrible mistake. I find it cuts down on making terrible mistakes.”
Chapter 20 of A Stranger in Paradise: Kombaté
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/30/chapter-19-kombate/
Made my first attempt at writefaggotry, I would appreciate some criticism/feedback if you guys would be so kind.
polite sage because I really don't know if I should be posting this in more than one thread, but Im going to keep it to this and the Wan thread for now.
Going through the old archives is like walking into the past. There was a lot that's pretty close to unchanged but also quite a bit different it seems.that alp story though… not sure how I feel about that
For those that were waiting, here's The Pushy Orc part 4. I typed it out months ago, but never made any progress on it since I lost the motivation to continue it since it's been so long. I have something else I'm working on though, so be prepared for that I guess.
I'm working on it. The day will come, I promise.
A story that isn't all hugs kisses and niceness. Keep going anon, I like this.
“That is the nature of men. Plenty destroys them. They grow, and grow, until they cannot be sustained, and then, they cannot stand to cull one another to fit the resources. It is why they collapse so violently.”
Chapter 22 of A Stranger in Paradise
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/06/06/chapter-22-for-the-straightforward-pathway-had-been-lost/
That's some good shit anon. Don't have much experience criticising literature but even I know that's good for a first attempt. Really like the setting and protag. Hopefully waiting for more.
Alright, consider me intrigued.
r/ing a story based off this picture.
Throwing this out for someone to take a look at. If it's worth continuing I will.
This is good shit dude. Please continue
Guys, so I have an idea for a CYOA ive been wanting to do. You're a slave to a king or queen and you can either do your best to work your way up into the ranks of royalty, or try to escape and bring down the king Or queen you would have use the help of either the fellow slaves to help you, or try to brown nose your way up the royal ladder. Sound good?
You're going to have to be more specific than that.
Didn't see this one earlier. It's started out pretty good. I'd like to see you continue it
"Choosing is for lesser beings. I will take everything that I want. I will help Nash, and I will save Horace, and there is not a thing you can do to stop me."
Chapter 23 of A Stranger in Paradise: Ye Who Enter Here
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/06/10/chapter-23-ye-who-enter-here
There is now a Monster Girl Encyclopedia section on Fanfiction.net.
Its under anime.
Oh great, Normalfags ahoy. Whose bright idea was this?
It looks good so far.
In absolute honesty though, "monstergirls" with used goods can't even really be called monstergirls and should be fucking hanged because that would make them 3dpd tier
“A good attitude. Never let the gods tell you you’re any less than they. And if they do, give them Hell.”
Chapter 24 of A Stranger in Paradise: This Miserable Measure the Wretched Souls Maintain
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/06/13/chapter-24-this-miserable-measure-the-wretched-souls-maintain/
keep going, it looks good though I cannot say I like the "/" to indicate the phone calls.
I am fond your writings and all but I feel that you use "rolling of the eyes" and "raised eyebrow" expressions way too often. I would say that either one of theses expression appears once per chapter in nearly all of the books you have written. Also that the eye roll gesture seems unfitting in chapter 24 just before Nash fights Mammon; I could understand if this gesture was used in non-fighting or low stakes situation that is not the case in here. Maybe you should lower body languages to convey Nash's exasperation like a slouching of his shoulders. And maybe for Betty you can used her ears twitching or other cat like gestures to replace the raising of the eyebrows expression. To be honest I am not sure if this is valid criticism or not,
yeah, the "/" sucks bad. It's my first time playing with pastebin, so the formatting leaves something to be desired. My personal copy looks great. I'll post more soon.
I'll ask, are there any monstergirl stories about human villains? Hell, it could well include the villain deciding on stopping being a villain for his new waifu and settling down/making a family together, but that's another story for another day.
I'm asking this question since I have vague ideas bouncing around in my head and I'm unsure on how to make that scenario work.
Damn, does anyone has the story with southern doctor? Or the chess kid and the oni, readable please?
Yeah that the one, thanks lad, you're a proper lad.
Well I'm working on it. Originally i was going super villainy, then i decided I might, just try to make it comfy.
I'm with this anon, that sounds like double-heresy. Innocents are to be protected. The dead are to be left in peace.
Never did any writefagging before. Let's see if i'm trash.
>Waste of life ticket collector.
>My life is going nowhere after failing college.
>Parents still claim they love me, but I wasn't about to be a drain on them.
>Still have some principles.
>Moved out, got a shitty apartment, make money checking train tickets.
>It's hell, but at least I’m not a drain
>Every time the mamono are there, I already know they didn't get a god-damn ticket.
> "Oh, but mister, I thought we didn't need any! We own the trains, don't we?"
>One day i get the jackpot of annoying bitches. It's a school trip filled with mamono and the occasional male kid.
>They're just entering puberty, and entering their cart is enough to unleash…
>It's like a rancid combination of wet dog and sweat.
>The attitude that follows makes it worse.
>I'm not the fittest guy around, and I'm too old to be a target, so the bullying is fucking endless.
>First four is a group of hellhounds. The wet dog smell is mostly from here. One of them is even turning the seating black. I'm staring at the smoldering spot while the four hellhounds smirk at me.
>"Nah, you can't afford 'em, fatty!"
>Of course they think they're pretty clever with that crack.
>I know these idiots have tickets. They're expected to hand them off themselves.
>They giggle to eachother, keeping that goddamn smirk.
>They're boiling in their seat with hormones, and they have the audacity to be smug with me.
>I need to repress my reaction, though I can't help but feel my eye twitch.
>After they talk to eachother a little more, mostly along the lines of "will we give it to him?" in all sorts of innuendos.
>I'm far beyond caring about young, lewd mamonos.
>They give their tickets.
>Seven more tables to go.
>They’re ALL like that.
>All a group, none of them handing over their god-damned tickets.
>As always, the only ones that comply are the boys, and they’re gonna get assaulted under a rain of bakas.
>I hate these mamono so much.
>After a whole cart of these cunts, I reach the next one.
>First thing I see is this mantis-girl reading a newspaper. She has to wear plastic guards over her scythe-arms to stop herself from cutting the paper.
>Pretending not to see me.
>After a whole cart of annoying mongrels, I’m really at the end of my patience.
>I’m not going to deal with this
>”TICKET, PLEASE” I say through gritted teeth.
>Still no response.
>I grab her shoulder and shake her telling her to show her fucking ticket!
>After the first shake, she steels up and I can’t even budge her. I didn’t even see her turn her head, but now she’s looking right at me.
>Yellow eyes, almost glowing. I see the pupils growing a little smaller as she registers me.
>Under that intense stare, I come to the realisation that I have made a mistake.
>Next thing I know, I’m kissing the window she sat by, my vision is filled with black splotches as I feel the glass shuddering from the force
>I fucked up.
>Pressure against my cheek
>I’m about to get fucking filéd.
>I wait for the end for just a bit…
>I open my eyes and see the mantis went back to reading.
>See ticket next to my face.
>Move on with my day, don’t even check the rest of her wagon.
>fucking shit-biscuits that was scary.
> Don’t know when she got off.
>Finish my shift and go home. It’s a long walk, but it’s not like it hurts.
>I like walking alone, anyhow.
>Station is a bit out in the middle of nowhere, need to go through a forest to get there.
>I figure I’m not appealing enough to get grabbed, anyway.
>Feel like I’m being watched on the way home.
>Probably just paranoid, but I swear I see yellow eyes in the distance, and the rustling of leaves. The wind blowing a little too hard…
>Feeling pretty nervous.
>Still got fifteen more minutes until I’m home. Five minutes of forest.
>Been panicking for the last ten minutes.
>Still not running, though, that’ll egg it on.
>Suddenly, she lands before me.
>I don’t even know from where, the nearest tree is like seven meters away.
>The mantis-girl, wearing a sweater and biker shorts. It shows her figure off quite well, though I was too busy screaming like a little girl to pay that much attention to it.
>Amazing thighs, though.
>”Thirty seconds head start.” She says. Her voice completely flat, nothing in the way of emotion.
>I barely register properly. I prattle out: “W-what?”
>I never ran so fast in my whole life, adrenaline pumping through me.
>Of course, my fastest doesn’t mean much, considering I’m an overweight retard who just plays vidya and shitposts
>Before I know it, I hear footsteps.
>More like stomps.
>*Tump* *Tump* *Tump*
>I’m crying as I force my hurting knees to run harder
>I know I’m fucking doomed. Those arms can cut me in half and she can outrun a fucking bullettrain
>I managed to piss off the assassin of the forest over a fucking speeding ticket.
>My legs hurt, my lungs burn, my head is pounding, but I’m still running. I can see the end of the forest!
>If I can just make it there, I’ll be safe. Civilisation! She won’t kill me there!
>Push out whatever I have left in me, as the tumps behind are still getting louder
>I’m not dying today, god-damn it!
>Then, I trip. I fly, facefirst into a pile of leaves.
>I look back, and see that the mantis is already there, her eyes glowing brightly and her blades above me.
>As I look back, I see that the clearing wasn’t nearly as close.
>I never stood a chance
>The blades slice down, I hear it cut through the air as I flinch away.
>I feel my shirt and pants tear, but I don’t feel pain.
>As I feel the cold air over my body, I realize she didn’t cut me.
>She bumps the clothing away using the blunt part of her arms, and then she says one word.
>It’s still monotone and cold. She removes her sweater and shorts, leaving her completely nude. She’s small in every respect, thin waist, small breasts, narrow hips. But it’s a gymnasts body, with musculature everywhere and amazing thighs.
>With the adrenaline in me, I can’t help it. I pop a stiffy faster than I ever did in my life
>My little boy has the same survival instinct as me, I suppose.
>She looks down, seemingly not even registering it.
>Drops to her knees, just above my dick. She looks at me like I’m garbage.
>At least she has a good feel for people
>She slams down. I groan in pain as the weight impacts my pelvis. I hold my breath and squeeze my eyes shut for the sequels…
>Confused, I open my eyes and look at the mantis girl.
>She’s twitching and shaking, her mouth hanging open. There’s a bit of drool on her chin as she just sits there, paralysed.
>I blink twice, just before she leans forward at a breakneck pace. Her head stops just before mine as she shudders again. She stifles a moan through clenched teeth, just before kissing me.
>It’s rough and inexperienced. She’s just forcing her tongue into my mouth, thrusting indiscriminately as her hips get moving again.
>It’s like a damned jackhammer, going so fast and so clumsy it almost hurts
>I cum after a minute, her mouth not leaving mine the whole time as her upper body continues to twitch and shake.
>She finally removes herself from my mouth, her tongue still lolling out as she removes herself from my cock. She’s panting from the exertion and pleasure, and then cradles me in her arms.
>She actually falls asleep on me, with her scythes just below my shoulders.
>Can’t move, or I’ll cut myself.
Should have called it 'the urge'. But yea, go for it we can always use more content on this board.
I liked it. Mantis (Manti?) are cute! Cute!
https://pastebin.com/L3TnQBkS So I wrote a thing. I hope you guys enjoy.
Good. Fucking. Shit.
“THIS IS FURY, NASH! THIS IS THE FORCE THAT DRIVES MEN TO BREAK PROPHECIES! THIS IS WHAT THE HUMAN SPIRIT IS ALL ABOUT!”
Chapter 25 of A Stranger in Paradise: Papé Satan Aleppe
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/06/18/chapter-25-pape-satan-aleppe/
“That is why we enslave gods! Because they would enslave you! Spend the rest of eternity keeping you under their heel! You, of all people, should realize how desperately important this is!”
Chapter 26 of A Stranger in Paradise: The Vice and Virtue of Mankind
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/06/20/chapter-26-the-vice-and-virtue-of-mankind/
Tired. Will write more. Kept it short and sweet.
I just want more Pushy Orc!
Damn that's good.
The fact that you leave it open is frustrating as fuck. But it wouldn't be the same otherwise.
Incubi don't grow horns or tails. That and the MC seems kinda like an arrogant dumb asshole. But good read nonetheless, better than most.
Writefag idea, please analyze. I want to fine-tune it before pressing onward.
In my headcanon, the order represents well, order, civility, restraint, some degree of abstinence and ethics, amongst other religious values. They also advocate 'the needs of the many' philosophy. Due to their faith, they are immune to monsterization (atleast to some degree), so they cannot fall and convert that easily. The religious body(aka church) holds authority and the head priest is the de facto commander and ruler of this faction. The order hates the extremists for their abilities to corrupt and forcibly convert others, which they see as a form of mindrape/brainwashing and the equalists for being 'spineless losers who don't understand the true powers of humans and gods'.
Then there are the equalists. These people live with monsters freely, but have nothing against humans either. They understand that monsters should integrate with humans to form a single unified race that can prosper. They take some values of the order such as abstinence and civility, but not to the order faction's degree and also, don't pledge faith to any god. They trade and interact freely with monsters as well as humans. They believe in their work and are governed by a democracy. However, they oppose the extremists faction for forced conversion and the Order for being 'an obstacle to a path of unified peace'.
The extremists are the dark demon realms. They believe that monsters are the next step in human evolution and that the monster should be the female counterpart to the human male. They are sexual, cunning, fierce and encompass the more 'rapey' monsters. They also make liberal use of DE, which brings them to odds with the Order, who advocate DE as a form of mind control. Their beliefs in their superiority and the forced conversions put them at odds with the equalists, who believe that humans should choose to become monsters on their own accord and regularly fight and thwart their raids.
Maybe I shouldn't be putting this up here, but I want some honest criticism on the setting, which is very vital for a story. And I'm not as talented as Ace and some other writefags on this board so pls no bully.
So equalists are fedoras who can see people calling down the wrath of god and still go, "Heh, mere superstition. I am enlightened by my OWN intelligence!"? If one sides with the equalists, are they forced to swear off faith if they had one already?
Not quite. The equalists acknowledge gods, but don't worship them. Understandable, as they do support monsters that the chief god detests. They do pray to eros though.
I should mention this in case it isn't clear-monsters are a part of the latter two factions. The calm, submissive,equal domain monsters such as holstaurs, kikis, lizardmen, inari,etc are a part of the equalists, and the highly rapey and aggressive ones such as hellhounds, manticores, demons, devils, the sabbath, etc are a part of the exrtemists. Exceptions exist, of course.
Are you going to continue to write it or not? Been waiting 3 weeks with no update…
This, would love to see it continued.
"I may not be greater than God, but I am certainly Heaven's equal."
Chapter 27 of A Stranger in Paradise: Abandon All
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/06/25/chapter-27-abandon-all/
https://pastebin.com/YNZbeTui I finished the 2nd part of >>295751. I hope you guys enjoy it.
Not able to go to concert tomorrow. Will write something. Any suggestions?
Would be nice to see something cute/lewd with a Kunoichi.
I am sorry. I dont know if this is cute or feels
I just love seeing Melissa get so close to fucking him, but missing every time. Pls bully more, it's just adorable with how she reacts.
<nut it was wooth the wait
shit nigga poetry at its finest
Yeah writefagging from a cell phone is very fun.
There were four people on the island who could change that dark fate. One was a man, one was a cat, one was War, and one was death.
Chapter 28 of A Stranger in Paradise: Hope
now since you have linked Anxiety_Incarnate's semi-incubized Vet story ,do you or anyone else for that matter know any similar stories that are just as tragic/feels perhaps even "edgy" as his work?
Running Laps is /monster/core greentext about an oni, even though it's not nearly as well-written as the incubus story.
<Semi-Incubized Vet (not lewd)
If I remember right, didn't the anon who had been writing that browse /monster/ and say that maybe he should get around to actually completing the story?
"Those who fight to save the world know they have no choice but to be invincible. They have to win every time. Anything else would be unacceptable."
Chapter 29 of A Stranger in Paradise: And I Saw An Angel Coming Down Out Of Heaven
Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/07/01/chapter-29-and-i-saw-an-angel-coming-down-out-of-heaven/
"There's still room in this world for gods and monsters. Humans still want us. They still love and care for us. They may not need us, but they still want us to be a part of their lives. This despair's going to pass, Huitzilopochtli. I believe in them."
Chapter 30 of A Stranger in Paradise, The Seventh Angel, available here:https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/07/04/chapter-30-the-seventh-angel/#more-811
Okay, so I'm disappointed by the current drought of apsara-related material, but I don't have any ideas for new stories. So I figured, what the hell, might as well do a quick-n-sloppy translation of an already existing apsara-partly-in-disguise story from another language…
Had some trouble with this, though, and not just because I haven't had a decent night's sleep in a week. If you notice me jumping back and forth between present and past tense, that's because the original JPN writefag was being kind of weird about it and confused the shit out of me reading it. Also, he front-loaded all the lewds in the first half of the story; the back half is part mushy stuff, part worldbuilding.
Well, for better or worse, here it is. The file contains a link to the original story, in case anybody thinks they can do a neater job than I managed.
Honestly a promising start to a new writefag. love the story, if that is it, then it is a nice open ending. If there is more I can't wait for the next part.
Keep up the good work m8.
Alright, here's some Loli Succubi action. I've worked on this for a few months now, and i'm still not entirely happy with is, but I can't do anymore to it.
“Your whole fucking faux-pacifist philosophy is horse-shit. Because when it really counts, you can’t save the people you love.”
Chapter 32 of A Stranger in Paradise: He Was Hurled To Earth
Not the best choice of honorifics, I'll admit, I didnt even think about it
Thanks. Any criticisms/thoughts?
It was pretty solid overall, I liked the description of Alice's magic and the way that the MC's narration seemed to get more extreme after she used it. Jane was a fun character as well, although I found it a little odd that she took the time to write out 'Johnny-boy' within a text message - really minor, but it just seemed slightly strange. The fact that he started calling her 'Princess' without knowing why, and the later explanation was a nice touch.
I do think that the MC went from 'why did you dump this girl on me' to 'alright she's not so bad' to 'I love her forever' too fast. I know that would have been Alice's magic, but imho you could have done more to flesh out why he made that emotional jump so quickly. Also what >>301459 said, I'm no expert on honorifics but I think Julia-chan would be more appropriate than Julia-kun.
Overall, not bad, I'd give it a 7/10. Keep at it, man.
Thanks man, I will. Now I just have to pick the subject of my next attempt
“Maybe,” said Nash. “It’s amazing what people are capable of. It can surprise the hell out of you.”
Chapter 33 of A Stranger in Paradise, available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/07/15/chapter-33-the-second-death/
I'd like some opinions on files related. Already posted it in other threads, but to no avail (probably because of TL/DR given that it's some nine pages).
Seriously - if it's shit, tell me. One can't improve without criticism.
https://pastebin.com/M3bZA6xZ another part to the adventures of the Crab. Hope you boys enjoy it.
A ton of monstergirls are based on mythological creatures. Are there any decent stories out there that take those mythological origin stories and make them /monster/?
For example the 12 labours of Hercules but instead of killing the hydra he bullies or wrestles her into submission and instead of capturing Cerberus he kidnaps a tsun hellhound or something.
Does something like that exist already? Maybe it's a dumb idea but I think it could be fun.
Not to my knowledge but that does sound like an interesting project, I'd read it.
I've been enjoying the adventures of Lovejoy. Thanks for continuing
I did a writefag a long time ago in the sons thread about a bro with two sisters-one vampire and one dhampir and a dumbass succubutt who has a crush on him. I kinda left it hanging. Should I pick up on it? not against just leaving it, if you think that the story is just fine that way…
/tg/ awhile back asked me to make actual villains for the setting since both factions are portrayed in such a banal manner.
I qoute,"Create a world of unconditional love and sex. Rustle the jimmies of sexless edgelords."
So we decided on "the Lords Who Stand on the Edge of Eternity"
Gaius the Fallen One: basically pissed off Archaon
The Child Swordsman: the remnant of the god of murder, petty cruelty revenge, and partical jokes. A weeaboo looking tryhard who was killed by the other gods for being a shithead. Basically a deranged Peter Pan.
Sarkoth Athmon: lich who works for Nyarlathotep, Conan references
Osten Vampire King: oldschool vamp
Selena Marcario the Whistler to the Stars: raped forever-loli who is definitely anti-lewding and has a shitton of Shantak pokemans
The Crawling Dragon: draconic cthulhu
You ready for some intentionally grimdark tryhard bullshit?
I find the vampire lord most sympathetic. More pls.
Go for it, I was curious which way that story was headed anyway
>He ran from his own women, his former son, and two former men whom he had considered as close to something like friends as a vampire could have. He was a victim of his own prosperity
sounds like a /pol/lack realizing there's no more white people on earth.
im glad you built upon this
>The Child Swordsman
Think this one needs to be fleshed out more – he got like three sentences and that's all so far. I don't know why, but I'm imagining him as a younger, more psychotic-looking version of Donatello's bronze David.
>unconditional love and sex
whoever said that didn't think of the full ramifications.
Hey, I'm a new writefag. Well, I've been writing for a few years now, but I'm new to writing these kinds of story.
Can any veterans out there give me some tips before I get to work? Give me literally anything and everything that a new smut writer might need to know.
NTR and Futa is verboten
Other than that have fun, post some shit and we'll pull it to bits.
/monster/ thrives on comfy. if you can't write smut, then don't. Write heartwarming stories and everyone here will love you
>Busy playing vidya
>elven archer shows up
>I know he's elven for two reasons
>Only elves are retarded enough to use archers in a game where rocket launchers, bombs, chainguns sniper rifles and laser pistols are the norm
>The other reason is his ear-gratingly high nasally voice
>Junior is playing a 'M' rated game before his voice even cracked
>Let's have some fun with him
>Text him over voice chat for a little one-on-one
>Winner gets the loser's custom-crafted weapon
>These things are worth their weight in gold in the game
>We pledge our weapon of choice
>Oh, wow, a Dragonbone hand-crafted yew longbow
>That'll be a good addition to my 'trash weapons to scrap' collection
>Doesn't matter how rare it is, junk is junk
>Put forth my gold-scope rifle
>My favorite rifle, perfect for blowing opponent heads into pink dust
>CONFLICT CHALLENGE BEGIN
>Hmm, junior is quite skilled
>he's aware of common sniping spots and is pretty accurate with his money-bought bow
>not good enough though
>6 more kills before I win
>"You got the first kill, but I'll win!!!'
>lol kid, dare to dream
>5 more kills before I win
>Get my crosshairs on him as he squeals in his mic about how my loadlout is garb-
>Junior's head disintegrates
>Immediately nearly rendered deaf by his squeaky voice claiming I'm cheating
>Tries bot-scan, I pass the test
>More screaming about how the whole system is rigged
>kek, no dice, kiddy
>4 more kills before I win
>Not now, gotta concetrate
>"You are cheating, but I'll still beat you and show the world that cheaters never pr-"
>3 more kills before I win
>"What the hell!? My teacher said that cheaters never win!"
>I'm not cheating, baby-boy. You just suck
>"N-nnoo, you're cheating! I'm the best player in this game!"
>"This isn't gonna work…"
>Hell if I care
>2 more kills before I win
>Junior is getting actively scared now, begins begging for mercy
>more raging, tries the bot-scan again, I pass it again
>He totally flips his shit
>1 more kill before I win
>Now he's actually crying, saying how he spent 40$ on that bow and how much he loved it
>Shouldn't have come here then
>No mercy, whoever you are
>Starts offering money, codes, his elder sister, basically whatever I could ever want
>I. WANT. TO. DESTROY. YOUR. BOW.
>"Bu-but why? It is a good expensive weapon! Please, you can't even use it!"
>Don't care bitch, it's mine now
>Line up the crosshairs on his head and-
>SYSTEM DISCONNECTED CONFLICT FORFEITED
>Wifi is off
>"Guys, he's back in the real world!"
>Someone's gonna die
>Alright, who turned off the modem?
>"Because you've played long enough"
>Yeah, fuck you too. What do you want?
>Apparently, lil Sis wants to go to a book expo
>Big Sis has got a date with Faggot
>So guess who has to accompany her through that nightmare
>Oh well, a book doesn't sound all bad
>I haven't read one in seven months
>And I may find something relevant to my study…
>Fine what the hell. I don't get a choice here, but that doesn't mean I can't make the best out of it
>Let's go. GET IN THE CAR NOW!
Before you sperg out, KC says elves are a kind of humans, like dwarves, so I don't think elven males are /chaos/-tier. Then again, KC was the one who made the siths…. If it seems weaker compared to the previous, it's because I've been out of touch for a while. I'll continue this tomorrow.
Okay, so I have a sort of WIP/intro thing for a short story finished right now, and I'm going to put it into pastebin.
Even though I use pastebin a lot, I've never posted anything. Do I just set it to public and then put the link in this thread?
Here it is, any criticism or thoughts are greatly appreciated! I intend on making two more parts for this little story at some point in the future.
(Also if I fucked up this link or pastebin I'll try to not make the same mistake in the future)
I like it, I originally thought this was going to be about a stoic old war hound and the squire. You got my attention.
My first piece of writefaggotry, I'd appreciate any criticism and hope you enjoy reading it. Content warning, there's /ss/.
Forgot the image to go with it.
Certainly seems to be off to an interesting start. Keep it up!
Hey, I've finished the first (real) part of my first story. I have a definite idea of where the story is going and what's going to happen. I'm just dividing it up into three parts for my own sanity.
It's called The Great Spider, and it is a continuation of >>304791 , which was the intro
Here's the new part: https://pastebin.com/kQX4NiNA
Let me know what you think! Comments mean a lot to me, and help me get better at writing.
Also, pic is (mostly) unrelated
How would you guys like a story about a highscool aged Anon that poses as a douchebag manwhore, but is a matchmaker in the shadows?
/monster/ has a kneejerk reaction when harem and NTR are involved, but would a dude that gets a lot of girlfriends, then dumps them and finds them a new boyfriend be okay?
Been toying with a Cupid Anon thing for a while, but I don't know where you guys draw the line.
Monster girls get pretty attached, anon. Wouldn't that involve a lot of heartbreak and fighting off rape?
Plus, why does he have to date them first in order to find them a boyfriend?
Yeah, It's pretty retarded but equally as fun to write.
>Monster girls get pretty attached, anon. Wouldn't that involve a lot of heartbreak and fighting off rape?
Yes to the first one, mostly no to the second one.
He acts like big enough of a turd that the Mongirls decide he's not worth the time.
>Plus, why does he have to date them first in order to find them a boyfriend?
I thought of the premise a long time ago, not sure how to answer that.
I think it was something of him being an underground man combined with using the dating time to get to know them better and find the best match for them.
He was a beta that got cheated on by a human, so he got /fit/, became a Normalfag and the mongirls started coming onto him.
Not fully recovered from his break up, and not wanting to be proactively dated he said yes to the first one that asked him out, avoided what normal coples do (smooching, fugging) and when she started getting desperate he found another girl and fucked off.
Since I'm not writing him to be a rotten human, but a damaged one, he doesn't leave it at that.
So he finds her an actual loving boyfriend.
After that, he rolls with it, and keeps doing it, satisfied with making others happy, too scared to get in a relationship, but secretly wishing that someone would look at him as a good person or something like that.
That's more or less how the train(wreck?) of inspiration went.
Dunno, it sounds good in my head, but maybe it's all silly.
Oh yeah, and
>Wouldn't that involve a lot of heartbreak
I kinda like drama, so yeah, tons of heartbreak.
But no sad ends, everything's gonna be daijobu.
I think the premise could work, but a few details need ironing out. You say he dates the girls to get to know them, but how does he know who they would be a good match with? I imagine he doesn't date the boys as well, so clearly he has some way to learn enough about people to play matchmaker without dating them.
The MC could be the playboy that the girls all like, but he knows he's not the right match for them, so he strings them along until he can devise some way to get them to recognize their true perfect match, who, for whatever reason, they may have overlooked at first.
He doesn't need to date them to get to know them, he can just learn about them like a normal person. No, he dates them because they all want him and he uses that to his advantage. This makes it, in my opinion, a little more plausible that he would date them all before hooking them up with other boys. It's part of the setup, part of his method. It's easier for him maneuver them into his benevolent schemes as Chad than trying to use more conventional matchmaking methods.
The personality elements look fine. Being afraid of a real relationship but still wanting some kind of validation from the girls he dates is perfectly believable. I would say to just make sure he seems outwardly confident and desirable. He's the playboy, so he obviously needs a certain level of charisma to make that work.
This is your idea, so you can do whatever you want with it, of course. These are just some of my suggestions. This can work, it just needs a little refinement (see: my suggestions) for all the elements to fully mesh together into a convincingly plausible story premise.
Yeah, that's more or less how it's gonna work out.
>You say he dates the girls to get to know them, but how does he know who they would be a good match with? I imagine he doesn't date the boys as well, so clearly he has some way to learn enough about people to play matchmaker without dating them.
Im gonna make him charismatic enough to befriend most of the boys and bully the ones that he can't.
That'll probably make it a bit more interesting.
>He doesn't need to date them to get to know them, he can just learn about them like a normal person. No, he dates them because they all want him and he uses that to his advantage. This makes it, in my opinion, a little more plausible that he would date them all before hooking them up with other boys. It's part of the setup, part of his method. It's easier for him maneuver them into his benevolent schemes as Chad than trying to use more conventional matchmaking methods.
Would making him have a sidekick that helps him with gathering info, matchmaking help? HE'D just date the ones that would too difficult to set up without direct contact, or the ones that are really dedicated yo getting him.
Would that make more sense?
>Would making him have a sidekick that helps him with gathering info, matchmaking help? HE'D just date the ones that would too difficult to set up without direct contact, or the ones that are really dedicated yo getting him.
Would that make more sense?
Yes, I'd say it would make sense. Maybe when he first started doing this he didn't collect intel or initially plan anything ahead, everything might have been more improvised. As he gets more comfortable doing it, though, it makes sense that he would become more calculated, and his methods would become more refined. It would be natural for him to start collecting intel prior to dates, and it's plausible that he would recruit someone to help him with that. It's also natural that he would only target specific girls. Not everyone needs a matchmaker, of course.
Again, these are just my personal suggestions, so feel free to take and leave pieces of at your discretion. There are plenty of ways you can make a good story by not using my advice at all, but these are the suggestions that came most naturally to me.
Recently tried writing again, but it feels more like a chore than a hobby, anyone have advice on making it fun again?
Write the scenes you want to write to start. And commit to writing a thousand words. By the end of it you should have a rhythm.
Don't force yourself to write. If you really want to do it, sit down and write something fun. Otherwise, get out of the house some, get some fresh air, whatever clears your head and makes you feel better. You'll get back into the swing of things at some point.
Hello. I've been trying my hand at writing after a long time without practice, and I thought I'd share something I've been working on. It's nothing all that special, but I'm hoping to improve and hopefully execute ideas better over time.
I'm still not sure if I should keep it in greentext format or switch over to proper prose. At first, greentext style felt a bit more direct and appropriate for light "drop in" casual humor, but I'm having second thoughts.
I really like it, they're all so cute the way they play around and act. The only part I didn't like was when it ended because there were no more cute misadventures of mamano orphans.
On an unrelated note, I LOVED Beyond the Cage, I was really happy when I found out you finished it. My heart warms up every time I get to the part where Nana gets him out of the city.
I'm glad you've enjoyed it. I plan on making (irregular) episodic updates for this one, with a new short story added every now and then, sort of like a Saturday morning cartoon.
This makes me happy. I was intrigued to find out there were still people out there who were waiting to see that story being finished even after all this time. The guilt eventually drove me to actually finish it, not just for me, but for all the people who still remembered it. Now I see I made the right choice, writing it to the end was quite a ride. I hope it turned out good enough for everyone.
And to think it was originally going to be just a simple, short greentext story.
>named after an inferior tank destroyer
Real review: this story made me puke rainbows. Too cute for me.
Your other one is different. You write good, not going to lie. But the whole men=2nd class citizens is a trigger for my American genes. No country exept Sweden/Germany would pass laws like that. Still, interesting story, but I can't connect because I'd've killed myself with a jagged rock or something after 2 years.
Hey again, I've just finished my next part of The Great Spider, a story of adventure featuring a young boy named after a month of the year.
Here's the new part: https://pastebin.com/adFRK3r6
I changed the titles to make this "part 3 of 4" and to make the introduction "part 1," even though that part is really short.
I've enjoyed writing this, and I'm hoping that it's improving now that we're actually getting into the meat of the story.
The next part will "wrap" this story up. I'm not sure when it will be done, but I hope to have it out within a week.
As much as I like writing these long multi-part stories, they are kind of tiring. I might end up writing a bunch of one-shot stories in the future, I have some ideas for those. Thanks for reading.
Thanks write friend I've enjoyed the story so far
Thanks for reading.
I tried to keep the theme of "surviving and refusing to surrender" to the main character throughout that story. There were many others in the world who had the same mindset as him, forming human resistance movements. In hindsight, perhaps I should've made that detail a bit more apparent.
I don't really remember why I picked this username
What's the status update with the Pax series?
Has anyone thought of writing a sort of traditional werewolf story, I mean, a woman is bitten by a werewolf, and becomes one on the full moon, but goes around raping instead of eatting of course.
So I'm still working on the last part of a long story, but after that I plan on writing up a bunch of one-shot stories.
I already have some ideas, but I'm also willing to take some requests. I'm not a super experienced /monster/ writer, but I feel that I can handle one-shot stories pretty decently.
What kind of things do you guys want? No holds barred, just ask away. If I like the idea, I'll do my best to write it in a fair amount of time.
>So I'm still working on the last part of a long story, but after that I plan on writing up a bunch of one-shot stories.
You're the manticore purification guy aren't you
How about a lonely anon that accidentally orders a DIY automaton kit from some shady website, and uses it it build his waifu?
>You're the manticore purification guy aren't you
No, he's not. That would be me.
Finish your shit, ultranigger.
Or don't, others suffering over petty shit is the only thing that amuses me anymore.
Can you post link?
I've been hearing rumors all over the place about writefags bailing left and right. All thanks to a petty fight on /jp/ and people bailing to /d/ and here.
Nothing that can't be fixed by more anons writing.
I really need to get my act together, because I spend too much time just fucking around between the important things. It took me two weeks to finish the last chapter of Heart of Darkness. Two weeks of telling myself that "I will finish it today" and not touching it, followed by finishing it in one sitting because it's a really short (and good) book. I need a schedule. Really.
Sorry, Anon. I don't have the original first two chapters anymore. The only version I have is the work in progress, which I won't share before it's finished.
But how bad is it?
Good to know.
It's been happening for a long time now. People there got tired of the constant shitposting and being treated as writing slaves. /jp/ is beyond saving.
I'm willing to bet there's more summer than original /mgt/ people there now. The nosedive was a long time coming.
They seem to think its been overblown. All I care about is that we still have writefags on here and on MGE. I don't want this community to die
It won't die as long as we treasure our resident writefags, not shitpost and ignore them like /mgt/ is doing. Archiving stories is also important.
How's the library of Ammit wiki going?
First off, I'm not into giants so I might be a bit biased and like the first one more.
Second, I'm pretty fucking terrible when it comes to giving criticism.
All in all, good shit.
I started writing a story about two weeks ago, so I'm also wondering whether you all prefer stories to be posted in parts or in a complete form.
It shouldn't take me too much longer to finish this one - Actually, I just need to proofread it. I think it's around 35-40 pages for anyone that's wondering.
I prefer the finished whole opposed to parts. I'm not a stickler for that shit just satisfy my heart boner
My muse gave me an idea about making it better, but fuck it, it's not perfect, but it still makes me feel good when I read it.
How I met my (Wolfgirl) wife
dem weapons grade feels tho..
This is MamanoMore from TFT isnt it
That was a really nice read. Well paced and written. Although one thing that always baffles me with these kind of stories is how well and fast the MC adjusts to being thrown into a completely alien world with no chance of return.
The dude surely had hopes and dreams, a family, friends or at least some form of social circle. And now suddenly he's been robbed of his free will enslaved by strange creatures threatened with death if he disobeys and everyone he knew and valued is just gone… And he's just rolling with it. Especially at the beginning there's little to no hope that his situation will ever change for the better but he seems to be pretty content with doing laundry for the rest of his what he has to assume short life.
I know incorporating that would turn this sweet love story into something really depressing and dark and would require it to be at least twice as long but that's just what I always keep thinking about when I read these kind of stories.
Just imagine being that dudes mom. Your son suddenly vanishes without a trace and you don't know weather or not he is dead. And you will never be able to really cope with it since there was neither a body nor a crime scene so you never know if he's truly dead regardless of how many years have passed. Even assuming he's still alive leaves you with the fact the he just went completely no contact with you and you are left wondering where you went wrong. Sounds agonizing as fuck.
I'm probably overthinking this way too much but that's just something that always stops me from truly relating to these kind of MCs.
This. This so much.
Just have the guy be a manwhore like in those doujins where the guy goes to a world where sexual gender roles are reversed.
The casual acceptance of being a sudden slave is actually what my muse made me think of right before I posted it. I was just a lazy fuck for now wanting to rewrite or basically add in an additional 30+ pages or two weeks worth of writing. And yeah, it would've had some dark psychological shit in it for sure.
Thank you for the honest criticism. I get a heart boner off of that, so I'll do my best to get better and post better shit!
I will say that I purposely didn't nail it shut so that I can do a follow up or sequel down the road. (Specifically addressing being stuck in an alternate world actually - while still being a feel good read)
I have no idea what you're referencing. This >>308005 is my first mamano story.
Side note: I'm already working on plot line for a new and unrelated story.
And again, thank you for for the criticism!
I didnt like how 3dpd the monsters were in this story, the fact that mc was enslaved and had been threatened to have his balls cut off and him being completely fine with it was pretty baffling to me, and I know monsters aren't allowed to be in the wrong but the guy near the end was pretty justified in his actions
Pretty great anon, I love this kind of settings. I hope you do more with it.
Hi. Been writing a story since time ago that spawned from a couple other stories heavily based on MGE's setting rather than only the characters. There's no requirement to read any before any, but they still connect to each other and characters return in each.
>Do lawyers come from Hell?
This one's about a kid meeting a demon before he even knew how to write. The demon then patiently waits till he learns how to write his name to form a contract, and goes from there.
> Don't Doubt Druella
This one takes place after the above, though isn't tied to it other than the returning characters. It involves a Lord Inquisitor being invited to a dinner with Druella and her retinue, to find out that the rumors about her were false and she's just some manner of moeblob. It progresses from there as the Lord Inquisitor starts picking up clues about the retinue and why exactly he was invited in the first place.
>All's Fair in Love and War
This is the first chapter of a story involving a lilim put at the helm of managing a nation under the promise that she'll find a great husband in the shape of a fairy tale her mother told to her as a kid. Eventually a candidate arrives, but it turns out that it was a paladin from the bordering Order nation who almost killed her. She was naive enough to not have a standing army figuring that the demonic energy in her demon realm would protect from any such things, and now has to figure out what's happening, why now of all times, and to attempt turning things around post-haste. Things like naively hoping to work things out peacefully and absolute inexperience in these matters, along with the base inexperience coming from being relatively young limit her at the start, but as she starts racking up experience and power, worse things start happening involving entities which put her power to absolute shame.
All the chapters are there along with what other little stories I've written in the meantime. I've just finished writing chapter 18 and am fairly close to ending the story overall, so there's no risk of it reaching the triple digits in chapter count.
>That first story
>constantly fighting a losing battle to save shotas and young men from being husbando'd by demons like you were
Being Frigidarius is suffering
That's actually a really compelling character dude, good shit.
>kill the demons
Boom, Problem solved. I'd lure it out by threatening to kill the kid.
I've played too much Dark Heresy.
That was nice, if a bit too fast paced.
Ariah best girl though. I still need her backstory.
Do not bully the demons
I was debating on whether or not I should put a bit more of Ariah's backstory in. I'll probably do a one-off at some point, but let me just say, it's dark. Really dark.
oh shit, I almost never check these threads.
I really use TFT as my archive because I can do all the formatting I like and have pictures in line with the text. I tried using pastebin for a story or two, but I'm a slut for italics and stuff.
Jexx started posting our collab story there, so he slutshamed me into it
Final part of The Great Spider: https://pastebin.com/A2ieGQHN
I had fun writing this, but I think I'm going to stick with one-shots for the foreseeable future. I think I like shorter, self-contained stories the most.
Hey, I liked your idea so I wrote this: https://pastebin.com/cFsDVLFW
It may not be exactly what you expected, but I hope it's good, or at least decent.
Robots are great, aren't they?
That robot story was top-tier comfy. I perhaps wanted to see what she would have become like after she uploaded herself the the internet but as it stands it's a really nice little one-shot.
As for The Great Spider, I quite enjoyed that as well. Your writing style's easy to follow, but it's got a lot of character to it. Also January and Delilah are a cute.
Any tips for an aspiring writefag? I've got this setting idea that's been in my head for a few months that I've wanted to turn into a huge story, but the problem is that I've never written anything in my life that wasn't a research paper. I really like the setting and I'd hate to not do it JUSTICE simply because of lack of experience, and at the same time I've only got a vague idea of a direction to go. Is it just about starting to write and seeing where the spirit moves you?
>Is it just about starting to write
Essentially yes. When you start working out for example you don't make a big elaborate training plan before you even took your first step or pulled your first weight. You do a some elemental training first to see where you're at what you need to work on and start from that basis.
That would be my tip for you. Just start writing it down and most importantly finish it. And don't pressure yourself too much. It's just a first draft nobody except you needs to read it and you have all the time in the world to change it. Once you're done you can work through that first draft and start thinking about pacing believable character motivations the right amount of expositionary elements or whatever else you want to / need to work on. You could always start with the theory part first but in my opinion in order to find your own voice and style and feel secure in your writing is just to write write write. And at least for me starting is always the most difficult part so I'd start with that to get it out of the way and to not overwhelm yourself with all the finer elements of story writing you can read about in theory.
Also start reading stories you enjoy more consciously (if you're not doing that already). Think about what exactly you enjoy about them and try to better understand these elements. How are the dialogues set up? How did the writer make the characters motivations clear to the audience? What purpose for the story serve the different characters? How does the narrative perspective influence the story? How do characters change throughout the story? Do they do it in an believable way? How can you divide the story into its different acts? Does that setup make sense? etc etc. In my opinion you can learn a lot just from reading other peoples material.
But yeah bottom line is just start writing keep at it and critically read and examine your and other peoples stuff. If you make an effort to improve you will eventually get better but first you need a basis on which you can improve on. So have fun and start typing away man.
The story was going great, I loved it. Then I got to the end, looked at the title and saw "one-shot", and became sad.
Wrote a short story about a young Soldier Beetle and apples. No smut or anything, just something sweet. Enjoy!
Thanks for the feedback Anon, it means a lot
Ha, yeah it was a somewhat sudden ending. My reasoning was that, since it's "your" robot, you get to imagine what happens afterwards. Then again, maybe I'm just a lazy fucker who doesn't like writing past 7k words. Anyway, glad you liked it
That was nice. I've always had a soft spot for Beetles, and the one you wrote was absolutely adorable
Reposting from the best girl thread.
A long time ago I wrote this https://pastebin.com/mYJyysvy , one of my first writefaggotry attempts.
Recently finished a sequel of sorts https://pastebin.com/tLcQrzQb , now with 100% more lewd.
Criticism gratefully accepted.
The first one was nice but
>Not leaving your phone on vibrate only at all times
Such an amateur.
Also, why not make an account and save your stuff, my dude? That'll make it easier for people to find your stuff.
About the Great Spider
Well done. I was looking forward to the resolution of this. Was not disappointed.
And a comfy robot story with happy open ending made me smile.
v this is the one you're looking for
Thank you for posting this
I enjoyed the story, I like your depiction of both the Order and the Demon Army in making them morally grey instead of taking the easy way out and making them completely black and white
Not sure how to go about this, but would you guys mind reading what I've written so far? I'm not sure I like the writing style, and if I'm doing two narratives at the same time alright.
It's about an Arachnae and a guy trying to get to University and dealing with all the shit that entails. Or will be, if feedback is positive.
I liked it, the perspective switching kept it interesting watching them guess at each other's intentions. I'd like to see where you take it.